Living prose breathes with the reader's heartbeat.
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Oh... now I might know why these people keep putting feedback request threads outside the feedback section.
Because feedback threads placed outside the feedback section will appear in the forum trending on the SH homepage.
Conversely, feedback threads in the feedback section will not appear. It's a bug.
I agree with a fan... as a teenager, you tend to care about Naruto's idealism. But as an adult, you tend to understand Pain's realism.
In the real world, the realities of geopolitics, nations, and war more closely follow Pain's logic, especially regarding the deterrent effect.
Write POV based on your character's voice. Let your character's soul guide you as you narrate what your character is doing 'right now' in their world.
If readers say, "protagonist 'should' have done this or that..." Congratulations! You've created an authentic character that even readers found unsettling and irritating.
"Good prose is like a windowpane." - George Orwell
I stopped reading shoujo not because of the cliche tropes. It's just that... I hate it when the FMC gets taken by a random guy even though the fictional premise uses "family" labels: mother-daughter, father-daughter, brother-sister, and the like. I may be childish, but when reading fiction, I treat the FMC as my daughter. My feeling of my daughter being taken by someone else is too uneasy.
Captain Reynard the Idealistic Knight
The relationship between author, fiction, and reader is like a symbolic contract. The author provides a narrative to the reader. Readers know the narrative is "fictional," but they are willing to be bound by the "lie" to achieve a sense of experience.
Reading fiction means allowing the lie to "hypnotize" you. So, you can experience the "truth" of the sense of experience the author has crafted through narrative.
Love, loss and regret are emotional fictional themes.
Narrating a child's first POV is one of the most difficult challenges in writting. Why?
Because you need to "lower your intelligence" to the child's level. You can't use literary prose to narrate characters, worldbuilding, and plot.
You need to lower your language to be simple and imaginative, appropriate to a child's psychological development. So, the POV feels authentically child's voice.
I want to write a tribute chapter inspired by your style—especially the single-mom theme. In this chapter, Avaris will be a single mother raising Arin and Lysa. My main character, Ilyas, will be shown as dead (this will be a non-canon chapter). I’m also thinking of mentioning your name in the author’s note.
Is it okay if I do this?
I knew that you'd be the first or atleast one of the first few to reply to that poll.
Which is worse getting a low rating or getting no rating at all?
Pray for world peace...
When you write a narrative, you tend to write "what happened this chapter?"
When you edit a chapter, you tend to read, analyze, refine and rewrite, "how do the scenes in this chapter provide a good reading experience for the reader?"
It makes sense why Pain was considered the peak arc.
Instead of positioning Pain as a foreign enemy... the author instead made Pain Jiraya's student, a victim of war, and a senior (to Naruto). The conflict isn't just epic and ideological, but also intimate and emotional.
Readers may disagree, but they can't deny that his wounds are real. That's why I consider Pain as a gold standard for main antagonists.
There are 4 types of feedback for fiction:
(1) Content feedback (analysis of characters, worldbuilding, plot and conflict).
(2) Storytelling feedback (analysis of POV, pacing, hook, etc).
(3) Engagement feedback (packaging, release, and promotion).
(4) Language feedback (prose, grammar and spelling).
Comparing my narrative quality of the early chapters with the latest ones and concluding that there was a significant gap... making me happy and tearful.
Happy because I saw progress in my narrative. Tearful because I needed more editing.
If 4 factors could converge in a story:
I'm pretty sure... a work would explode quickly and start a new trend.
Unfortunately, 4 factors rarely align. Most works only fulfill 1 or 2 factors at a time.
It's why masterpieces often become hidden gems. While, other works can quickly go viral.
I love reading poetic prose with personification, as atmospheres such as:
Silence speaks louder than screams...
Mist carry the breath of changing eras...
The sun peeks through the leaves...
The moon bears witness between you and me...
Blood never lies... -
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