I'll evaluate new writers!

[WhiteFeather]

Check out my work!
"The Silent Scabbard"
Link in my signature.

 

[J.Morikami]

Check this out. Please give feedback. Thankyou.

T.S.U.N.G. ARK: The Last Game Of Mankind

T.S.U.N.G. ARK LitRPG × Sci-Fi × Dystopian Survival × VR × Last Game Of Humanity Earth is dead. Humanity lives in stasis pods aboard the moon-sized vessel T.S.U.N.G. ARK, their minds uploaded into a game simulation called Terra One, a vast, digital world crafted to save...

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[ItzATrap52]

Can you check out my work?

Traversing through different worlds as a vampire princess

A boy born and raised as a normal human in a non-magical world, is reincarnated into the body of the baby vampire princess in a magical world. Now Celine has to adapt to her new life as the vampire princess in a new and dangerous world. Traveling and finding new...

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[Shirobaxy]

Put me on the chopping block (I hope I get good feedback)

I have a novel called, Reincarnated into a failed marriage. It has fantasy, isekai, romance, litrpg and drama.

What you can expect is;
- Good Pacing
- Immediate threat
- Immediate goals for Aric
- A self aware system that has real personality
- Learning how to navigate the world in a shitty body with amnesia.
- Learning how to use magic to solve the crimes of said body
- Redeeming himself
- Clear power usage and restriction

 

[LEGENDGOD1]

damn i would love to be evaluated. i am ready to be massacred https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1510032/cosmeta-hitmans-life-is-hard-in-another-world/

 

[FoundForester]

So far I've learned I describe stuff way to much, my pacing sucks, and I need to be less poetic. I'd love to see what else I need to work on: LE BOOK

 

[RaizellV]

I'm reading the story, and I like it. But you should tighten Chapter one a bit; it was a tad draggy for me. In the later chapters it's less noticeable.

And this is a personal thing, lmao, but the childhood bit is boring me. Especially the mom. She feels like the generic nice parent. I hope there's something more interesting at play with the parents, and they're not just stereotypes. :)


Edited:

I kept reading. The story is very fun, but you have issues in story flow that I have to squint my eyes to ignore.

The main problem is that you have too much dramatic dialogue. It feels repetitive. Not every moment or conversation needs to be dramatic, especially ones between close family, and I trust you know which parts I'm talking about; reread it yourself, and you'll recognize that some sentences or paragraphs feel unnatural or cringey. The solution would be to either delete them, or change some of it to feel less heavy.

I suggest just deleting them. For example, you could do away with Chapter 5 entirely- it's just an infodump about the setting, and readers will skip past it. Same with an earlier chapter, where the MC first says Mommy and Daddy. It was repetitive, generic, and added very little to the story, so I skimmed past it. It didn't gimme any plot, any character progression, and it didn't even have humor, it was just unnecessarily dramatic. It made me wonder why you even added it.

To talk about the more positive sides, this was one of the better novels I've seen asking for reviews. I like the mix of xianxia and fantasy, and the MC was very likeable. And the prose were very vivid, abeit slow paced. Keep up the good work! :)

Thank you for the feedback!
I have indeed been thinking about rewriting the beginning chapters of the story, since the pace and flow change quite a bit in the later part.
In any case, I appreciate your detailed critique!

 

[Talien_Auravale]

I've just dropped a new novel here on Scribble Hub...

Do help to read and leave a feedback in the comments... https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1548321/ashen-crest-rise-of-the-soulborne/

 

[N.K.Watson]

Hi!
I've got just under 15,000 words and 4 chapters. I've never attempted to write before, im just spilling out a silly idea! Would love to hear input from anyone.

 

[Edenc2708]

Ya, I'll read your story (max like 10k words unless I really like it). Hopefully, you can do the same for me, although I am not requiring anything.

My total chapters is currently about 10k words bro.
Can you please help me for a review?
Thank you so much

I Was Reincarnated Into Dice

A man is reborn as a sentient dice. A secret slumbers within him, and when it awakens, it casts everything he believed into doubt. He rolls random spells. Sometimes he heals. Sometimes he explodes. Sometimes he remembers things he shouldn’t. Bound to a girl he barely knows, haunted by...

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