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What?! Who made that rule?! You don't have to finish writing fiction to find out if your narrative is effective (for readers) or not.

Is this just reading or is it also giving feedback?! In fact... casual readers may have already read your fiction even if they are silent readers.

Agree. We need more polite and respectful people like him. :blob_aww:

What's the best and worst feedback you've ever received as an author?

Dude, please include a link in the thread. Signature is not available on mobile.

Well, after reading 3 chapters (including the prologue) in once reading to gauge immersion, I'm giving you feedback as a reader. My general impression... your chapters are quite immersive. If these chapters were read by a casual, casual reader, they might be hypnotized and feel as if they are...

It doesn't work. Your narrative is more like meta-commentary, not like a live stream. I suggest you study cinematic narrative. Treat your scenes like a movie. Manage scene blocks, transitions, narrative camera angles, and character movement. Imagine writing the narrative like a director...

Well, I've read 8 full chapters to gauge immersion as a causal reader. My overall impression is that your chapters feel less immersive or flat even though you use the first POV (which is supposed to make the reader feel like the MC through the "I am" narrator). Why? Because you use the first...

It is indeed a powerful secret that can determine the direction of world history (or story) just like the secret of One Piece that can make world history turn into a pirate's journey to find a legendary treasure.

Well, sometimes readers need to play dumb when reading fiction. We can't enjoy a story if we're constantly critical, saying:

What editor? Grammar editor? Well, Grammarly can certainly do it, but it's also limited. Grammarly just corrects spelling errors according to UK standards. It even corrects US spellings to UK. Furthermore, Grammarly isn't yet capable of correcting ambiguous sentence and paragraph structures...

Well, I take my words back. I was hoping this fiction would at least focus to a family (mother and younger sister). Turns out I was wrong. This is a mainstream isekai with mystery elements. The mother and younger sister in the prologue turned out to be random characters irrelevant to the MC's...

Why are people giving feedback outside of the OP's question? Sorry, dude. You are unlucky. I only read the prologue once to gauge immersion. Here is my honest impression. How was the pacing? The pacing was quite smooth. The flow and scene transitions are smooth. However, there were still...

Dude, I don't understand why you wrote a prologue like this? The beginning of this prologue feels like a random character report. The narrative doesn't even mention the protagonist's name, and the interactions with the other characters feel flat. Are you deliberately boring the reader before...

I didn't expect this abrupt transition pattern to be used here. I've reviewed fiction that uses such abrupt transitions. Is the author too lazy to transition between scenes? You could implement more subtle transitions through symbolism such as nature, time, memory, etc. Or, if subtle...

Dude, you're so obsessed with ratings. Trust me! Ratings won't help improve your narrative. Those just please you or disappoint you. Of course, there are exceptions... if you're implementing the quantitative research methodology.

Think about the problem formulation that forms the core of the main conflict throughout the arc. You'll notice that works as large as sagas have thematic divisions of arcs. Arcs in One Piece are structured around adventures on specific islands or countries. Arcs in Naruto are structured around...

You should put this thread in the feedback session.

Dude, I'm sorry. One comment you mention is a scammer who praises you and then offers a hidden scheme. If you encounter comments like that, please just report them. They are evil people who use flattery to trap innocent people. Well, I've read 3 of your chapters in full (plus fourth chapter...