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Oh, I didn’t know it’s an audio novel! That explains why some of the sentences are written like a script. If that’s your writing style, then it’s totally fine not to change anything. I was very focused on traditional writing, so I might’ve gotten a bit carried away… :sweat_smile:

Hi! I just read your novel until chapter 3 and here’s my thought: - Very mature writing! It isn’t written like a web novel and I could totally see this style of writing being published as a physical book.:blob_reach: - Same goes for the story idea. When I read the synopsis, I don’t think it...

Okay I’ll make this a thread. Say hi to my mc, Yohan in Return to You Who is Lost! (R2YWIL) I’ll keep updating time to time with sketches… (not the best at colouring) This is him working as a delivery man for The Guild.

Okay give me some time! I’ll read every word.

Hi! I will just send my link here instead because my thread is overcrowded: https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1161828/return-to-you-who-is-lost-bl/ Feel free to send me your feedback :blob_cookie:

Hi! The link is in the very first post lol but I can put it here: https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1161828/return-to-you-who-is-lost-bl/ Hi! I just read your story and here are my thoughts: - It’s a straightforward story. Chapter 1 establishes the setting and the main character well! I was...

No free will.

Hi! I just read your prologue, and here are my thoughts: - The synopsis is simple and straightforward, establishing the setting and main character without revealing too much of the plot. - The switch in perspective is an interesting choice of writing. While I understand your intention, the...

Oops, I think I read it in a different way. Yea I guess both ways are fine depending on which words you’re focusing on :blobthumbsup:

I didn’t quit drawing, I just got lazy. But recently, I’ve been very involved in my story and giving feedback so I decided to visualise Yohan (the mc in my story) for fun! You can check out “Return to you who is lost”, if you’re interested :blob_reach: Also, idk how to draw and colour the...

I’m very glad that my feedback has helped you! Recently, I realised my feedbacks are getting longer and longer and I wondered whether I was nitpicking :sweating_profusely: Nevertheless, I’m relieved that I have pointed smth useful to improve your writing!

Hi! I just finished your novel, and here are my thoughts: - The idea is very interesting! It focuses on the MC’s self discovery and his personal development, untangling complicated relationships he has with the other characters and hopefully resolving the issues that have been tormenting him...

Tbh, I’m surprised that many of yall find my feedback useful. I’ve compared it to the veterans’ takes, and I’m pretty sure mine isn’t all that insightful. Still, I really appreciate everyone who reads and acknowledges my points :blob_cookie:

Since my MC originally came from the real world, I think he’d just sigh and ask why after finding out I wrote everything just for fun. Maybe he’d get angry, but he definitely wouldn’t hit me. On the other hand, I think my male lead would actually thank me… for reviving the MC just for...

15 pages because I’m heartless. Lowkey I wrote it in note form and hope I remember the conditions, context and timeline of events. I already planned volume 2 even tho the ending for vol 1 is nonexistent to me :blobthumbsup:

Oops, never mind that. I just finished reading the Honeyfeed story until chapter 2 and here are my thoughts: - The prologue format is interesting and unique, but it threw me off. There’s an unnecessary use of words and abrupt shifts in perspective. I couldn’t keep up with the transitions...

Hi! I’ll leave some quick comments on your smut here… (Don’t worry, I’ll give a proper feedback tmr.) - I skipped to Chapter 6 and skimmed through. From the interactions alone, I figured out it’s GL. So, I mentally prepared myself and continued reading. - The sex scene feels more like telling...

Hi! I’ve read your novel up to Chapter 3, and here are my thoughts: - The story is interesting, especially the plot twist in Chapter 1. However, I noticed some issues with the sequence of events. - I like how you start by introducing the characters and their names, but I was confused about the...

Hi! I just read your story up to chapter 5, and here are my thoughts: - The names are very original. It’s honestly funny reading them out loud, and the terminologies are creative too.:blob_cookie: - I really like the plot idea. It feels like your own twist on the popular reincarnation genre...