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Hmm... Yeah I suppose 2 is fine, I never said anywhere that it wasn't, although forgive me if I half-ass my already half-assed review process. Here we go! My Goddess Mother Gave Me A SYSTEM AND KICKED ME OUT Well, firstly, I probably would of clicked away after the synopsis. This is personal...

I tried editing my rewrite because it was getting longer than I wanted, but at the end it was like 20% more word count. Task failed successfully

Actually the more I reread this the more I love it. The complete lack of coherence, the poetic line break between 'rain' and 'so,'. After my first attempt at writing flopped I've been practicing writing exercises, reading grammer and style guides, avoiding passive voice and trying to improve my...

This sounds either awful or absolutely transcendental. Like new isekai homestuck shit tier meme level of media we mere mortals are too pleb to comprehend.

Thankyou for the feedback. To be honest the main reason I excluded her personality is because I'm having issues defining her. The first version of the story was 30,000 words and I realised in all those words I basically never actually communicated her personally. I made a mistake I think a lot...

@Cortavar I like the implication ring species are to do with dick size.

Interchangeable, or depends on circumstance. I think tribe is underutilized. Also clade could be fun to mix in. Taxonomy is inherently messy and even in the last 50 years the language has changed a lot, subspecies might be the correct term under modern taxonomy. But is your story set in modern...

@Corty Well I sure feel the fool

This is a bold formatting choice. Thankyou for the advice though. It is very helpful.

Let's go let's go let's go! Ok I'll warn I'm not super into court drama. So I probably would have stopped at your summary! But I gave it a go anyway! And it was good! I've read chapters 1&2 for now but I intend to read more when I have time and once the sun leaves. You do a good job giving me...

Thankyou. I agree. But I think you can make a Mary Sue Self Insert who gets sum in an emotionally mature way, that respects all parties. Maybe I'm a wet blanket though. Also, sorry for derailing the thread. As a token effort at rerailing I wouldn't want to write a Gamelit because dealing with...

Ok, sorry, rereading that I didn't word it well and it was a very rambly thought anyways. In my defence it was very hot in Australia today and I got low-key heatstroke earlier, and it's getting late. I think people want to project on characters who are very successful with the opposite sex. I...

I think the popularity of the harem genre is in large part due to juvenile male (and female sometimes too) desire to have relations with lots of people–which I relate too–but keeping them all around as collectables after is not normal or in my opinion a healthy idea. If you want your...

I know there probably aren't that many people using SH on mobile, but we seem to be missing a lot of editor features here. Even the ----- enter for a horizontal line doesn't work for me. Can force it with android Chrome's "Desktop Site" option but that's clunky.

@Corty I'm can't say I've never enjoyed media with harem, I like ouran highschool host club (reverse but you get it). But still like 99% I've seen would be improved with just a character who gets laid sometimes, or honestly by never being made. Tldr: Yes gud harem gud, but vanishingly few gud...

Honestly yeah harem. I cannot understand the appeal. I'm a dood, I understand the only thing better than one cute girl is many cute girls. So like... Make your character get sum then move on. Or bring relationships to emotionally satisfying conclusions, either or. Nearly every harem...