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foxes

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Once again, no one showed up for the flash mob in yellow and blue T-shirts.
 
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Representing_Tromba

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If you don't mind, I would love any feedback you can give. Thank you!
 

lerasycamore

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hi! i'd love some feedback, i'm only starting out as well so i'd be grateful for any reviews

 

DavidBrackett

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Just a couple days in here at ScribbleHub and I'd really appreciate if you'd give my story a look. Thank you.

 

writerwolf359

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Sure, I’ll bite:
 

Humanistheart

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I’d take feedback on either of these if you would be so kind. Both take place in the same world but are quite different. The first stars a neurodivergent main character the other a MtF journey.





thank you!
 
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Failnot

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I'm reading foxes' work now, after which I'll get to as much as I can
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My goat doesn't need feedback because he's goated. But you can read some of the junk in my signature if you want.
Reading Princess Possession.

The synopsis is okay. I feel like you could definitely do better with it, because as it stands, even though it does tell us about the story, I think it's pretty bland. Cool art, btw.

As for the story, it's enjoyable and good at building intrigue. On top of that, you're pretty good with describing the environment and the characters, it's easy to imagine them vividly. Character dynamics are fun, and the characters themselves are interesting (Zaphenne for example manages to capture your attention without much time allotted to her. Breadcrumbs on Alyssa in her past life are very interesting). Only criticism I can think of off the top of my head is that the fight scenes I read aren't very easy to picture. For example:

"Her sword slams into Gideon’s staff, cutting him off.

Gideon turns the staff, letting the sword scrape along its length.

Tatiana pivots, bringing the sword to a full stop before reversing the swing."

This might be a skill issue on my part but I had to stand up and wield an invisible sword to figure out what was going on right here. You can afford to be more descriptive in these bits.

I don't have a lot to add here, it's pretty good stuff. When I read more, I'll leave a review.
 
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A-Random-Writer

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Could you take a look at mine?
 
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