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Honestly just reading this answer.. I feel uncomfortable.

I'll give my perspective as a reader... some readers may find it uncomfortable or even traumatizing. There are many ways to narrate the tragic setting of children without resorting to SA. In the real world, even criminals have a code of ethics. Some criminals won't touch children. And others...

Then why do you ask this question... if you stick to your artistic vision then don't listen to readers' opinions.

Honestly, some readers might feel uncomfortable if you give SA background for children.

Thank you for your feedback. :blob_salute:

Honestly, as an action chapter, this chapter is quite good. But as a horror chapter, it didn't give me (reader) goosebumps. I identified the problem as a lack of tension in this chapter because the narrative focuses more on the protagonist's inner state than living atmosphere. A good horror...

After reading your comprehensive feedback, I can say your answer is... Thank you for this excellent feedback. It gives me the confidence to write this narrative further. :blob_aww: Your answer is close to correct. Actually, my main difficulty in writing this POV is the limitation of prose...

This is nobledark, or rather, grim's fairy tale. A dark fantasy seen from a child's perspective.

Her actual age is a secret. But the age range you provided is correct.

Thank for your feedback. Caelan is indeed a little girl (not a reincarnated immortal). I asked her age to gauge how accurately Caelan's mental state was based on the mental state of a child organically.

Feedback for A Little Daughter Character Well, I rewrote one of my chapters with the first POV from a little girl's perspective. Here is the result: My questions are: How old do you think Caelan El Rose is (actual age)? How is Caelan El Rose's character in this chapter? How adorable do you...

Narrating a child's first POV is one of the most difficult challenges in writting. Why? Because you need to "lower your intelligence" to the child's level. You can't use literary prose to narrate characters, worldbuilding, and plot. You need to lower your language to be simple and...

I intended to kill him off as an NPC. He was originally designed to be an annoying NPC. But unintentionally, his character development happened organically. His redemption sub-arc even took up over 10 chapters. That's a lot for just a supporting character. For comparison, Volume 1 only had 24...

I originally planned to portray the veteran knight commander Feroux as a tragic antihero martyr who atones for his past sins through self-sacrifice against the Shadowmist invasion (who are victims of the past who failed to be saved and now seek revenge). I depicted Feroux facing various dark...

Well, this chapter actually describes the battle adequately, but perhaps lacks tension. It's worth noting that I'm not a fan of the fanfic you used as a reference for this chapter, so my opinion is limited to the assumptions of a non-fanfic causal reader. In this chapter, you attempt to...

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Sorry, we do have an experienced editor here, she is @LeilaniOtter But maybe you are half right, only a few editors are willing to volunteer their services... and she is the exception among exceptions, at least as far as I know.

The scene visualization is still rough and blurry. Readers might be confused about where your character is, who they're with, and where their position is. Try dividing the scene into blocks, such as a scene in the stands, a scene at the ticket counter, a scene in the break room, etc. Provide...