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  1. Eldoria

    I’d like some feedback on a book I’m working on

    Honestly... your chapter still maintains a distance between the reader and the story. So I just say, "Oh... this happened, there was a magical fish" instead of "Wow... the magical fish was really amazing." Why? Because you position the reader as a neutral observer instead of bringing the reader...
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    Hello, sleeping handsome...

    Hello, sleeping handsome...
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    When the author (narrator) disappears from the narrative... leaving only the breathing text...

    When the author (narrator) disappears from the narrative... leaving only the breathing text, there is no longer any barrier between the reader and the character. So, you can feel the character' breath in your mind.
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    BLOODLINES... Draft #2 first chapters

    As a casual reader, I only read once and didn't repeat, to gauge immersion. My impression, honestly, is that I stopped in the middle of chapter 1 because your chapter was too dense. The POV jumps around without smooth transitions. It causes the pacing to be disrupted. Furthermore, I don't even...
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    @SouthernMaiden You don't need to apologize. There's no harm in sharing this image. I was just...

    @SouthernMaiden You don't need to apologize. There's no harm in sharing this image. I was just kidding. Well, my tone may have been formal. So my intention wasn't conveyed. I probably need to rework my communication skills, too. Lol
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    @Racosharko it's great. She posted what you posted. Is this fate?

    @Racosharko it's great. She posted what you posted. Is this fate?
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    Edit: I may have misunderstood and you may have misunderstood too. We are standing on a...

    Edit: I may have misunderstood and you may have misunderstood too. We are standing on a misunderstanding. Lol :blob_joy:
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    Take it easy, dude. If others misunderstand my message about misunderstanding, it probably...

    Take it easy, dude. If others misunderstand my message about misunderstanding, it probably means my message is right. It's a paradox. Misunderstanding doesn't invalidate other arguments. So, I choose to stay calm and relaxed.
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    Balancing finished stories with ongoing projects

    This is difficult for me... prioritizing fiction is more feasible than working on multiple fictions in parallel. I have a hard time thinking about various fictional simulations by working on multiple fictions in parallel. You see... each fiction has its own story logic, different characters...
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    Well, maybe we could be volunteer moderators. @Racosharko is a kind volunteer moderator.

    Well, maybe we could be volunteer moderators. @Racosharko is a kind volunteer moderator.
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    Well, you might be referring to another reality. Deviance always exists. That's why there are...

    Well, you might be referring to another reality. Deviance always exists. That's why there are boundaries called rules and ethics.
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    Why not? I believe we're here for a relatively shared interest (fiction and art). Of course...

    Why not? I believe we're here for a relatively shared interest (fiction and art). Of course, there are always exceptions, such as the bots that may have caused database connection issues over the past few days.
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    I'll never get tired of saying this... over and over again. Besides using polite language...

    I'll never get tired of saying this... over and over again. Besides using polite language, threads should use a problem question to prevent the topic from drifting into a multiverse of infinite possibilities. I miss @Hoshino when that person'd admonish other members not to stray from the topic.
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    Well, you can ignore my message. I might be wrong. Despite what happens on the field...

    Well, you can ignore my message. I might be wrong. Despite what happens on the field... sometimes good intentions aren't enough to save you from conflict.
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    You're right. I don't want to blame the thread creator. I even think the thread was actually...

    You're right. I don't want to blame the thread creator. I even think the thread was actually quite well-intentioned. However, inappropriate language can potentially be interpreted differently by other users. You know... misunderstandings are one of the causes of conflict. My advice only...
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    This is the second time your thread has been blocked... you really should improve your public...

    This is the second time your thread has been blocked... you really should improve your public communication in the online forum. Use polite and friendly language. Use appropriate terminology and avoid arguments. You may have ignored my advice. However, the consequences are real.
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    Could there be an drop/exit interview?

    Some people only use the bookmark feature to mark fiction they're about to read. Then, when they find it disappointing or not to their liking, they drop it from their reading list. I've never dropped a work, but other members have mentioned it as useful for blocking the works from the latest...
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    You're right... but there's a difference between discussing it in public and private. I might...

    You're right... but there's a difference between discussing it in public and private. I might discuss the issue in detail... privately or in my writing. Discussing it anywhere might make others uncomfortable, even though freedom of speech is a right of every individual. Nevertheless, I respect...
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    Has the account been deleted?! Some members (or one person with multiple accounts) might be...

    Has the account been deleted?! Some members (or one person with multiple accounts) might be trying to bring back bad habits by manipulating engagement here. It's truly pathetic. They're so busy chasing engagement... that they've lost the joy of writing fiction.
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    To be honest, the history of the US and other countries around the world is filled with dark...

    To be honest, the history of the US and other countries around the world is filled with dark facts that might make us feel unwell all day, like slavery, racism, and extreme hatred of certain ethnicities that led to genocide (Germany during WWII?). But I don't want to discuss history or...
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