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If you can weave it into the story in 2-3 paragraph chunks when necessary to understand something it’s best. There’s nothing wrong with flashbacks, but if they’re a chapter long then they’re info dumps.

Time traveler here, sent back to kill my original self after living a life of luxury. I could not do it, so now I’m in hiding, with only my younger self and AI to guide me. Origin is merely a reset by the NWO, a select group of billionaires who have developed biological weapons. They tested it...

No need to look 2d. I think I have your dream guy right here in the real world.

How many people are running around with super destructive magic? Does the lord/king in that castle not employ mages with equally destructive magic to fight off would be attackers? How many people are rocking dragons like they’re jewelry? Are they just common run of the mill beasts? If they are...

Were you nervous about publishing your story?: Not really. What was the outcome of your story?: A few people read it. How many readers did you get in the first week?: Not many, 4 or 5 I think Were you nervous about your story getting stolen (my story got stolen once >^>)?: I’m not good enough...

(12) Buildup from Lilith (13) Party Scene from Lilith (14) Party Scene from Lilac (15) After Party Scene from Lilith (16) After Party Scene from Lilac That’s the logical order. But you have to ask, does seeing through Lilacs perspective offer anything of value? You’re essentially covering the...

James locks eyes on the man, and his body twitches from the adrenaline spike. The world around him narrows. His ears pound with every beat of his racing heart. The veins on his neck bulge as his head shakes. James utters a guttural roar through his clenched jaw and explodes towards the man...

I agree. Similar to the show 24, where the season is based on a single day, and each episode is one hour in the shows storyline. I just figured @Freesia.Cutepearl is going for a longer period. Sorry, I didn’t see the spoiler earlier. This is more a stylistic approach, but if you are worried...

The main thing I would worry about here is that you’ve gone 1 week in 14 chapters. I’d be concerned with having to do massive time skips in the future or throwing your pacing out of whack. If you continued with that pacing, you’d be 200,000 words in and only moved a month. Unless you’re...

? Someone just told me they liked where the story was going. Now might be a good time.

Europeans conquered and converted. They didn’t say, “Lay down your arms or we’ll convert you.” So it’s And, not or

https://www.scribblehub.com/series/167237/shade-touched/ I really haven’t read this, but from what I know of it, it’s an overall fluffy story.

Theme: Some form of horror. Why: I like the style. Why not opposite: Every time I try writing fluffy pieces, it gets serious and eventually becomes horror. Before Christmas: Lockdowns and rum. After: rum and tighter lockdowns I’ll be finishing a lot of rum before Christmas ends, but now...

I’ve never really understood “grinding” in a LitRPG. Why doesn’t everyone just grind like the MC if they can? If grinding is something anyone can do, then why would the MC gain more than anybody else? So is it possible to increase their strength without making it appear to be a simple grind...

That’s good. Writing in present tense can be quite tricky.

I never said I was a better writer, nor should you take it that way. There’s nothing special about my writing. You asked for opinions, I gave you mine, that’s all. They’re just opinions. As for what I wrote, it’s not dialogue. I just put it in quotes to separate it from the other text.

Your tenses are mixed in quite a few places. Sometimes you write in the present tense, and other times you write in the past tense. Chapter 0 -4 hours later- , |The next morning| Nothing happens during this entire time. He visits his mom, -4 hours later, he goes to bed, |The next morning|...