Low attention span reviews and ratings [Closed]

[Makimaam]

There is no strict format for my feedback, but here is my general approach:

1. I read your synopsis, then I read Chapter 1 until I stop. That could be the first paragraph, or it could be the entire chapter. If it interests me, due to personal preference, I will continue to the next chapters.
2. I will tell you why I stopped if I think it might be constructive for you. When I don’t, it is usually along the lines of: I think you have a lot to work on and I am not qualified or patient enough to be your writing coach, or I don’t want to read generic, worldly, unedited AI-assisted content. I won’t use an AI checker, not that they are reliable anyway, so I will not accuse anyone of using it. I simply don’t want to continue reading.
3. If I make it to the end of the first chapter with my low attention span, which is difficult, I will give you a 5-star rating. Even if a piece doesn’t grab me til the end, I’ll give it 5 stars if I think it’s outstanding. I don’t rate anything lower than 5 stars.
4. If I really, really enjoy the work, I will give a constructive (or try to) review, and it can include criticism. But for me to write an essay about it, I have to like it first.

About me:

I am not going to brag about what qualifies me as a feedback giver. I will outright tell you that my feedback is subjective, personal, and it does not necessarily mean you are a bad writer if I stopped reading. It simply means the work did not interest me.

 

[McPhoenixDavid]

There is no strict format for my feedback, but here is my general approach:

1. I read your synopsis, then I read Chapter 1 until I stop. That could be the first paragraph, or it could be the entire chapter. If it interests me, due to personal preference, I will continue to the next chapters.
2. I will tell you why I stopped if I think it might be constructive for you. When I don’t, it is usually along the lines of: I think you have a lot to work on and I am not qualified or patient enough to be your writing coach, or I don’t want to read generic, worldly, unedited AI-assisted content. I won’t use an AI checker, not that they are reliable anyway, so I will not accuse anyone of using it. I simply don’t want to continue reading.
3. If I make it to the end of the first chapter with my low attention span, which is difficult, I will give you a 5-star rating. Even if a piece doesn’t grab me til the end, I’ll give it 5 stars if I think it’s outstanding. I don’t rate anything lower than 5 stars.
4. If I really, really enjoy the work, I will give a constructive (or try to) review, and it can include criticism. But for me to write an essay about it, I have to like it first.

About me:

I am not going to brag about what qualifies me as a feedback giver. I will outright tell you that my feedback is subjective, personal, and it does not necessarily mean you are a bad writer if I stopped reading. It simply means the work did not interest me.

Nice. I think.

 

[Eldoria]

About me:

I am not going to brag about what qualifies me as a feedback giver. I will outright tell you that my feedback is subjective, personal, and it does not necessarily mean you are a bad writer if I stopped reading. It simply means the work did not interest me.

Fair enough. Please read my fiction. You can decide whether to continue or not after reading chapter 1. Or if you can't finish chapter 1, that's okay. Any feedback is appreciated. Thank you.

Regards.

Blood Rose Princess Just Wants to Live in Peace with Her Little Daughter

What if the world chose to forget its saviour and its sins, while the saviour chose instead to protect her daughter’s innocence? Seven years ago, the age of tyranny was erased from the memory of mankind. Civilisation crumbled, the tyrants fell into an eternal sleep, and the victims woke...

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[laccoff_mawning]

What if my first chapter's only five words long? Will you still give it 5 stars?

Jokes aside, here: https://www.scribblehub.com/series/643320/does-this-system-want-me-to-become-a-villain/

If you feel unable to give me feedback, may I have the paragraph/sentence you stopped reading anyway?

 

[V8485]

I hope you enjoy. The Devil’s Hell | Scribble Hub. Have a good day.

 

[Makimaam]

Blood Rose Princess Just Wants to Live in Peace with Her Little Daughter

What if the world chose to forget its saviour and its sins, while the saviour chose instead to protect her daughter’s innocence? Seven years ago, the age of tyranny was erased from the memory of mankind. Civilisation crumbled, the tyrants fell into an eternal sleep, and the victims woke...

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First impression:
The synopsis is long, but it did give me a general idea about your work. From the start, I could tell you are passionate about it, and it gives a good impression.

Vol 1, Chapter 1:

The image in the middle of the chapter actually distracted me and pulled me out of immersion. It’s my personal preference, but I would have preferred to see it at the end. I slowed down there and even considered stopping, but given the good impression from the synopsis, I decided to continue.

The teeth-brushing description was overly long
I was almost spacing out until you slapped my face with blood and a flashback. I see what you did there... fine, I’ll continue.

Because blood.

Jose, one of the elite tyrants who once sat at the top of the Rose Kingdom's Noble Council, gritted his teeth.

He knew the woman before him was a real threat to the tyrannical rule of the Rose Kingdom that had haunted them for years.

This part slowed me down again. I was under the impression that we were pulled back into Marry’s memories, yet the pov switched to this... dude. Sure, I get why you did that. You want to show how fearsome Marry was but there is a way to do that while staying in her perspective.

This flashback isn’t smoothly integrated into the chapter and felt very much like a separate excerpt or chapter.

...
And then she got pregnant, but since this scene is written from Jose’s perspective, we don’t really feel anything for Marry. It’s functional, delivering the backstory, but in a rather abrupt way. The narrative spends a lot of time describing the scene, but the actual punchline, Marry being pregnant, is delivered like a sudden sucker punch.

Overall, the text is readable, but I couldn’t make it to the “7 years flashback” bold line. We were pulled out of immersion again and explicitly told we were back in the present instead of being shown. The flashback once more felt like it existed only to deliver information.



Did I finish? No.
Will I give you a 5-star rating? YES. But why? Because I can.

And this is purely subjective. I see your passion, I can tell you’ve put a lot of work into it, and my rating is cheap. So why not?

 

[Eldoria]

Did I finish? No.
Will I give you a 5-star rating? YES. But why? Because I can.

And this is purely subjective. I see your passion, I can tell you’ve put a lot of work into it, and my rating is cheap. So why not?

I appreciate your honest feedback. Thank you again.

Regards.

 

[writerwolf359]

Enjoy! (Or don’t!)

In the Shadow of Moonlight

Sophia “Wolfgirl” Jones has always had a strong affinity for wolves. After the death of her mother and her father’s descent into alcoholism, it becomes her refuge. Thus, when acting out a local native legend unexpectedly succeeds in turning her into a werewolf, and she meets a strange, but...

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[IWILLDEFYTHEHEAVENS]

It's full of profanity, don't criticize that
https://www.scribblehub.com/series/2067281/dominion-protocol/

 

[AliceMoonvale]

I almost never ask for feedback because I'm cringe and free, but I think you're hilarious.
Me next.
https://www.scribblehub.com/series/2104691/this-is-how-i-lived/

 

[Thiris]

Sounds pretty fun, so here is mine. https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1682111/master-of-magic-master-of-me/

And yes, I'm aware that my synopsis and prologue gives pretty much the same information. I'm still struggling to decide whether just to delete prologue. ?

 

[ReiHayashi]

I shall make my offering: https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1101435/the-best-revenge-is-becoming-a-villainess/

 

[FRWriter]

Getting Tempokai vibes from this thread... it's essentially the same thing, literally destroying any story.

Just with nicer words and a lot of kindness ;-)

If you couldn't make it past chapter 1, reading Eldoria's story, you'll probably quit after just a single paragraph from 90% of all stories here on SH.

 

[Failnot]

Neat feedback thread

Idk if my story is gripping enough for even an average attention span, but I will make an attempt. Only four chapters rn, so that's a plus

Here you go

 

[JKKnotts]

aight, bet. lets do this < 3

Us, Looking Beyond Ourselves

[Note: current versions are rough drafts. Any comments/ corrections that can be noted are much appreciated] Before reading, please keep in mind: - This story is PLOT with porn - This is a slow romance, so you will have to wait for said porn - The setting is urban with...

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i just published chapter 3 too.

 

[Eldoria]

Neat feedback thread

Idk if my story is gripping enough for even an average attention span, but I will make an attempt. Only four chapters rn, so that's a plus

Here you go

Honestly... if you really want constructive feedback, holding a focus group discussion (FGD) is more worth considering than picking up feedback from random people on the internet. You can find 3-6 respondents who meet certain criteria.

For example, readers who like genres that match your fiction genres. Ask them to read your fiction... then conduct an interview with structured questions such as immersion, hook, pacing, POV, characters, worldbuilding, and other intrinsic elements of fiction.

This way, you can evaluate your fiction objectively.

However, of course, finding the right respondents is not easy... you may have to pay for their time and effort. But it's worth it.

 

[Failnot]

Honestly... if you really want constructive feedback, holding a focus group discussion (FGD) is more worth considering than picking up feedback from random people on the internet. You can find 3-6 respondents who meet certain criteria.

For example, readers who like genres that match your fiction genres. Ask them to read your fiction... then conduct an interview with structured questions such as immersion, hook, pacing, POV, characters, worldbuilding, and other intrinsic elements of fiction.

This way, you can evaluate your fiction objectively.

However, of course, finding the right respondents is not easy... you may have to pay for their time and effort. But it's worth it.

That's probably a good idea, but random people on the internet are also a solid resource I think. If I'm lucky, they'll give me a nice average reader perspective

 

[Eldoria]

That's probably a good idea, but random people on the internet are also a solid resource I think. If I'm lucky, they'll give me a nice average reader perspective

Well, perhaps you could consider FGD after you've completed your fiction writing project. I mean, your book is already written, and now you just need to package and market it. I'd also consider this option, especially since I've used this method to evaluate a website before its release.

 

[FRWriter]

This thread is useful for people who are desperate for input and have received none so far. However, you generally don't want critical people reviewing your story who, by their own admission, have a low attention span and constantly drop stories even after a few paragraphs. The average reader sees your story, reads the summary and then they WANT TO ENJOY IT. So in general, they are far more lenient and usually read at least five to ten chapters before they drop it.

Usually, you want feedback from readers who can identify with your story's premise and tags.
This kind of feedback here has its place, and it's certainly helpful, but ideally, you want feedback from organic readers.

 

[Makimaam]

This thread is useful for people who are desperate for input and have received none so far. However, you generally don't want critical people reviewing your story who, by their own admission, have a low attention span and constantly drop stories even after a few paragraphs. The average reader sees your story, reads the summary and then they WANT TO ENJOY IT. So in general, they are far more lenient and usually read at least five to ten chapters before they drop it.

Usually, you want feedback from readers who can identify with your story's premise and tags.
This kind of feedback here has its place, and it's certainly helpful, but ideally, you want feedback from organic readers.

Yepp, like your own readers...

If you couldn't make it past chapter 1, reading Eldoria's story, you'll probably quit after just a single paragraph from 90% of all stories here on SH.

I feel called out.

But true.