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This clears up a few things, thank you

All your points were valid, I actually thought I fixed most of the introductory sentence issues a while ago for some reason. Though I do have questions about the tonal shifts as its a new one. What did you think the tone was? Was it you were expecting it to be one story and It went another way...

Thank you so much for the detailed review, I especially appreciate the pdf, the organization will help me greatly. Your the best!

Thank you thank you thank you for taking the time to give such a detailed review. I appreciate it greatly. Also, the Bethesda joke made me laugh. Again, thank you

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Love the feedback, thank you so much

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Thank you for the review, I appreciate it!

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Up to the first paragraph is good. The stuff in the second paragraph should be summarized and explained in the first chapter or a prologue. Otherwise, I was interested by the first paragraph, keep it and then add a bit more mystery to hook readers. But that's my opinion.

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Much appreciated, I understand where your coming from because it was indeed the case with the blandness, I was excited to write the old man. My writing is like a roller coaster, it's sometimes good, mostly bland, something I need to work on. Again, thank you for the input!