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  1. Eldoria

    Need help regarding dark and sensitive themes.

    Dude @L1aei what do you think?
  2. Eldoria

    A common misconception about "show it, don't tell it" is that provides super-detailed chapter...

    A common misconception about "show it, don't tell it" is that provides super-detailed chapter that ruins the pacing. Writing details isn't the same as showing; telling can be super-detailed. Showing is about leaving interpretation to the reader by providing narrative clues or necessary...
  3. Eldoria

    Not as bad as I thought?

    My fiction remains niche on RR. I've only received two ratings after more than half a year on there without a single review. Comments are more along the lines of "TFTC." I haven't received any hate comments yet. But the good news is that views are growing organically, albeit slowly. The only...
  4. Eldoria

    First-time author seeking feedback on sentimental fantasy (orphan MC)

    Well, showing isn't about providing a detailed story. This is a misconception. Showing is about leaving interpretation to the reader by providing narrative clues or necessary information. The narration, "My head is throbbing, it feels like I'm being stabbed by needles..." is a concise showing...
  5. Eldoria

    Sorry, you're out of luck... releasing fiction on a busy day.

    Sorry, you're out of luck... releasing fiction on a busy day.
  6. Eldoria

    First-time author seeking feedback on sentimental fantasy (orphan MC)

    Well, I've read 2 chapters as a casual reader who happened to pass by and read them once to gauge the immersion. My general impression is, even though you use the first POV, your narrative is still light-telling to convey the plot, characters, and worldbuilding through the MC's internal...
  7. Eldoria

    Well, you know what kind of fiction I publish... and you can always check it out at any time.

    Well, you know what kind of fiction I publish... and you can always check it out at any time.
  8. Eldoria

    My fiction is just an ant that is not worth paying attention to.

    My fiction is just an ant that is not worth paying attention to.
  9. Eldoria

    If you have time, could you please give me some feedback

    Honestly, I was quite surprised to find Albrecht as the MC. During the first two chapters, he didn't have the qualities of a narrative protagonist. The problem? He has very little screen time during those two chapters, and he's passive. If you want him to be a passive protagonist, you need to...
  10. Eldoria

    Feedback wanted for first few chapters of unposted story

    Well, immersion isn't about how the MC thinks. It's about making the reader feel like the MC. You're free to explain the MC's thoughts as long as they're relevant to your plot. The problem isn't the MC's thoughts, but how they're narrated so the reader can feel them. I don't want to change...
  11. Eldoria

    I won't be creating an open feedback thread. I don't have the energy and time to provide...

    I won't be creating an open feedback thread. I don't have the energy and time to provide feedback to anyone. I respect those who are dedicated to providing feedback to everyone selflessly. But I'm too picky and fussy about giving feedback.
  12. Eldoria

    Dude, I'm not trying to compete with anyone. I'm just stating what I read and felt. Sorry, I...

    Dude, I'm not trying to compete with anyone. I'm just stating what I read and felt. Sorry, I didn't see your feedback earlier. When I wrote it... the answer was still blank. I think the OP would still appreciate any feedback from everyone if she/he're genuinely interested in learning.
  13. Eldoria

    Feedback wanted for first few chapters of unposted story

    Well, I position myself as a casual reader who just happened to pass by and read it once to gauge immersion. My brief impression is that you managed to make me read two chapters without a break (without repeating). Your chapters are easy to read because they have a paragraph format that is...
  14. Eldoria

    Writing complex fiction teaches us how to complete a work as an author. Narrating fiction that...

    Writing complex fiction teaches us how to complete a work as an author. Narrating fiction that resonates with readers teaches us a lifelong lesson as a storyteller.
  15. Eldoria

    If you have time, could you please give me some feedback

    Well, I'm giving feedback as a casual reader. I usually only read once to gauge immersion. But this time I relaxed the reading restrictions by reading the chapter several times. I only finished 2 chapters. Here are my honest impression: (1) Your paragraph format is too long. Long paragraphs...
  16. Eldoria

    It's a light greeting and a test. If she answers... maybe she's a human. If not maybe she's a...

    It's a light greeting and a test. If she answers... maybe she's a human. If not maybe she's a bot or just a quiet (extreme) person.
  17. Eldoria

    Hello. Welcome. Your name sounds natural.

    Hello. Welcome. Your name sounds natural.
  18. Eldoria

    I'm proud to be a niche author even though engagement feels salty even sometimes bitter...

    I'm proud to be a niche author even though engagement feels salty even sometimes bitter. :blob_teary: I'm lucky... my name has even been immortalized in the work of an epic author @Rachel_Leia_Cole :blob_aww:
  19. Eldoria

    How did you start writing fiction in your early journey as a new author?

    Journey of A New Author... Every author begins writing fiction with the first ink stroke (or finger tap). Even best-selling authors... began their journey by learning to write fiction. Therefore, what differentiates between stablished authors and new authors is simply "experience." When it...
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