Competitive straightforward biased blunt reviewer here

[AliceMoonvale]

Misogyny? Anyone who posts those kirby ass pics aren't even human to begin with much less even women.

Sorry, I'm dyslexic. All I'm reading is that you want more kirbo ass pics.
Wish granted.

 

[Nolff]

Ahhh I was confused. I didn't see the Fat L in there.
But no, it's there, in case of an emergency.

Wear that clock, king.

No, no, you misunderstoo. I don't know how I attained this. And now I am of unspecified gender, but I am also an attractive male.

 

[Conqueror_Quack]

Sorry, I'm dyslexic. All I'm reading is that you want more kirbo ass pics.
Wish granted.

 

[Roeyachi]

@Roeyachi

Good start, nice pacing. Easy to differentiate which is which. Nice. I can't comment further, because I haven't looked past chapter 1, so you only get this much. Though, I must say, there's not much interesting thing going on with the writing. It's just... Felt like I've seen it multiple times somewhere else. As if it's a modified imitation. As long as there's something interesting happening in the novel, I'll bite once in a while. 6.9/10.

Alrighty!
Oh yeah, for @Playerkartik. You survived my Unleash because I don't think you're worth the energy. It is only pity gaze I'm giving you from now on, as I see you made of a boy who dived head first into the sea of literacy.

Thank you for taking the time to read!

 

[Nolff]

Thank you for taking the time to read!

No prob. You dipped your toes here, might as well read it.

 

[AliceMoonvale]

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Neat, you also steal the emojis I use, like jaymark sometimes.
Imitation is flattering

 

[Peagreene]

@Peagreene

Both of these are short stories?

...

Incredible.

Short stories are different from novels. They don't serve endings or clarity, they serve meaning. And you, my friend, have become my favorite short-stories author. 8.5/10. The first story, I don't really understand, but I feel like I missed something, and I'm going back for it. The second one? Realistic, decent, but good enough. 7.9/10

Sick, thanks dude.

 

[LastMinami]

El curandero está graznando. ¡Rápido! ¡Que alguien le dé un ganso con el que pelear!
[USUARIO=202311]@Fairemont[/USUARIO]

Sobre tu novela.

Sólo he terminado un capítulo tuyo. Todo lo que podría decidir es: Pon una publicidad que recomiende al lector que no quiero que se rompa su inmersión que mire hace otro lado. La parte del glosario está bien, ayuda a aclarar cual confusión que puede ocurrir. ¿Pero el parloteo tuyo al final? Te sugiero que le pongas algo para no tener que leerlo y malcriarme. Sé que te concentrarás en la parte de las chicas mágicas, pero que te explica el esquema de tu historia es como echar un vistazo al backstage del concierto. 7/10.
Para [USUARIO=247089]@LastMinami[/USUARIO] y [USUARIO=206528]@c37[/USUARIO], espera hasta que me despierte a la mañana siguiente. Está muerto en la noche en mi costo y tengo mucho sueño.

Ah, I get it now, sure bro, thanks a lot for reminding me. Tomorrow, I'll ask the gods to bring you sweet dreams.

 

[TinaMigarlo]

Reported for racism, you will soon be banned. Tell the RoyalRoad people who sent you there.

yes. "Duck Lives Matter"

while I climb onto your shoulders and look into your beautiful eyes then strip you naked and lick your abs

killing two birds with one stone.
get a room, to, fuck a duck?

 

[Genesis_King]

Yeah so, just drop whatever you want, I'll bite.

Gonna rate it from 1 to 10. Discretion advised.

I'll be blunt with whatever I'll say, and it's biased. Even if I somehow helped, do not rely on my feedbacks.

Alr, let the hell let loose.

https://www.scribblehub.com/series/2143036/echoes-of-home/
This is my novel. Please read and tell how you feel as a new reader with no prior engagement. I have taken a few pieces of advice before and improvised somewhat, but I want a fresh look from a new reader. Also
https://www.scribblehub.com/series/2166023/march-of-the-frozen-dead/
This is also another book, please see if you enjoy it

 

[TheGreatOne6000]

https://www.scribblehub.com/series/2164749/a-promise-from-me-to-you/

This is my book

 

[treze]

Dream Dungeon – Earth’s Induction Trial LitRPG

Seventeen-year-old Mike Valencia only feels free when he’s asleep. Until now. Every night, at exactly 10:00pm, a faceless System drags him into the Dream Dungeon — a deadly evaluation designed to determine whether Earth deserves induction into the multiverse. Each floor is a test. Each fight...

www.scribblehub.com

 

[Toshiyuki]

Yeah so, just drop whatever you want, I'll bite.

Gonna rate it from 1 to 10. Discretion advised.

I'll be blunt with whatever I'll say, and it's biased. Even if I somehow helped, do not rely on my feedbacks.

Alr, let the hell let loose.

Alright, well I’ve only got the first 3 chapters + a prologue right now, but I think that and the title should be enough to atleast get an understanding of what the story is about and where its headed. My story is titled Pharmakon: When I Dream I Wake Up in Another World. It is an isekai, but i created it as a response to isekai slop cause I’m getting sick of such an interesting genre being ruined with slop. The basic premise is that the mc Yuto travels between the real world and a fantasy world, with the two worlds being tied to one another in more ways than just Yuto. I’m open to whatever you have to say about my work. Thank you very much for the criticism!

book link: https://www.scribblehub.com/series/2178986/pharmakon-when-i-dream-i-wake-up-in-another-world/

 

[Lmae]

Altered One

As an Inquisitor, Casimir has the pleasure of dealing with Weavers. His so-called intellectual betters, blessed with the power of controlling Aether, the master of all elements. But despite all those years of schooling, so many of them can’t seem to pay their damn licensing fees on time! Jett...

www.scribblehub.com

 

[Nolff]

https://www.scribblehub.com/series/2143036/echoes-of-home/
This is my novel. Please read and tell how you feel as a new reader with no prior engagement. I have taken a few pieces of advice before and improvised somewhat, but I want a fresh look from a new reader. Also
https://www.scribblehub.com/series/2166023/march-of-the-frozen-dead/
This is also another book, please see if you enjoy it

https://www.scribblehub.com/series/2164749/a-promise-from-me-to-you/

This is my book

Dream Dungeon – Earth’s Induction Trial LitRPG

Seventeen-year-old Mike Valencia only feels free when he’s asleep. Until now. Every night, at exactly 10:00pm, a faceless System drags him into the Dream Dungeon — a deadly evaluation designed to determine whether Earth deserves induction into the multiverse. Each floor is a test. Each fight...

www.scribblehub.com

Alright, well I’ve only got the first 3 chapters + a prologue right now, but I think that and the title should be enough to atleast get an understanding of what the story is about and where its headed. My story is titled Pharmakon: When I Dream I Wake Up in Another World. It is an isekai, but i created it as a response to isekai slop cause I’m getting sick of such an interesting genre being ruined with slop. The basic premise is that the mc Yuto travels between the real world and a fantasy world, with the two worlds being tied to one another in more ways than just Yuto. I’m open to whatever you have to say about my work. Thank you very much for the criticism!

book link: https://www.scribblehub.com/series/2178986/pharmakon-when-i-dream-i-wake-up-in-another-world/

Altered One

As an Inquisitor, Casimir has the pleasure of dealing with Weavers. His so-called intellectual betters, blessed with the power of controlling Aether, the master of all elements. But despite all those years of schooling, so many of them can’t seem to pay their damn licensing fees on time! Jett...

www.scribblehub.com

Was not expecting another batch of books, but okay.

I'll read it when I have the time, alr bois? See ya in about... A day, I guess.

 

[c37]

Was not expecting another batch of books, but okay.

I'll read it when I have the time, alr bois? See ya in about... A day, I guess.

hey don't forget about me.

 

[Hans.Trondheim]

@Nolff I'll submit this here. Be as brutal as you want; I'd like to know which path I should take after.

The Human Saint is Bored, so I was Summoned to Another World

A man wakes up one day in another world, summoned by a girl who claims she’s a ‘Great Saint’—all because of boredom. Nicknamed ‘Kuro,’ he soon discovers he’s not the typical isekai protagonist: he has no powers and has no ‘cheat skills’ to rely on. How will...

www.scribblehub.com

 

[Nolff]

@Nolff I'll submit this here. Be as brutal as you want; I'd like to know which path I should take after.

The Human Saint is Bored, so I was Summoned to Another World

A man wakes up one day in another world, summoned by a girl who claims she’s a ‘Great Saint’—all because of boredom. Nicknamed ‘Kuro,’ he soon discovers he’s not the typical isekai protagonist: he has no powers and has no ‘cheat skills’ to rely on. How will...

www.scribblehub.com

Bro, you got like literally over 100k words worth of four manga-sized novels. You got way more beta reader there than here.

If you insist, however, then don't mind me... Hehe.

 

[Hans.Trondheim]

Bro, you got like literally over 100k words worth of four manga-sized novels. You got way more beta reader there than here.

If you insist, however, then don't mind me... Hehe.

I have no beta reader nowadays. And I'm submitting the work now because I'd like to confirm something I've been mulling about for years.

 

[babywrath]

Do your worst but don't insult my mother, there are limits.

Great Journey: Whims of Fate