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Readers won't be confused if you provide unique character identification, clear relative positions of related characters, and clear spatial and temporal context. Furthermore, you can utilize the narrative camera to adjust zoom in and out during fighting. This will help avoid confusion and...

As a causal reader, I can understand the course of the fight. But I don't feel the tension. Why? Because your narrator explains how the fight occurs. As a reader, I feel like I'm reading a report of the battle but I don't 'feel the blows'. If you want to create tension in your reader, you might...

The relationship between author, fiction, and reader is like a symbolic contract. The author provides a narrative to the reader. Readers know the narrative is "fictional," but they are willing to be bound by the "lie" to achieve a sense of experience. Reading fiction means allowing the lie to...

You need to filter feedback more selectively, dude. You can differentiate between taste criticism (whether I liked this story or not) and technical criticism (such as pacing, prose, narrative style, POV, etc). Generally, taste criticism isn't helpful if you're trying to build a world that...

Since I love using onomatopoeia as an audio sensory effect in narration... I support this feature.

A bug:

No comment (well, it's a comment). My fictions are still ongoing...

Thank you for your honest feedback. It helps me to understand how my narrative is perceived by reader's mind and how to achieve my narrative goals. :blob_salute: :blob_aww:

First, I'm not saying you should write constantly. Burnout, fatigue, and writer's block are real. You can rest when you're tired. You can write when you're in the mood. You can complain when you're not getting enough readers. That's humane. But the most important thing is your writing goal. If...

Thank you for your feedback. :blob_salute: The first point in your complaint is indeed my writing style. Onomatopoeia often appears in manga and LN with italic, but I enclose them in double quotation marks ("...") because I truly treat them as authentic sounds that readers can perceive. On the...

Feedback for Handling Sensitive Content Well, I make a feedback request for chapters with dark, sensitive, heavy and emotional content. I'm not sure if I've handled these kinds of chapters wisely considering my series is starting to reach an emotional climax. Here's one of the darkest...

Love, loss and regret are emotional fictional themes.

Thank you for the constructive feedback. Now I can improve my narrative. :blob_melt: :blob_aww:

I'm just quoting Jean Piaget's cognitive development theory. If you disagree, please conduct comparative research to deconstruct this theory. But that's certainly beyond the scope of this feedback discussion.

It's just an example, dude.

Yes, you need to set limits in the form of cost, cooldown, and even backslash if skill is overused. It helps make your characters more humane and maintain the tension of the story. If every monster dies with a single slash without a cost, the tension will feel flat, and readers might get...

What?! I don't see Satella the envy witch

I respect your opinion. But please understand the psychology of preoperational children (2-7 years old) according to Jean Piaget's cognitive development theory. At their ages, children tend to be imaginative (thinking objects have souls - animism), egocentric (thinking the world is centered...

Why not?