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Yep, that's the title. It is my side project while I'm writing my main novel here on ScribbleHub. Once it is done, I'll post Overcome here. Sorry for the bother.

Ha, it's like clockwork! Always the same pattern. I recommend not exchanging insults or engaging in dialogue with them, as this bunch is vengeful (I remember one author complaining after these fellows went after them and used review bombings). It's easy enough to understand their intentions...

Hello! Not a new writer, but I have spare time on my hands today. Just be aware that I'm the worst writer around here, so take any of my suggestions with care. Let's start with your cover and synopsis. The cover is good. Read the bolded part out loud. It doesn't roll off the tongue. Let's try...

Good day to you. Thank you for your kind offer. Here's a link to my latest story: https://forums.sufficientvelocity.com/threads/overcome.144323/#post-35415779

You're awesome! Keep that passion, glance at your work before posting it and may you find yourself tons of grateful readers. You go, fellow human.

Sorry to bother you, but I need your opinion on the knowledge dump chapter. Could you please tell me how awful it is and if the text is readable? (Takes place in chapter 7 and the entire 8th chapter).

Hello! Before I begin, keep in mind that I'm the worst writer around these parts, so take any of my advice with caution. With that out of the way: We have no reason to care for the MC. Think about LOTR and its merry celebration at the beginning. Or Super Minion, and how the MC escapes...

One thing I noticed is about dialogues: It should be “Thanks for the fire,” I said, exhaling a plume of smoke, and waited for him to bring up the topic again, a silent challenge in the air. He did. Since "speaking" action comes before "physical action. Next: And I think you should mark...

One thing I noticed is: He grumbled. He conjured. He muttered. Too many he. Unless you are hiding the character's identity on purpose (and there's no reason for it based on what I had read), try using a name and adding an action to differentiate dialogues by the same character. But do keep in...

Please keep in mind that I'm by far the worst writer around these parts, but one thing that I've noticed is the overuse of the word "like." Your first chapter is under 1 300 words, yet you used "like" around 21 times. Take a curiosity or gaming approach to your chapters; let yourself wonder how...

Since this is a feedback thread: What is the reason for such a huge space between paragraphs? What does time smell like? And why the word "still" here? Maybe, "books not touched in years." I know, it sounds awful, but time doesn't smell! What? Okay, walk me throw this. Is the stench of...

No, the fifth chapter.

Sorry to bother you, but I need a fresh perspective about my current side project. How bad are the dialogue, scene transitions, and action in this excerpt? Do I skip on description, or maybe overly describe things? Does my vocabulary come off as poor? Am I repeating words too much, or is it...

Let people read what they enjoy.

Thank you for your input! About AI. I've first written the story in my native language, then used Google Translate to bring it into English (instead of writing the story in English right away, as I've done with every other novel so far.). Then I've changed a word here and there (replaced killed...

Thank you for your kind offer! Here's my first three chapters on a story that I'm writing in my spare time: Any input is welcomed. And apologies for the poor quality of the work, I'm still learning how to be a writer and so far the worst writer around these parts. If that is important...

Hello! I wish you the best. You should post a link to your story.

One thing that I learned is that you can't edit a blank page. Ok, you have an awesome story moment in your head. But you don't know the exact way how to portray it. So you put it off for later and later, and eventually the details become murky. Nah, screw it. Write it down from the start. You...

Good day to all. I'm learning how to craft stories (still in the very early phase of it) and need help. Some of the flaws in my stories were my over-indulgence in describing every detail and the unnatural, fake-sounding dialogues. If anyone has time, can you tell me if these problems still...

Hello! Before we start, please keep in mind that I am the worst writer around here and my stories are super bad, so take any of my advice with caution. With that out of the way, let me give you some general thoughts. https://www.scribblehub.com/read/1682521-fractured/chapter/1682755/ It is a...