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    Fighting sequence against 'Mini-Boss'

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    @Tsuru I'd like to quote @Nevafrost her statement yesterday... it went something like this (if I...

    @Tsuru I'd like to quote @Nevafrost her statement yesterday... it went something like this (if I remember correctly): SHF members each have their unique personalities, and sometimes we just need to empathize with their characters. Of course, there are exceptions, especially those who are truly...
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    Don't get me wrong! I respect Alice as a whole person. She's quite nice. She's quite funny, even...

    Don't get me wrong! I respect Alice as a whole person. She's quite nice. She's quite funny, even a little cute (if you look at how cheerful she is). She's generous enough to give her time and attention to give feedback to a stranger like me. In real life, she's still nicer than people who I've...
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    But I held back, sighed, and tried to empathize. That's just the way Alice is. She just likes to...

    But I held back, sighed, and tried to empathize. That's just the way Alice is. She just likes to joke (too much). She's not very good at responding to situations (or reading the minds of her conversation partners). I see the fictional zombie apocalypse diary book as reflecting some of her...
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    I felt uncomfortable when Alice laughed at my feedback and then laughed back just because I used...

    I felt uncomfortable when Alice laughed at my feedback and then laughed back just because I used onomatopoeia for a heavy and emotional narrative. It felt like someone was mocking your work despite your best efforts. Honestly, it was annoying... a sensitive member like me might be offended.
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    @Tsuru I guess... it's just that I get annoyed when people use the wrong emoji (especially the...

    @Tsuru I guess... it's just that I get annoyed when people use the wrong emoji (especially the laughing emoji) to respond to inappropriate situations. But I'm not only ones.
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    Feedback for Handling Sensitive Content

    Thank you for your honest feedback. :blob_salute: :blob_aww: Thank you for your honest feedback. :blob_salute: :blob_aww:
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    Opinion on character interaction and action.

    You can read it when you're in a good mood; this chapter is quite sensitive. It's not recommended for readers who are not mentally prepared.
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    Opinion on character interaction and action.

    If you'd like, please read my feedback thread. I'd love to hear your honest thoughts. All you have to do is answer four questions after reading a chapter. https://forum.scribblehub.com/threads/feedback-for-handling-sensitive-content.27304/
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    Opinion on character interaction and action.

    It's pretty good. The narrative has avoided the white space syndrome. But I still have a hard time visualizing Zerra's fight scenes against the enemy because the visualization of Zerra's appearance is limited (they're demons, after all, right?). And the transition between Zerra and Aegis's...
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    Opinion on character interaction and action.

    To be honest, your narrative suffers from head-hopping and white space syndrome. Well, blurry scenes. Readers have a hard time perceiving the scenes, at least based on my reading experience.
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    Opinion on character interaction and action.

    The only action I remember was Aegis gambling and it looked like there was going to be a fight in the colosseum.
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    Opinion on character interaction and action.

    Well, I'm giving my honest impression after reading this narrative without any feedback (constructive suggestions). As a casual reader who reads it in one go... a brief impression, I was confused. I felt confused about who was talking, who they were, and what they were doing. The narrative...
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    Thanks

    Thanks
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    Dude... can you read this thread? I'd love to hear your feedback...

    Dude... can you read this thread? I'd love to hear your feedback. https://forum.scribblehub.com/threads/feedback-for-handling-sensitive-content.27304/
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    Ignore me. I'm just a little girl who happened to pass by while eating chocolate bread made by...

    Ignore me. I'm just a little girl who happened to pass by while eating chocolate bread made by mom. :blob_cookie: :blob_hide:
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    When you say, "I read fiction because it makes me happy," that's when a symbolic contract...

    When you say, "I read fiction because it makes me happy," that's when a symbolic contract occurs. You seek fiction that entertains you, and the author provides fiction tailored to your tastes. Fiction entertains you because you've surrendered yourself to the author to please you.
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    Fanart Request: Akane Shinsei from The Rose Blooms Against Fate 🌸

    Please use english!
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    Writing high-stakes fight... Am I good at doing it?

    It's good enough. But you can make the prose shorter but more impactful. For example: The initial narration: Revised narration: You don't need to narrate "...caused by the impact" because the previous action narrative already explains the cause of the wound. Let the reader interpret your...
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    Well, I might start posting here after all.

    What does banned mean? I really don't know.:blob_hmm_two::sweating_profusely:
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