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[SkaraVaden]

Hi! I would love some feedback on my story, if you feel like it :D I want honesty, because I fear I could have a bias about the story haha

Respawned, My Last Chance

Luna wakes up trapped in her character's body in her favorite MMO: an adventurer in the magical and monstrous world of Elaria. It seems like a dream come true... until the nightmares outside and inside her head begin to haunt her. Elaria is no longer just a game. It's real,...

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[Cookiez_N_Potionz]

Dump your links here and I’ll give you a wonderful bs review! (With sincerity! Straight from the heart!)

(I’m an inexperienced, unprofessional author/reader so take my words lightly. I’m doing this for fun because I’m bored. Feel free to disagree with my opinions, I just want to see how people write their stories)

I have no requirements. I read everything and anything (but I’m more familiar with BL lol)

And you can roast mine: Dotage and Discretion

I revamped my supernatural LitRPG story and and wrote a better synopsis

The Maverick and The Succubus [LitRPG]

5 Systems. 5 Royal Families. Greetings, Champion! 17 year-old, Collin Rex is a football player with a heart of gold. But his easygoing life is flipped upside-down when his older siblings fall into a mysterious coma. With no more tricks in their playbook Collin's folks decide to move back to...

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[MsChange]

Dump your links here and I’ll give you a wonderful bs review! (With sincerity! Straight from the heart!)

(I’m an inexperienced, unprofessional author/reader so take my words lightly. I’m doing this for fun because I’m bored. Feel free to disagree with my opinions, I just want to see how people write their stories)

I have no requirements. I read everything and anything (but I’m more familiar with BL lol)

And you can roast mine: Dotage and Discretion

Stained
Tell me something other than “your enter button hates you” ?

 

[ZannaYO]

Hi, not sure if you are still doing this, but if so, would you give my story a read?

It's a historical fantasy harem story, but very slow burn. The first and second chapters are written a little differently because I was still establishing the tone. I know R-18 content does well here but I'm not super comfortable writing it, so I just hope the story and characters carry it enough instead.

Edit: I also drew the title art myself!

Consorts of the Court

(A REVERSE WORLD STORY) In a world where women rule and men serve, Princess Moriya was born to conquer—not just lands, but hearts. Raised in the grandeur of Dyss, the most powerful Queendom on the continent, Moriya is destined to become Queen. But power in a matriarchal empire doesn't...

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