Paul's feedback thread

[Representing_Tromba]

I apologize. I have been very busy at work and haven't been able to review anything since Monday. I'll get on it soon.

 

[Representing_Tromba]

@Rhaps

 

[Rhaps]

@Rhaps

Thank you! You did an amazing job!

 

[Representing_Tromba]

Thank you! You did an amazing job!

Thank you. I'm glad you like it. I had some hiccups and I've been a bit busy but I've finally finished the first weeks worth of participants.

 

[SirDogeTheFirst]

I like to submit my newest piece of trash.

Generic Battle Academia

Genetically modified monsters invade our planet every day. They only have one thing in their mind, an order to devour and destroy. For now, Earth stands united against this threat, but when all guns are turned at the enemy outside, who will handle the enemy within? Leonard is a victim...

www.scribblehub.com

And please skip the prologue as it's just talking about the world's history, it's not part of the plot.

 

[Representing_Tromba]

Magical Girl? I’m not sure about this.

A manly guy get chosen by a pink bird to become a magical girl. It is heavily inspired by games like trance female fantasy, monster girl island, and magical camp. Note: The only place this is posted is Scribblehub, if it shows up somewhere else it has been stolen.

www.scribblehub.com

You could do mine if you want though it is gender bender. Also the first few chapters are a bit longer than the norm.

I just want you to know that the second reason why I haven't given feedback on another story yet is solely due to how long your first chapter is. The recording and editing process is taking forever. I am almost done though. The first reason is that work has been busy and I am very sleep deprived.

 

[melchi]

Oh you don't have to do that if it isn't your cup of tea.

 

[Representing_Tromba]

Oh you don't have to do that if it isn't your cup of tea.

It isn't my cup of tea but I did say I would record anything that got a 4/5 and yours did so I'm doing it. It's just taking forever.

 

[Jmoonday]

It isn't my cup of tea but I did say I would record anything that got a 4/5 and yours did so I'm doing it. It's just taking forever.

Wow very thoughtful of you! Thanks for doing this for all of us, seriously. It goes a long way to show that you are willing to look at something you have little interest in.

Also get some sleep!

 

[Representing_Tromba]

Wow very thoughtful of you! Thanks for doing this for all of us, seriously. It goes a long way to show that you are willing to look at something you have little interest in.

Also get some sleep!

Thanks man. I'm gonna try for a nap and an early bedtime tonight. Melchi's story is almost done being edited. Shouldn't be long.

 

[Representing_Tromba]

Guess I'll throw my hat in the ring. ? ?

This World That Called for Us

Rating system:
Grammar, rated from 4
Spelling, rated 5
Plot, rated 4
characterization, rated 3
Enjoyment, rated 3
3.8 / 5

You have near-perfect grammar and perfect spelling. The plot is also engaging enough to keep someone reading. The characters feel kind of off and out of place (both figuratively and due to the plot, literally), like the cast of Riverdale. I enjoyed it a fair bit but personally wouldn’t keep reading. Many people would read this and become enthralled with the story. Your target audience is definitely romance lovers and forced situation drama fans.

 

[Horrible-Void]

Question before I post, what if I have my 3 chapters split up into multiple parts? Do you just read the first 3 available parts of the story or read until a chapter 4 is clearly indicated?

 

[Representing_Tromba]

Question before I post, what if I have my 3 chapters split up into multiple parts? Do you just read the first 3 available parts of the story or read until a chapter 4 is clearly indicated?

I read the first three parts. I release mine in parts too so I only read the first three parts as released.

 

[Horrible-Void]

Ok. I don't have 3 parts posted separately but my First chapter is the equivalent of that, since I original wrote it for book format and not the format most people post on this site. Been posting in shorter bits since then. All this just to say that you only have to read the first chapter, because it is a bit long

Missing Hearts

Siblings Chris and Liah Mitchells already rocky relationship is put to the test when they, and their loved ones, get tangled up in a strange series of murders on a drive home one night. The following ordeal that sends one of them into a spiral of madness, drug abuse and...

www.scribblehub.com