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eagle_360

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So many nice folks are giving back to the community by giving good feedback. I shall do the opposite and look through a few lines of your novel and only give reactions images. (some words).

Thus, what I am giving is my visceral emotional turmoil while reading your chapter. Letting you interpret how the reader is thinking throughout the sections and doing your own "figure what the feedback is."


I am terrible at giving constructive criticism, this will be purely useless info. (Take it with salt 🧂or else I will shame you)



~Letsgo~
 
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@c37


CLANK.

Coins clanked as Aegis tossed the pouch into the air.

SPLAT


His tattered leather boots stepped on something. He lifted his boot to see what it was—


"Great! A Klucking hound decided to grace me with its filth." He threw his arms up in irritation, wiping his boot against the stone.
Kluckin bell?

Am I forgetting something? Suddenly, the whole arena vibrated, interrupting his thoughts.


Eh, it must be nothing.
I felt interrupted

This spot looks good. He approached a spot beside the obsidian pillar. Beside him stood an old fiend, the stench of his sweat invaded his nostrils.


An involuntary gag. With haste, he covered his mouth and ignored the smell.
Huh
The railing rattled against his belly as screams battered his ears.
Belly?

As Aegis turned his head, a young fiend girl with dark-red skin stood to his right, her orange pupils seething with rage. Before Aegis could form a word, a fist landed with familiar affection. He bent and held his stomach and looked at her.

Huh?

"A CHAMPION BEYOND ABADDON, "


The crowd was ready to roar once again.


"... A CORRUPTED ELDARI. "


"HIS NAME IS ANANKE! "


A thunderous roar erupted but soon fell silent. Footsteps echoed around the arena. A Hooded Eldari stepped into the arena.



Ananke removed his hood, revealing his face. His gaze swept the arena, emerald-green eyes scanning every face before halting on Aegis.






Verdict : Ok. I am abit confuse but ok.







NEXT PERSON THANK YOU
@Bimbanana

Ooooh! Me!
I already read yours :blob_melt: and I like it. But here is your first chapter reaction since you asked.

White.


Everything was white and glowing, with a thin mist drifting lazily in every direction. No walls. No floor. No ceiling. Just endless white.



Which immediately gave him the creeping suspicion that this place looked suspiciously like either heaven or an Apple Store.


Considering he was an Android user, he figured the first option seemed far more likely.



A crossroad.
A cat crossing the street.
A truck approaching fast.
Nooooo

Realistically, he chose Option Two.


He was more of a dog person anyway.

Approved

“THAT FUCKING TRUCK-KUN!!”



A man in his thirties. Mild beer belly. Receding hairline. Not ugly. Not handsome. Just… average. Painfully average. The kind of average that could be improved with effort—effort that required money.

I'm ok with that

“It’s… it’s a…” Solo squinted harder. “…Is this Google?”


Floating in front of him was a familiar sight.


A plain Google homepage.


White background.
Colorful logo.
A single search bar.



An orc.


He had been turned into a fucking orc.


“Oink oink—oi—FUCK!”




Part 1
Ooooh! Me!

Part 2

“Alex Solomon… no one calls me a bitch and gets away with it. Enjoy your one hundred and thirty years of suffering.”


“In the end, you will beg me to end your pathetic life.”


Great Demon Gate


A figure stepped calmly out of the dust.


Tall. Well-groomed. Wearing sleek modern businessman suit and glasses.


Unarmed.


But behind him marched a company of demonfolk infantry, each holding an M4A1 rifle with practiced ease. Dozens of Humvees rolled forward, their mounted .50 caliber M2 Browning machine guns glinting in the light. A platoon of M1 Abrams tanks rumbled behind them.


Above, four AH-64 Apaches hovered steadily.

HELL YEAH

“People of Talvaris,” he said calmly,
“We come in peace.”
Oh peace...ok




Verdict : War time!
 
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@c37





Kluckin bell?


I felt interrupted


Huh

Belly?



Huh?












Verdict : Ok. I am abit confuse but ok.







NEXT PERSON THANK YOU
@Bimbanana


I already read yours :blob_melt: and I like it. But here is your first chapter reaction since you asked.










Nooooo



Approved







I'm ok with that










Part 1


Part 2






HELL YEAH


Oh peace...ok




Verdict : War time!
Sheesh, i thought you would only use 1 emoji for the whole chapter. But this is actually took more efforts no?

THank you so much! i will steal some of the memes thanks
 

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Mine too! :blob_popcorn:
 

eagle_360

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This looks hilarious :blobrofl:
Here you go: Truth Beyond the Veil
Feel free to skip the prologue (chapter 0)

Sure.

These days, it’s rare to see both parents and children under the same roof. But this, too, is a part of life, and with survival being the priority, it was simply to be expected.


Basement dweller?


"Okay, guys, let’s stop here. I have to write the assignments,” Victor said as he looked at the wall clock. It read 2:00.


"Shit, I haven't done mine yet ... " Leo’s anguished cry came immediately.



He saw the pitch-black night sky, which had no moon,


Da moon gone?

He unlocked his phone and started dialing, unaware that the stars that he was gazing at became dark red. While he was browsing his phone, the stars grew more eerie and blood red with each passing second, yet weirdly, no one seemed to notice it at all, as if everything was an illusion.
Should probably look away from the phone.


“Did a spider bite me? Will I become Spider-Man? ...” These were his last thoughts before his brain completely shut down.

Spidey?

“My balls… no... not there… not there too”. These were his last thoughts before he lost consciousness.


Where they go?

Yes, all this charade was for a mosquito. Theo had specially come here in the middle of the night, not only to relax but also to hunt… hunt mosquitoes. From his actions, a deep grudge could be felt.

I agree...they are getting bigger


Victor woke up groggy; he was feeling weirdly energetic yet somehow sleepy and drained at the same time. He gave himself a once-over and then grabbed his phone to check the time.


“OH NO… oh no... oh no no no no—NOT today!”


"Shit… not today!" Victor cussed as he ran desperately to freshen up and go to college

huh?


Verdict : It's too damn slow. I'm not hooked.
Missing some special sauce...a wow moment. But maybe its a slow melancholic story so it shld be ok.
But generally really well written.
But thats just my attention span brain so do continue your writing journey with happiness!


Sheesh, i thought you would only use 1 emoji for the whole chapter. But this is actually took more efforts no?

THank you so much! i will steal some of the memes thanks

This is taking too much effort. Yes.
 
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Mine too! :blob_popcorn:


Let's go!!!!
Dang...where the chapter numbers at...I'm bad at math





Suzan didn't stop. Suzan never stopped.

Susan going fast!


She polished her boots, except for the streaks of mud she carefully applied.


Dirty polished shoes? Huh

Evening fell like a royal curtain over the city. Lamplight shimmered across white walls and gold balconies. Pigeons found their nightly perches and began their gossip in earnest.

Pigeons gossip?


The girls walked through the Noble Quarter, where homes looked more expensive than some small kingdoms and probably had chandeliers in their closets.

What they hanging in there?


She tiptoed behind a marble column and peeked into the small plaza behind the Velvet Sphinx Inn. Five cloaked men sat at a table that practically screamed Definitely Up To Something.

Now now...we are getting hasty here...assuming

The cloaked men froze. They blinked, surprised.


She blinked back, excited.


Then one of them smiled.


Not the kind of smile you'd want.


Lily, still half in shadow, nearly tripped over her own feet trying to reach her. "Suzan—no!"


Too late.


Suzan was already in the middle of something she didn't understand.


And someone had just taken interest in her.

Uh oh...not in front of the children





Verdict : Heyo, got my attention. I get their immediate situation of them being rascals. Good writing. Me like.

 

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Heyo, I see you're still open so here I go.
(God, I'm excited lol)


Fire. Screams.

"You shall perish in the deepest of hells!"

"These rat-bloods!"

"Disgrace to the magical society!"

Black mist. Everything went blank for some time.

"What"s happening?"

Iris woke up with a start, sweating. The skin around where her pendant was touching burned. Another weird dream, she thought to herself. But soon she shook it off and went to wash up. It was a long day ahead.

Iris went to the dining hall in her regular corset to find everyone except for Harlin, who was obviously busy doing her makeup.

Iris sat down beside Elina and nudged her with her elbow.

"I will ask Mother and Father now, okay?" Eli nodded. Aylin looked at Iris from the other side of the dining table in a meaningful way and nodded.

"Mother, Father, are you aware that we are going on an expedition tomorrow?"Iris said. Queen Eleeza slightly frowned her eyebrows.

"I think not. Where are you going?"

"We are visiting Raczil to look at what the war has left behind."

"I see you are interested in war, my dear," King Franks said, his reddish eyes sparkling.

"I'm so proud of you." Iris nodded and smiled. Harlin had entered the dining hall by then. She looked frantically at the others and bowed deeply, "I apologize for delaying my arrival."

Elina mocked her, "No need to be so polite, Late Queen. We know your makeup takes more time than your breakfast."

"That"s normal though." They kept bickering.

After breakfast,

All four of them were walking down the hall towards their classroom.

"Don"t you think they will find out?"asked Harlin, slightly frowning.

"Well, we gotta risk it, girl. We just have to act well enough for them not to find out," said Elina, slowing down to match her pace.

"It"s not just acting though. If Mr. Rupert tells Mrs. Eleejah, we are doomed. We have to make sure our plan works out," Aylin said, looking kind of worried.

"Iris?"Aylin said as she pulled Iris by her arm, "Is there anything on your mind?"

"Yes, you have been really silent," Elina mocked her.

"Actually, yes. I had this weird dream this morning and I can"t just forget what happened."

"Haven’t you been having way too many nightmares lately?" Aylin looked worried.

"Did I tell you it was a nightmare?"

"I can tell," she smiled warmly, "now, tell us what you dreamt about."

"It felt as if I had seen that dream before. Or, more like, I was there myself. It felt very tangible."

"Was it the same thing you saw last time?"

"Nope. Last time, I couldn’t exactly remember what I saw; it was vague. But it was really clear this time. I saw that some people were being burnt in the city plaza. The crowd was chanting insults at them. And everything was covered in black mist. I felt as if I were present in that dream."

"That"s spooky. Maybe you should consult the psychologist," Harlin suggested.

"Hey, I'm not going insane. I don’t need a psychologist."

They arrived at their classroom. They walked into the classroom. Wind blew in through the floor to ceiling windows and the chirping of birds filled the air with a nice vibe.

There were not many students as usual. Well, it was normal because, of course, the princesses of four of the most powerful kingdoms wouldn’t sit in the same classroom as others. They attend special magic classes meant only for them. They learn how to hone their basic magic skills; for example, they learn to talk to birds, how to fly, and how to teleport. But all of them have a long way to go before they can become experts like their parents.

"Hey, Irees. Have you read that book yet?"asked Alison walking up to them.

"Yes, I have. It was so good. I loved the details about the war. It"s interesting."

"I knew you would love it," Alison warmly smiled at her.

Eleena rolled her eyes, "There he goes again with his sweet tongue." Harleen smirked, "Or are you jealous that he doesn’t use that sweet tongue while speaking to you?" Elina cursed at her, "I would rather have a dog lick me in the face than be jealous of him. Ew,"she crinkled her nose, "I guess you should work a little harder on your makeup though."

Harlin grinned as she sat at her desk, "Even though I wouldn’t mind if he admires me, personally my standard is way too high." Elina rolled her eyes. Irees continued her chatter with Alison as Ayleen sat between Elina and Harlin.

"Will you two stop your dogfighting?"Aylin said, brushing a strand of hair from her face.

"Oh, mother! Please forgive us for such brusqueness. We shall never disappoint you again." Elina said, mockingly pleading to Aylin. Aylin pursed her lips.

"I'm not your mother."

"But you sure don"t let me feel the absence of my mother." Harlin burst out laughing. But just then Mr. Rupert entered the classroom.

"Okay, everyone, sit down. Mr. Alison, why are you standing at Ms. Iris"s desk?"

Alison hurried away.

"So, today we are going to learn about the history of the fall of the wizard kingdom."

...

Later that afternoon,

"We should pack for tomorrow," Harlin said taking a sip from the golden trimmed pink tea cup.

"What are you gonna pack? Makeup kit?" Elina asked as she munched on her apple pie, Cathyon sitting on her lap as she played with her brown hair.

"You know the answer, Eli. By the way, aren’t you gonna pack some food for you?"

"Oh, thanks for the reminder! I gotta ask Brandy for some snacks to carry."

Iris was there reading a book called 'War and Runes', too intent on reading to notice the bickering.

Aylin sat there quietly sipping tea and adoring the beauty of her favourite flowers— violet, iris and whatnot. The western wind was tender against her pale skin. The cool bridge carried the smell of flowers into the tea pavilion.

"Ris, what are you readjng?" Harlin asked.

"Oh, it's the book that Alison gave me," Iris said. Elina rolled her eyes.

"Didn’t you say you are done reading this book?" Aylin asked.

"I lied," Iris replied in don't-give-a-damn way. "But I gotta read this in case he asks me about the contents inside this book."

"Why do you lie about being interested in war? You don't like brutality, Ris."

"Eh, I'm the crown princess. I have to handle wars and stuffs in the future even if I don't like it. Better practise from now."

"And, why do you keep being friendly with that general-boy? I don’t like the way he acts around you. He kinda creeps me out," Elina said devoured another piece of pie.

"You will know, Eli, when the time comes," answered Aylin in Iris's stead.

"Wait- is there something I don't know?" Elina said urging forward.

...
 
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A meme image review?
I want that.

As a meme queen whose story is very cringe humor/meme coded, I want that even more.

Absolutely lovely and cuddly story. 👨‍🍳 Chefs kiss.


I snatched up my phone and iPod.
That activated me like a sleeper agent.


Got my checklist of items:


Water. Snacks. Candles and a lighter. Bandages.


Plushies. Stickers. Hello Kitty throw blanket.

Ah yes...the essentials in a zombie apocalypse 🤣



One of the dead people grabbed me while I was trying to leave. I panicked and jumped straight through the living room window instead of using a door like a rational human being. Spoiler: I'm not.



Agreed. Headfirst as well because there is not much important organs there.


Pretty sure there’s some in my hair too. Or… was. I tried to get all of it out, won the free prize of surprise cuts but a lack of bandaids.

Just use a large one?

I ran until my lungs felt like stage four cancer and hid behind a hedge.

Reminds me of this fella


I’m no detective, but it probably has to do with all the puddles of blood everywhere.


I kept telling myself it's just tomato juice. It didn't work.

Tomato juice! That might be worse than blood.


Two dead people were wandering in the street. They didn’t notice me, thank god. Shoutout to my boy Jesus, he’s putting in work looking out for today.

Yo. He's my G too.


A white van was in the parking lot. Unlocked. Didn’t find much inside, no free candy. Just some string and rubber bands, a pair of torn leather gloves. Took them anyway.

Would prefer wine. Stella Rosa Moscato because I'm a sweet lover.

For a moment, I could have sworn I was hearing my mother calling my name.


Which is really weird, considering there’s no way she can be here. Neither can my dad, it’s literally impossible, not after everything.

What happened to dad?


I also have some packs of pokemon cards. I haven’t opened them all yet, but the second one got me an Articuno. Pretty badass!

Oh! I like articuno too!



What happens, where I go, the horrible atrocities I witness or fall victim to, just girly things!

Haha

Something metal fell to the floor.


And now I hear the chorus of the damned from behind my door.


Fantastic.


Must be thursday.

Thursday...I agree



Verdict : Absolute banger. Legitimately yaaasss
 

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Absolutely lovely and cuddly story. 👨‍🍳 Chefs kiss.



That activated me like a sleeper agent.




Ah yes...the essentials in a zombie apocalypse 🤣







Agreed. Headfirst as well because there is not much important organs there.




Just use a large one?



Reminds me of this fella




Tomato juice! That might be worse than blood.




Yo. He's my G too.




Would prefer wine. Stella Rosa Moscato because I'm a sweet lover.



What happened to dad?




Oh! I like articuno too!





Haha



Thursday...I agree



Verdict : Absolute banger. Legitimately yaaasss
Thanks for memeing my memes! I appreciate it. :blobrofl:
I especially love the comically large band-aid.
There should be full body, 'one size fits all' types of those.

For when your whole life hurts, buy our MEGA ULTRA ALL EMCOMPASSING BANDAIDS.
Results may vary, not clinically proven to repair painful lives.
 

eagle_360

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Heyo, I see you're still open so here I go.
(God, I'm excited lol)


Fire. Screams.

"You shall perish in the deepest of hells!"

"These rat-bloods!"

"Disgrace to the magical society!"

Black mist. Everything went blank for some time.

"What"s happening?"

Iris woke up with a start, sweating. The skin around where her pendant was touching burned. Another weird dream, she thought to herself. But soon she shook it off and went to wash up. It was a long day ahead.

Iris went to the dining hall in her regular corset to find everyone except for Harlin, who was obviously busy doing her makeup.

Iris sat down beside Elina and nudged her with her elbow.

"I will ask Mother and Father now, okay?" Eli nodded. Aylin looked at Iris from the other side of the dining table in a meaningful way and nodded.

"Mother, Father, are you aware that we are going on an expedition tomorrow?"Iris said. Queen Eleeza slightly frowned her eyebrows.

"I think not. Where are you going?"

"We are visiting Raczil to look at what the war has left behind."

"I see you are interested in war, my dear," King Franks said, his reddish eyes sparkling.

"I'm so proud of you." Iris nodded and smiled. Harlin had entered the dining hall by then. She looked frantically at the others and bowed deeply, "I apologize for delaying my arrival."

Elina mocked her, "No need to be so polite, Late Queen. We know your makeup takes more time than your breakfast."

"That"s normal though." They kept bickering.

After breakfast,

All four of them were walking down the hall towards their classroom.

"Don"t you think they will find out?"asked Harlin, slightly frowning.

"Well, we gotta risk it, girl. We just have to act well enough for them not to find out," said Elina, slowing down to match her pace.

"It"s not just acting though. If Mr. Rupert tells Mrs. Eleejah, we are doomed. We have to make sure our plan works out," Aylin said, looking kind of worried.

"Iris?"Aylin said as she pulled Iris by her arm, "Is there anything on your mind?"

"Yes, you have been really silent," Elina mocked her.

"Actually, yes. I had this weird dream this morning and I can"t just forget what happened."

"Haven’t you been having way too many nightmares lately?" Aylin looked worried.

"Did I tell you it was a nightmare?"

"I can tell," she smiled warmly, "now, tell us what you dreamt about."

"It felt as if I had seen that dream before. Or, more like, I was there myself. It felt very tangible."

"Was it the same thing you saw last time?"

"Nope. Last time, I couldn’t exactly remember what I saw; it was vague. But it was really clear this time. I saw that some people were being burnt in the city plaza. The crowd was chanting insults at them. And everything was covered in black mist. I felt as if I were present in that dream."

"That"s spooky. Maybe you should consult the psychologist," Harlin suggested.

"Hey, I'm not going insane. I don’t need a psychologist."

They arrived at their classroom. They walked into the classroom. Wind blew in through the floor to ceiling windows and the chirping of birds filled the air with a nice vibe.

There were not many students as usual. Well, it was normal because, of course, the princesses of four of the most powerful kingdoms wouldn’t sit in the same classroom as others. They attend special magic classes meant only for them. They learn how to hone their basic magic skills; for example, they learn to talk to birds, how to fly, and how to teleport. But all of them have a long way to go before they can become experts like their parents.

"Hey, Irees. Have you read that book yet?"asked Alison walking up to them.

"Yes, I have. It was so good. I loved the details about the war. It"s interesting."

"I knew you would love it," Alison warmly smiled at her.

Eleena rolled her eyes, "There he goes again with his sweet tongue." Harleen smirked, "Or are you jealous that he doesn’t use that sweet tongue while speaking to you?" Elina cursed at her, "I would rather have a dog lick me in the face than be jealous of him. Ew,"she crinkled her nose, "I guess you should work a little harder on your makeup though."

Harlin grinned as she sat at her desk, "Even though I wouldn’t mind if he admires me, personally my standard is way too high." Elina rolled her eyes. Irees continued her chatter with Alison as Ayleen sat between Elina and Harlin.

"Will you two stop your dogfighting?"Aylin said, brushing a strand of hair from her face.

"Oh, mother! Please forgive us for such brusqueness. We shall never disappoint you again." Elina said, mockingly pleading to Aylin. Aylin pursed her lips.

"I'm not your mother."

"But you sure don"t let me feel the absence of my mother." Harlin burst out laughing. But just then Mr. Rupert entered the classroom.

"Okay, everyone, sit down. Mr. Alison, why are you standing at Ms. Iris"s desk?"

Alison hurried away.

"So, today we are going to learn about the history of the fall of the wizard kingdom."

...

Later that afternoon,

"We should pack for tomorrow," Harlin said taking a sip from the golden trimmed pink tea cup.

"What are you gonna pack? Makeup kit?" Elina asked as she munched on her apple pie, Cathyon sitting on her lap as she played with her brown hair.

"You know the answer, Eli. By the way, aren’t you gonna pack some food for you?"

"Oh, thanks for the reminder! I gotta ask Brandy for some snacks to carry."

Iris was there reading a book called 'War and Runes', too intent on reading to notice the bickering.

Aylin sat there quietly sipping tea and adoring the beauty of her favourite flowers— violet, iris and whatnot. The western wind was tender against her pale skin. The cool bridge carried the smell of flowers into the tea pavilion.

"Ris, what are you readjng?" Harlin asked.

"Oh, it's the book that Alison gave me," Iris said. Elina rolled her eyes.

"Didn’t you say you are done reading this book?" Aylin asked.

"I lied," Iris replied in don't-give-a-damn way. "But I gotta read this in case he asks me about the contents inside this book."

"Why do you lie about being interested in war? You don't like brutality, Ris."

"Eh, I'm the crown princess. I have to handle wars and stuffs in the future even if I don't like it. Better practise from now."

"And, why do you keep being friendly with that general-boy? I don’t like the way he acts around you. He kinda creeps me out," Elina said devoured another piece of pie.

"You will know, Eli, when the time comes," answered Aylin in Iris's stead.

"Wait- is there something I don't know?" Elina said urging forward.

...

Hmmmm...where the story on your profile. I would like to add it to my reading list :coffee:


Iris went to the dining hall in her regular corset to find everyone except for Harlin, who was obviously busy doing her makeup.

Regular corset? That already hurts too much...


Iris sat down beside Elina and nudged her with her elbow.

"I will ask Mother and Father now, okay?" Eli nodded. Aylin looked at Iris from the other side of the dining table in a meaningful way and nodded.

"Mother, Father, are you aware that we are going on an expedition tomorrow?"Iris said. Queen Eleeza slightly frowned her eyebrows.

"I think not. Where are you going?"

"We are visiting Raczil to look at what the war has left behind."

"I see you are interested in war, my dear," King Franks said, his reddish eyes sparkling.

War! So quickly!
"Nope. Last time, I couldn’t exactly remember what I saw; it was vague. But it was really clear this time. I saw that some people were being burnt in the city plaza. The crowd was chanting insults at them. And everything was covered in black mist. I felt as if I were present in that dream."
I'm imagining the chants!

"Hey, I'm not going insane. I don’t need a psychologist."

Well then keep your secrets then -Psychologist

they learn to talk to birds

Why is talking to birds a priority magic? They have no need to talk to you. They need jobs.

"Will you two stop your dogfighting?"Aylin said, brushing a strand of hair from her face.

You wrote dogfighting. I am thinking of dogfighting.

"We should pack for tomorrow," Harlin said taking a sip from the golden trimmed pink tea cup.

I have never once though of a gold/pink teacup.



"Eh, I'm the crown princess. I have to handle wars and stuffs in the future even if I don't like it. Better practise from now."
That's right! Prepare!
"Wait- is there something I don't know?" Elina said urging forward.





Verdict : All right, this slaps. Where is the rest?

 

Nevafrost

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Hmmmm...where the story on your profile. I would like to add it to my reading list :coffee:




Regular corset? That already hurts too much...




War! So quickly!

I'm imagining the chants!



Well then keep your secrets then -Psychologist



Why is talking to birds a priority magic? They have no need to talk to you. They need jobs.



You wrote dogfighting. I am thinking of dogfighting.



I have never once though of a gold/pink teacup.




That's right! Prepare!






Verdict : All right, this slaps. Where is the rest?

Wait- you actually liked it? DAMN someone actually said this slaps for the first time.
Sad to break it to you but this is the first draft and this is the only chapter I have written so far. I'm done with the planning and worldbuilding but I just can't put them into words.
Thanks!!!
Edit: Also, the story in my signature is the same one but I deleted all the chapters because I'm rewriting. Sowwy
Also, reading this once again is so much funnier. You are so funny, don't go bald. @eagle_360
 
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So many nice folks are giving back to the community by giving good feedback. I shall do the opposite and look through a few lines of your novel and only give reactions images. (some words).

Thus, what I am giving is my visceral emotional turmoil while reading your chapter. Letting you interpret how the reader is thinking throughout the sections and doing your own "figure what the feedback is."


I am terrible at giving constructive criticism, this will be purely useless info. (Take it with salt 🧂or else I will shame you)



~Letsgo~
Alright. Here you go then.

And
 
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