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Ilikewaterkusa

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Link the story you want me to review and in return can you review my story. You don’t have to review mine, to get my review but it would be appreciated of you
 

MareoKen

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I'll take you up on that offer! Here's my story: Spirit Exorcists

Since your story doesn't have that many chapters yet I'll leave some feedback in the comments instead!
 
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OK. I will check out your story today. You have 13k words, which are enough for a review in my book. I will try to leave comments as well. Could you check out Anti-cake Dungeon Delving? It is BL with a fat to fit protagonist troupe and adventuring. If you don't like BL, I can offer either Shelter Rescue, which centers around the running of an animal shelter. Or, my fairy tale novellete: Annie and the Rice Quest.

Shelter Rescue does have romance, but it is BG. Annie and the Rice Quest has only the hint of a BG romance and focuses on an elderly protagonist. Take your pick.
You know, your story needs a lot of work. I wrote down some suggestions in the first chapter. I call off the swap, seeing as I don't intent to read further. Your story confuses me with all the dialogue that is not specified from who it was spoken.
 
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AnonUnlimited

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You know, your story needs a lot of work. I wrote down some suggestions in the first chapter. I call off the swap, seeing as I don't intent to read further. Your story confuses me with all the dialogue that is not specified from who it was spoken.
Lol.
I've been on their discord and in order to understand their writing you have to really see how they constantly interact with each other.
I really don't blame you for the confusion. :ROFLMAO:
 
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Hmm... currently I'm rewriting them... maybe later?
I'll have a look at yours if I have time.
 
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