I will judge your book by its cover (pic, title, blurb and few pages) –– AI ASSISTED WORKS ARE WELCOME –– CLOSED (3/3)

[Bimbanana]

Well, sooner or later i have to do my share as a responsible adult and responsible community members

Send me your story

T&C:

1. I prefer authors who are struggling with English.
Yes, I mean the ones using AI as an assistant, not the ones letting AI write the whole thing just to farm word count. And definitely not translation slop. I will notice. I work with AI a lot.
What I’ll do instead is point out what your AI editor is doing wrong and what you should fix. You still have to be the final editor of your AI editor.

2. Just like the title says, I judge based on the start.
If your opening doesn’t hook me, I’ll say it.
Maybe it helps your story’s marketability. Maybe it doesn’t. That part’s up to you.

3. Objectivity? I’ll try but not in the way you think.
I’ll position myself as a casual reader who doesn’t care about your effort.
Because that’s what most readers are.

4. Story judgment? Not really.
I’ll only tell you if it makes me want to keep reading or not.
I’m not going to fully judge your story when I’ve only skimmed a few chapters. That would be nonsense.

5. No fanfiction.
If your first work are fanfiction, then sorry. You skipped:
- Worldbuilding
- Lore creation
- Character creation
…and borrowed everything from some famous IP for easy visibility on your first work.
To me, that’s worse than AI slop because it’s still allowed.

6. Response time?
When I feel like it.
I’m also busy writing my own stuff and judging people on the forum.

7. Worried about being labeled AI slop?
DM me. I’ll send the feedback privately too.

Woof.

 

[Ace_Sorou]

Had to resize this image multiple times, and even cut into it. But the name of my story is Hellride V8. I did go back and revise chapter 3, but my later chapters are much better than my earlier chapters.
Put simply, it's an isekai with a Hot Rodder from Arkansas as the main protagonist. And the world he's gone to is a dark fantasy world where the antagonists are basically Western horror archetypes.

 

[Bimbanana]

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Had to resize this image multiple times, and even cut into it. But the name of my story is Hellride V8. I did go back and revise chapter 3, but my later chapters are much better than my earlier chapters.
Put simply, it's an isekai with a Hot Rodder from Arkansas as the main protagonist. And the world he's gone to is a dark fantasy world where the antagonists are basically Western horror archetypes.

I'm more into ford mustang fastback but sure, i'll check it out

 

[Corty]

Take your pick from my signature. (If you are on mobile, turn your phone to landscape to see it)

 

[AliceMoonvale]

Judge mine.

 

[Bimbanana]

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Had to resize this image multiple times, and even cut into it. But the name of my story is Hellride V8. I did go back and revise chapter 3, but my later chapters are much better than my earlier chapters.
Put simply, it's an isekai with a Hot Rodder from Arkansas as the main protagonist. And the world he's gone to is a dark fantasy world where the antagonists are basically Western horror archetypes.

Aight, here's my judging:

1. Your cover is bad, not going to help much to make readers interested to click. Its very much like a teenager drawing. (Oh, btw the pic is warped in your main page)

2. Your blurb is like 1 damn long paragraph. Not good also. You need beats, you need emphasise. And you didn't do that on the very first thing your readers will saw.

3. Storywise, ugh its too fast and too flat. The worse part is Jack doesnt even show any emotions when he realize he's not on earth anymore. His attachment to his dodge? ungrounded. Heck, even the villagers reactions also flat. Don't you think people at that age would react even stronger towards stranger wearing strange clothing? let alone bringing a loud moving metal they never saw their entire life. It should be treated like a monster charging into their village.

3. Yes, i got the vibe of Ash williams and army of darkness here, but your MC is just like... flat. You need to give something to explain his character. Either his remarks, his emotion, or simply narrator explanation, or anything.

4. Btw, i also saw story with this similar setup currently running on royal road with ads. With proper cover, proper blurb, same muscle car, same american guy, and it got hot elf chicks also.

Here's the summary for your marketability/hooks:

Cover: 3/10
Blurb: 2/10
Early chapters: 3/10


Well that's all, wish you luck!
Vroom Vrooom

 

[CinnaSloth]

Here ya go. have fun.

Ise-se-Kai 20

I was isekai'd within my isekai after being previously isekai'd, and my Isekai Goddess is starting to get really angry at me for dying, and needing to be reborn again after being isekai'd for the tenth time in a row within the first day of every new world I was...

www.scribblehub.com

 

[Bimbanana]

Take your pick from my signature. (If you are on mobile, turn your phone to landscape to see it)

Jesus!
That many novels and chapters?! Are you even one person?
Corty, are you sure you dont have underpaid raccoon sweatshop working for you?

Aight, i wont choose the fanfic one, the already famous one one, and the 0 chapters/week one.

I choose you! Righteous Villain!

1. Cover is fine, but since you put it on display next to your other novel with better cover, it looks less attractive.

2. Title is typical, not engaging enough.

3. Blurb is plain, not bad but not engaging also

4. Storywise, dang i hope that Beck is a friend with benefit ones, otherwise, shucks!
This story is misfortune after misfortune. But to be honest it still feel cliche for me, more like... its his own fault for being a pushover, no? But then again, other story doing fine by writing beautiful misery for hundreds of chapters. But the difference is, this story doesnt give the right hook for why i want to know more. He's not tragic enough, not interesting enough, and doesn't have clear stakes on his second life.

5. On early chapters, the reason why i wanted to read more of this story is because of how you package it. Your prose, your writing, your description, your world building, is all great. Super comfy! But then again, the flavour still a bit bland tho.

5. I think you dont need these kind of feedback anymore. You already know how to hook people on your other story. You have fanbase, you have views, you have portfolios.
I think its better if you studying how to use all that to monetized more. With all your efforts (i can tell), you deserve more.

Verdict:
Cover: 6/10
Blurb: 7/10
Title: 4/10
Early chapters: 5/10

Judge mine.

Y-Yes, please put the knife down first

1. I like the drink, drink, drink! and let's move it. The first one is fun and exciting the second one is so good for chilling while nodding around.

2. Drink, drink, drink! have a very good rhyme. bottle and aristotle? this girl had some history!

3. Music wise, i enjoy let's move it the most. Im moving my head a lot hearing this the first time with my headphone.

4. For the others? Well i can see its good as soundtrack or setting up the mood when im driving late night. Can't really tell since not gonna play that when im at home tho

That's all, keep on rhyming girl!

 

[Shadowless3]

Beneath the Crown

Born of royal blood but raised in shadows, she lives among the streets. A bright, reckless spirit with a hidden past and a secret only her sister knows. Careless, curious, and untamed, she has no interest in kingdoms, crowns, or fate. A streetwise troublemaker with a secret past, she hides...

www.scribblehub.com

Mine too! Though I don’t know what’s a blurb ?

 

[Zinless]

Though I don’t know what’s a blurb ?

The synopsis!

 

[Bimbanana]

Here ya go. have fun.

Ise-se-Kai 20

I was isekai'd within my isekai after being previously isekai'd, and my Isekai Goddess is starting to get really angry at me for dying, and needing to be reborn again after being isekai'd for the tenth time in a row within the first day of every new world I was...

www.scribblehub.com

Si, mi amor!

1. Title: it makes me tilted my head, that's good. I'm curious.

2. Blurb: This! Now this is a great blurb that hooks! (what? you all think I'm playing favorites here? well i am!). This a example with good creativity even a short blurb can make readers interested.

3. Cover: Good, starry. Is this some makoto shinkai story? Why the vibes different with the blurb? Hmmm, and the font for the main title makes me wincing my eyes tho... not that readable.

4. Storywise, well unfortunately i feel a bit betrayed here after setting my expectation based on the blurb. I was expecting something like... oh nvm, there it is! Got what i'm looking for at chapter 3! The continuation of the blurb.
But whew, that first 2 chapters was cute and hot tho... i approve!

Verdict:
Cover: 7.5/10
Blurb: 9.7/10
Title: 8.5/10
Early chapters: 6.5/10

Hail Addeaf!

 

[eagle_360]

Spoiler: Kaboom

Hey, I heard you like the big cannons so here's my character using the USS IOWA with its 16-inch guns to make mince-meat of enemies.

Mine is not comedy but I have similar cute little modern weapons. The front chapters are full of gender bender so it's not going anywhere at all.

Judge it hard! As hard as you can Mr Big Boy Orc.

 

[Shadowless3]

The synopsis!

Oh I see thanks

 

[Avarice_Of_The_Seven]

Regnum Aetern: Dual Rebirth

Having been reborn in another world under different circumstances, the two people see their new lives differently. While Daniel's mind is filled with suspicion and paranoia about the circumstances surrounding his rebirth after simply going to sleep and waking up as a baby, Maya sees her new...

www.scribblehub.com

Here's mine.

Note: I know my synopsis is generic and bad, but I can't think of anything better.

 

[AliceMoonvale]

Y-Yes, please put the knife down first

1. I like the drink, drink, drink! and let's move it. The first one is fun and exciting the second one is so good for chilling while nodding around.

2. Drink, drink, drink! have a very good rhyme. bottle and aristotle? this girl had some history!

3. Music wise, i enjoy let's move it the most. Im moving my head a lot hearing this the first time with my headphone.

4. For the others? Well i can see its good as soundtrack or setting up the mood when im driving late night. Can't really tell since not gonna play that when im at home tho

That's all, keep on rhyming girl!

Wait, why'd you react to my songs and not my story?

Not that I don't appreciate it of course! lmao thank you.

 

[code_sike]

Not comedy, but try mine. Had to make the cover myself and I think it turned out alright. My biggest weakness is description and one-line paragraphs for sure. Other than that, tear it apart, thanks!

 

[Bimbanana]

Wait, why'd you react to my songs and not my story?

Not that I don't appreciate it of course! lmao thank you.

Well that's the link you had on your signature!

Edit: Aaaah, the book is in that tiny icon thingy...
Ok, maybe later or tomorrow

 

[AliceMoonvale]

Well that's the link you had on your signature!

Edit: Aaaah, the book is in that tiny icon thingy...
Ok, maybe later or tomorrow

It looks tiny on mobile? interesting.
On mobile, when I rotate my screen, they're small but decent. Maybe depends on size of the phone I guess.

 

[Nevafrost]

I haven’t published it yet and I don't have a cover (yet).
Title: The Truth is Mysterious

Spoiler: Chapter:1

Fire. Screams.

"You shall perish in the deepest of hells!"

"These rat-bloods!"

"Disgrace to the magical society!"

Black mist. Everything went blank for some time.

"What"s happening?"



Iris woke up with a start, sweating. The skin around where her pendant was touching burned. Another weird dream, she thought to herself. But soon she shook it off and went to wash up. It was a long day ahead.



Iris went to the dining hall in her regular corset to find everyone except for Harlin, who was obviously busy doing her makeup.



Iris sat down beside Elina and nudged her with her elbow.



"I will ask Mother and Father now, okay?" Eli nodded. Aylin looked at Iris from the other side of the dining table in a meaningful way and nodded.



"Mother, Father, are you aware that we are going on an expedition tomorrow?"Iris said. Queen Eleeza slightly frowned her eyebrows.



"I think not. Where are you going?"



"We are visiting Raczil to look at what the war has left behind."



"I see you are interested in war, my dear," King Franks said, his reddish eyes sparkling.



"I'm so proud of you." Iris nodded and smiled. Harlin had entered the dining hall by then. She looked frantically at the others and bowed deeply, "I apologize for delaying my arrival."



Elina mocked her, "No need to be so polite, Late Queen. We know your makeup takes more time than your breakfast."



"That"s normal though." They kept bickering.



After breakfast,



All four of them were walking down the hall towards their classroom.



"Don"t you think they will find out?"asked Harlin, slightly frowning.



"Well, we gotta risk it, girl. We just have to act well enough for them not to find out," said Elina, slowing down to match her pace.



"It"s not just acting though. If Mr. Rupert tells Mrs. Eleejah, we are doomed. We have to make sure our plan works out," Aylin said, looking kind of worried.



"Iris?"Aylin said as she pulled Iris by her arm, "Is there anything on your mind?"



"Yes, you have been really silent," Elina mocked her.



"Actually, yes. I had this weird dream this morning and I can"t just forget what happened."



"Haven’t you been having way too many nightmares lately?" Aylin looked worried.



"Did I tell you it was a nightmare?"



"I can tell," she smiled warmly, "now, tell us what you dreamt about."



"It felt as if I had seen that dream before. Or, more like, I was there myself. It felt very tangible."



"Was it the same thing you saw last time?"



"Nope. Last time, I couldn’t exactly remember what I saw; it was vague. But it was really clear this time. I saw that some people were being burnt in the city plaza. The crowd was chanting insults at them. And everything was covered in black mist. I felt as if I were present in that dream."



"That"s spooky. Maybe you should consult the psychologist," Harlin suggested.



"Hey, I'm not going insane. I don’t need a psychologist."



They arrived at their classroom. They walked into the classroom. Wind blew in through the floor to ceiling windows and the chirping of birds filled the air with a nice vibe.



There were not many students as usual. Well, it was normal because, of course, the princesses of four of the most powerful kingdoms wouldn’t sit in the same classroom as others. They attend special magic classes meant only for them. They learn how to hone their basic magic skills; for example, they learn to talk to birds, how to fly, and how to teleport. But all of them have a long way to go before they can become experts like their parents.



"Hey, Irees. Have you read that book yet?"asked Alison walking up to them.



"Yes, I have. It was so good. I loved the details about the war. It"s interesting."



"I knew you would love it," Alison warmly smiled at her.



Eleena rolled her eyes, "There he goes again with his sweet tongue." Harleen smirked, "Or are you jealous that he doesn’t use that sweet tongue while speaking to you?" Elina cursed at her, "I would rather have a dog lick me in the face than be jealous of him. Ew,"she crinkled her nose, "I guess you should work a little harder on your makeup though."



Harlin grinned as she sat at her desk, "Even though I wouldn’t mind if he admires me, personally my standard is way too high." Elina rolled her eyes. Irees continued her chatter with Alison as Ayleen sat between Elina and Harlin.



"Will you two stop your dogfighting?"Aylin said, brushing a strand of hair from her face.



"Oh, mother! Please forgive us for such brusqueness. We shall never disappoint you again." Elina said, mockingly pleading to Aylin. Aylin pursed her lips.



"I'm not your mother."



"But you sure don"t let me feel the absence of my mother." Harlin burst out laughing. But just then Mr. Rupert entered the classroom.



"Okay, everyone, sit down. Mr. Alison, why are you standing at Ms. Iris"s desk?"



Alison hurried away.



"So, today we are going to learn about the history of the fall of the wizard kingdom."



...



Later that afternoon,



"We should pack for tomorrow," Harlin said taking a sip from the golden trimmed pink tea cup.



"What are you gonna pack? Makeup kit?" Elina asked as she munched on her apple pie, Cathyon sitting on her lap as she played with her brown hair.



"You know the answer, Eli. By the way, aren’t you gonna pack some food for you?"



"Oh, thanks for the reminder! I gotta ask Brandy for some snacks to carry."



Iris was there reading a book called 'War and Runes', too intent on reading to notice the bickering.



Aylin sat there quietly sipping tea and adoring the beauty of her favourite flowers— violet, iris and whatnot. The western wind was tender against her pale skin. The cool bridge carried the smell of flowers into the tea pavilion.

...

 

[Corty]

That many novels and chapters?! Are you even one person?

I have two raccoons in me. One is special the other is retarded Thank you for the detailed feedback