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I’m definitely unlocking the float ability this time.

Pretty basic. But the coconut, guava, and sesame candies are more a product of where I am now.

As a Threadmancer, you are free to claim breeding rights to the sex, species, and life status of any dragon.

If my eyes cross because of the grammar, I won’t continue. I’m ok with a little dialogue, but when half the chapter or more is two characters talking, it’s either a disguised info dump or filler that’s not needed. I would also expect a decent inciting incident. Isekai and System apocalypse are...

What is the harem for? Is the MC royalty making sure to pop out kids? Or are they just on a random walk through the countryside, picking up every stunning but neglected beauty and doing nothing with them? Do the harem members add anything other than kitchen table drama? If the story has a smut...

Write a chapter with plenty of awkward sex between two virgins that are nervous about their clothing. Then on your second pass, remove the sex but keep the awkward gestures and nervous clothes tugging. Add a few blushes as well. Ecchi is a promise to build up to smut, a promise the author never...

Its much better. I still question whether Izanami’s status should remain open. If it’s open like that, as a reader, I expect the author to close that at some point, and I’m not sure if the author intends to dedicate a large portion of the story to that. The reason I don’t like calling her life...

*** Born a Man, but desperately wanting to be a beautiful Woman, Taylor was living an average life, at an average office job, saving money to achieve her dreams. Until she was Murdered. Brutally murdered by a prejudiced group of people whose hate was fueled by transphobic rhetoric and...

Although the site calls it a synopsis, it’s really a blurb. You don’t need to enter a lot of what you wrote. The blurb can be simple, just your stories premise with a couple of details. { Born a woman in a man’s body, Taylor worked long hours to fulfill her dreams—until a transphobic group of...

You’ll find deep fried food anywhere in the US, but the south and the Midwest will fry anything, and I fully approve. When I lived in the NY I ate a lot of Polish/Irish/Italian foods. When I lived in LA I ate a lot of Mexican and Japanese food, and now I eat almost 100% Puerto Rican food. US has...

Gotta be the Midwest or south.

Triple bacon cheeseburgers and Bourbon ?

? Are you collecting bank accounts?

The title will probably cause problems. Maybe modify it a bit. something like this: My friends and I were genderbent isekaid to a world were monsters violate women, and now we must clear them of their taint.

I wouldn’t take it that way. I’m not calling you a bad writer. Even professionals strive to improve their writing. We’re all amateurs. We’re all working to get better. English isn’t your native language, yet I had no problem understanding what you wrote. So keep writing and keep posting.

Assuming the story is readable, then characters. I can read a bad plot and enjoy the book as long as the characters capture me, but no matter how good the plot is, if the characters suck, I can’t finish the story.

On top of what @K5Rakitan said about passive voice, you should remove telling words. Ex: Januar could feel a cold shiver running down his back when the card was snatched from him. By restructuring, removing the telling word, and adding who or what is performing the action, you can turn this...

In some ways you’re wording it as if it were a collaboration, but you’re calling it “my brand”, which is almost like holding the trademark of GA. You’re putting an authors story under your umbrella. So let’s say the author starts a patreon for their story. There is the potential for you to claim...

So this is commissioned work? You’re asking an author or artist to create an original piece based in the world you’ve created. Marvel and DC pays artists for their art and storylines. Is that what you’re doing?