Search results

Hi, I just read your story and here are my thoughts: - The synopsis wasn’t for me, the repeated “No… No… Not…” felt kind of forced. I actually think your first paragraph in the prologue is way more gripping. You should consider using that instead, it sets the tone so much better.:blob_reach: -...

Hi I just read your story and here are my thoughts - I could visualise the story and its setting. The dialogues between Sage and the nurse is very natural and I like that. - It is very straightforward and easy to read and I also like the style of writing. - However, there are some things I...

When I first started writing, I used first person and man, I started to yap and went off trail because using I Me and My just connect my consciousness into the story. Writing in third person helps you to view your story like a reader, you know like as an observer. But it’s kinda awkward if the...

Okay, this caught my eye so here’s a quick one: - The storyline is very solid. There’s a mini climax and suspense in each chapter, and the writing is also well done. The description of the place, along with the engaging dialogue from the orc, creates a strong impression of the...

Hi, I just read your story up to chapter 4 and here are my thoughts: - Lowkey I enjoyed the synopsis, it’s so funny. The “scream UNEMPLOYED” took me back to all the foreshadowing Insta reels I’ve been seeing on my FYP. - Aside from being one of the most unrealistic plots out there, the writing...

Don’t worry, the codex is actually easy to understand. Just use preexisting terms to get your point across. Like the agent ranking thing is similar to esper/rankers system. The exam system also, it’s just the usual thing so you can quickly summaries it into longer sentences! You don’t have to...

Gosh, how do you read this? Just by looking at the first letter of each word?:blob_shock:

Eh what an old thread anyways my username is like a phonetic spelling of my actual name lol. My pfp is from a rhythm game called Arcaea!

Hi! I read up to chapter 3 and here are my thoughts: - I enjoyed the quotes you added in some parts of the chapters. They’re meaningful and poetic as you read the story!:blob_cookie: - The storyline is not bad. I could follow the plot, and based on what you promised in your synopsis about...

Hi! I‘m glad that you’re continuing your work! Having someone’s reassurance is different from validation. I hope you write for yourself and interests so continue to keep it up:blob_highfive: I will do a feedback for you once I clear up the requests.:blob_reach:

Hi! I just read your story up to chapter 3, and here are my thoughts: - The language is beautiful. I can tell that your control of the language is well mastered, and the way you reveal the characters’ names at the end of each chapter is a good writing technique. - The synopsis is short and...

Btw, I only do feedbacks on days when I have work. Sadly, this week I have 5 days off so yall have to wait for next week?

Man, what happened to the feedback threads. Why is it just me and Tempokai’s threads active:(

Just take a break for a year and come back. No one is chasing you to get your work and stop chasing for validation. Do things on your own pace and entertain yourself thru other means and not solely on writing. You can always make an alt account and write trash stories to relieve stress or...

Hi, I just read your novel and here are my thoughts: - The synopsis are in sentence fragments. While I understand the general plot of the story, the choppy sentences just cause confusion and disrupt the tone of the story. - Well, chapter 1 language was decent, so why not do the same for the...

Hi, I just read your novel and here are my thoughts: - I didn’t binge-read lol—mostly because I don’t personally enjoy reading books—but I read up to Chapter 3 for standard practice. - The foreword does sound like a thesis, but I’m grateful for the info! It’s interesting that you want to dive...

Hi the link is unavailable and I can’t access it. Feel free to resend so I can do yours.