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For me, the prologue = chapter 1. The prologue is the entry point into the story, containing the story's premise. I didn't give it a number 0 because the prologue is mandatory to understand the narrative as a whole. Meanwhile, the epilogue is the story's resolution, containing the story's...

Honestly, I don't see any significant differences between the 3 versions of this chapter. All chapters have a similar characteristic, the "guide narrator" where the narrator tries to explain the plot and its interpretation. This slows down the pacing because the flow of narrative time stops just...

Dude, you're finally releasing your fiction... didn't you mention in the last thread that you were doubtful about releasing chapters regularly?!

Hmm.. where is dark joke or dark comedy?

I'm a fussy nerd when it comes to reactions. Yesterday, I was a bit upset because a new member didn't respond to my feedback at all... and instead asked for feedback in an open feedback thread. Well, I'm sensitive about that. To me, reactions aren't just about emojis, but about social...

What about misunderstanding? Cid is the best

Well, maybe my judgment is biased this time. I already suspected the diary style was 'probably' intentional. But when I remember the diary syndrome in other fiction... it feels odd. In short... I don't mind if you don't accept my feedback. But could you explain why you gave a laughing...

Don't treat your world as a static object that's observed. Make it alive, like an organism, interacting with your characters. Let the air breathe, a cold gust making the skin creep. Let the door rattle, the wood creak making the ears ring. Let the lamp greet, the light glow making the pupils...

Okay, after reading six chapters in one sitting without rereading—purely to measure immersion as a casual reader—I’m fairly confident that your chapters are still trapped in what is commonly known in first-person POV as the diary syndrome. What is diary syndrome? It is a way of telling the...

You can use italics for character thoughts (monologues). But... In practice, that theory is quite difficult to apply in web novels. This is because web novel readers can come from any chapter, whether the beginning, middle, or end. As a result, new readers don't have a grasp of character...

I'll give you a little immersive recipe based on my research... an immersive narrative is one that cleverly hides the narrator's voice and lets the characters interact in their world so that the reader can see or feel the scene in their own head. Filter words like "he said...", "she felt..."...

Why do you want my feedback? You can see... my feedback is so honest that authors who aren't mentally prepared might get discouraged or frustrated. The last new author I gave feedback to didn't even respond, acting as if I "never existed." In the past... a new author even deleted his account...

If you include that weird scene in your story, my parents will spank me. I'm just a fussy little girl. :blob_teary:

I added it to my reading list... now I'm going to read sleep. I'm really sleepy. Lol:sleep:

If you ask for my feedback... my feedback is too honest that it can hurt authors who are not mentally prepared for criticism. :blob_aww:

I know implementing my advice is almost like rewriting chapters. It's exhausting (I've been there, too). If you're having trouble applying to "show it" to every scene... just pick the important scenes that need to be highlighted to create a more lively, immersive narrative. That will lighten...