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Dragynpawne - Chapter 8: Sir Phobos | Scribble Hub

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I would appreciate feedback on my entire story, but it's 200k words, and that's a pretty big ask. It's a challenging and esoteric story, so I never expected it to become incredibly popular, and I'm more than satisfied with how many readers/views it has.

But, then there are about 4 chapters that have ridiculously low view counts wherever I post them. One of the chapters is the Xnoy chapter, which was intentionally written to be off-putting so I'm not concerned about it, but then there's this chapter featuring Sir Phobos.

For some reason, people just seem to avoid Sir Phobos like the plague, and I'd kind of like to know why. I would normally say that it's because he's an off-putting edgy Gary-Stu, but, the main character, Oryps, has characters literally drooling over him and stroking his ego for the entire story, yet by the end, he's endeared himself enough to readers to get them to go back to the 'Oryps' chapter to spend more time with him. That doesn't happen with Sir Phobos.

Like, where did I go wrong with him? Why is it that people end up liking similar characters like Oryps and King Priapism, but end up hating Sir Phobos?

 

[Deleted member 29448]

Thank you for offering free reviews! Hope you check out my novel when you have some time. It’s interactive, but I hope you find it enjoyable/worthwhile. If you don’t, that’s fine, too! Please let me know why.

Reaching Zenith [Interactive Story]

Zenith X is a twenty-five year old, crippled man with the worst luck. He even unknowingly traded away his life for a small bit of glory. As he enters through Death’s doors, a nearby person turns back the clock on Zenith’s miserable life. Zenith opens his eyes to...

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[ChronicleCrawler]

The review of Schwarz is my destiny of @Assurbanipal_II is done. Next one.

 

[Assurbanipal_II]

The review of Schwarz is my destiny of @Assurbanipal_II is done. Next one.

O.o I never asked for one, but I guess it is right. Reviews are always welcome. *waiting now for it to be admitted by our all supreme God Tony*

 

[CNSMLFCS]

The title of the thread says it all. I am willing to give your novels a try. Just post the link of your novel and I'll get to it eventually during my relaxation time. Oh, no worries I'm not someone that's going to make you bleed. I'll do my best to tell you where you can improve.

You can also specify which part of your novels should I focus on. Plot? Grammar? Sentence flow? Characters? Style?
Well, the truth is? I'm bored. Mehehehe.

• Schwarz is my destiny - Assurbanipal - Review - I almost forgot, currently in line.
• Conversion: atgongumerki - flow & style
• I Own a Brothel in Another World: Saileri - any feedback
• The Lone Macaw: LostLibrarian - (+)bzzt(-)
• Kaiba :K5rakitan - Your one star is ready
• War of the Gods: A Divine Comedy: samsarawithwords - Review
• the god of terror wants to go to school: Bbeel2103 - What's missing
• The Tyrant Duchess: sushirollw - Review
• Lord of the Ancient: KyoruS - - Flow, plot, style
• Reverse Reincarnation: Tejoka - Plot, Grammar, Style, Characters
• They Who rule: Sii - Review - Plot, Characters, and Style - Chap comment.
• Discount Blade: S-H-A-D-E - Plot, Characters, and Style
• Nanashi - Solstice - Constructive criticism
• Masquerade of Souls: Draculus-del-Viafat - review
• The Terran Traveller - ConTroll - plot, flow, character, ( +, -)
• Black Wing - Tofu_moon - Review
  Reaching Zenith -Senpai_Chan - Review

I'm a beginner writer, as in, this is my very first written story ever. Please check my story. Thanks!

The Idiot’s Guide To The Multiverse

Martin Harvie is a deceptively young-looking 23-year old man who gone throughout his life without proper social interaction and only played games and browsed the web on a local internet cafe. He graduated in highschool as a loner and got kicked out of the orphanage with only clothes on his...

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[clover2218]

So you're that bored huh. Well, if you don't mind checking mine out, I'd like a review about the overall impression. like it, hate it, just lay it out, I don't mind(it might break my heart inside, but I won't complain, I promise I won't)...

Viewpoint-Bloom

[Check out my discord server at https://discord.gg/B3HMzFg ... This is the story of Chitra. A girl born blind, living her life in a world of darkness. This is a story of her and Finitum. The unique full-dive VRMMORPG that brought a new beginning to her life, brought...

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[BenJepheneT]

The title of the thread says it all. I am willing to give your novels a try. Just post the link of your novel and I'll get to it eventually during my relaxation time. Oh, no worries I'm not someone that's going to make you bleed. I'll do my best to tell you where you can improve.

You can also specify which part of your novels should I focus on. Plot? Grammar? Sentence flow? Characters? Style?
Well, the truth is? I'm bored. Mehehehe.

• Schwarz is my destiny - Assurbanipal - Review - I almost forgot, currently in line.
• Conversion: atgongumerki - flow & style
• I Own a Brothel in Another World: Saileri - any feedback
• The Lone Macaw: LostLibrarian - (+)bzzt(-)
• Kaiba :K5rakitan - Your one star is ready
• War of the Gods: A Divine Comedy: samsarawithwords - Review
• the god of terror wants to go to school: Bbeel2103 - What's missing
• The Tyrant Duchess: sushirollw - Review
• Lord of the Ancient: KyoruS - - Flow, plot, style
• Reverse Reincarnation: Tejoka - Plot, Grammar, Style, Characters
• They Who rule: Sii - Review - Plot, Characters, and Style - Chap comment.
• Discount Blade: S-H-A-D-E - Plot, Characters, and Style
• Nanashi - Solstice - Constructive criticism
• Masquerade of Souls: Draculus-del-Viafat - review
• The Terran Traveller - ConTroll - plot, flow, character, ( +, -)
• Black Wing - Tofu_moon - Review
  Reaching Zenith -Senpai_Chan - Review

Caninstinct

Shiro believes he's been sent to the wrong school. Rormund Academy: home to only the best of the best. A school so exclusive even its name remains elusive to the public. An establishment where only the wealthiest, smartest, and most athletic students of the world reside. Shiro exhibits none of...

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Just a general review of what's gud and what's stinky is fine. Plus, it's on hiatus until next year, so no better time to catch up than now.

(Jesus Christ you're really asking for it on this one)

 

[Deleted member 29316]

If you can check mine, it's much appreciated! Just review anything that you read; the link to my story 'The Human Saint is Bored' is on my signature. Thank you!

 

[MoMoKushBear]

If you are still doing reviews. Here's my novel. It's an action/adventure novel.

Wandering the World

Stan, Dariüse, and Quiet are three friends reunited through the death of Stan's wife. This tragedy leads them on a journey around the world to not only discover themselves, but also how they fit into the world around them. Stan wants revenge against the powers that be, but who...

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The year is 2028 it's been 9 years since the Great War that saw most of the world nuked. A world government has now been set up to prevent anymore wars. After a tragic event Stan is seeking revenge, but against who? Find out more about this crazy world with Stan and his two homies, Dariűse, and Quiet. Who have their own beefs with this crazy world they live in.

 

[LazyPanda]

Please give mine a review.

Reborn as a Symbiote (Hiatus until further notice)

Hiatus: I apologize for the late update on progress. I have took a larger bite than I ought to from this novel, trying to incorporate many types of systems into one novel is a lot harder than I thought. I will begin anew from small stories that will be later...

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[HMiruko]

It's still on the early phases, but i'd appreciate it if you can give mine a look.

Summoned by a Demon Lord

Rihoku wasn’t having the greatest life on Earth. Granted, he wasn’t having the worst one either. His parents, wealthy and influential enough to bribe his school, left him uncared for. His friends abandoned him after learning about his parents' bribery. Rihoku was an outcast ever since. Trapped...

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[placeintime]

This is what I wrote in the menus contest, it still new so please check it out:

Secret Marriage: My Wife Spoils Me Everyday

After being in a coma for 1 year, Hao Lei wakes up, remembering nothing of the past. The only thing that he could have remembered was that he has a wife. And it turns out that his wife was the richest and most beautiful person in China. He could get anything...

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[Seerier]

Just starting, but here's mine. Any review would be greatly appreciated!

A Love In Time Save Nine Lives

A meaningful death is better than living a loveless life. He was the thorn that had stuck on to her. In life I'm yours, in death I'm still yours. As a wandering spirit, Qi Xiang never regretted her choice. She rather be the swaying lights on a candle that could...

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[Ankur_93]

The list is already too long. But can I still throw mine in the bin?
A World of Monsters

 

[zelotwo02]

can you review my story~ https://www.scribblehub.com/series/174970/tale-of-the-newborn-god/

 

[DekuKurohi]

Link in my signature already, please don’t worry about the grammar and try to enjoy the character’s perspective.
(There’s more story I wrote but they’re not all that important)

 

[Starsign]

Can please get a review as am not sure where to improve, and oh ya can you please tell what I should do when I finsh writing a chapter and I read a it and then I feel like I can do better?

I got reincarnated as a Zerg

Rise Of The Swarm

This story is about man who gets reincarnated into a Zerg and now has learn a bit about himself and the people around him, if he wishes to survive. ****** This is my first novel, sorry if it's a little bad (that's also why my description is horrible) but I promise...

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[Starsign]

Please review my book

Rise Of The Swarm

This story is about man who gets reincarnated into a Zerg and now has learn a bit about himself and the people around him, if he wishes to survive. ****** This is my first novel, sorry if it's a little bad (that's also why my description is horrible) but I promise...

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[Ankur_93]

Can you please review A World of Monsters? As for focus, storyline and world-building are the main two. Thanks!

 

[TheHelpfulFawn]

Flowers for a Grave

A village raid and only one young girl is lucky enough to survive the ordeal, though her family is ripped apart in the process. Her mother, long since dead. Her father, killed in the raid. Her brother, taken from her as they tried to escape to safety. Adversity stacks itself...

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read it or don't. Not my time to be spent.