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I started writing since I was 6 years old. I write in Latin alphabetically. It took me almost 2 years to learn how to write simple fictional narratives... Lina went with her mother to the market. They bought kitchen supplies for dinner.

Accepting feedback like a newbie who continues to learn to improve narratives... and write narratives as well as possible like an experienced author who uses all their narrative skill to narrate fiction that is worth reading.

If you want to continue this chapter... please read the other 6 chapters: https://www.scribblehub.com/read/1662165-blood-rose-princess-just-wants-to-live-in-peace-with-her-little-daughter/chapter/1986284/ Thank you.

Thanks for your feedback. There are two men in this chapter briefly as observers of the Clara vs. Erna fight. They are Commander Feroux and an unconscious young man (carried by Feroux on his back). If you continue these chapters... you will know that Commander Feroux (sword master) will...

Reader Position in Third POV Look at the following 2 scenes, which do you think is more impressive? Scene 1: Scene 2:

Evolution. No plot or characters have changed. As I stated in my previous answer, I rewrote solely to increase immersion, from a fiction that focused on "what happens next?" to become "how does this scene make the reader feel?" My goal in rewriting fiction isn't to change the plot and...

My older chapters tended to be heavy-telling. As my narrative skill improved, I became uncomfortable reading them. It's not that they were bad... I think the characters and plot were quite good. However, the lack of immersion made the reading experience flat. Now, I'm also actively rewriting...

I don't know why... your character principles are similar to my bio:

Well, I appreciate your feedback. However, the analysis in this thread only addresses the visual aspects, specifically in the reader's mind. I might analyze the prose and grammar in another thread if possible. Thank you for your feedback.

Your feedback is very detailed and technical. I appreciate your criticism and suggestions, especially regarding the choreography and detailed effects of the fight. This battle simulation is visualized based on my imagination. So, the technical details are likely underrepresented. I...

Edit: I don't know if this is good or bad... as you're confused, why is Erna's injury mentioned at the end of the fight? Because Erna was barely injured in this fight except for a few minor scratches. Erna lost not because she was weak but because she was tactically defeated. A gun was pointed...

Well, you can take your time whenever you want. Have a nice day.

Thanks.

I appreciate your feedback. Thank you.