Feedback thread (yes, another one)

[RiaCorvidiva]

okay fine, I'm sorry.

I forfeited my chance for feedback, didn't I?

 

[Deleted member 146224]

okay fine, I'm sorry.

I forfeited my chance for feedback, didn't I?

Nope! Once posted here, you will receive your feedback. It's inevitable you can't escape

 

[AstreiaNyx]

*looks at Danny's custom title*

*wonders if it's really a 'sacrifice'*

You’re onto something.

D is a giant M neon-highlighted.

 

[sparklebubble]

I appreciate your generosity, I'm wondering if you have/want a career in editing? You're quite thorough.

I'm excited for your feedback! Please take your time :) Hopefully there will be more substance by the time you get to this one

No One Hears You

In a story where romance meets suspense, an intricate web of secrets begins to unfold. As passion ignites and mysteries deepen, love and danger waltz on a thin line between hearts and lives.

www.scribblehub.com

 

[Deleted member 146224]

I appreciate your generosity, I'm wondering if you have/want a career in editing? You're quite thorough.

I'm excited for your feedback! Please take your time :) Hopefully there will be more substance by the time you get to this one

No One Hears You

In a story where romance meets suspense, an intricate web of secrets begins to unfold. As passion ignites and mysteries deepen, love and danger waltz on a thin line between hearts and lives.

www.scribblehub.com

I do editing occasionally for work, though I'm mostly on the writing side of things

I will try to get back to you asap, but currently the waiting times are quite long, since I'm busy IRL

 

[melchi]

Is tempted to ask for radish feedback

 

[Deleted member 146224]

Is tempted to ask for radish feedback

Feel free to do it tho, there's a massive setback for now, but I will try catching up in the next couple of days

 

[Director_Kun]

I don't know how to ask for feedback, but would you give feedback on my story?

Swords & Gunpowder

When the massive online dive multiplayer game shutdown, the players that remained until shutdown weren’t kicked out. However they remained in the game, one small issue their virtual reality was made real and now they have to scrounge for food and fight off enemy hordes who wish for them...

www.scribblehub.com

 

[Deleted member 146224]

I don't know how to ask for feedback, but would you give feedback on my story?

Swords & Gunpowder

When the massive online dive multiplayer game shutdown, the players that remained until shutdown weren’t kicked out. However they remained in the game, one small issue their virtual reality was made real and now they have to scrounge for food and fight off enemy hordes who wish for them...

www.scribblehub.com

Sure thing, but I must apologize in advance, because I'm currently going at a snail speed with feedback due to personal stuff

 

[Director_Kun]

Sure thing, but I must apologize in advance, because I'm currently going at a snail speed with feedback due to personal stuff

Thats alright, deal with real life first as its real.

 

[solankidushyant07]

My story is with a indian concept and god's love for people
Link- https://www.scribblehub.com/series/...th-using-gods-strength-to-overcome-obstacles/
If anyone wants to give it a try and tell me their thoughts then
Thanks in advance ? ?

 

[AdOtherwise]

I have another novel I began writing. Would you care to look at it? Its unreleased at the moment and I only have one chapter.

 

[Deleted member 146224]

I have another novel I began writing. Would you care to look at it? Its unreleased at the moment and I only have one chapter.

Sure, if you don't mind the wait

 

[AdOtherwise]

Sure, if you don't mind the wait

Want me to dm you? I also have it on royal road just to get feedback so I can give you the link for that as well.

 

[Deleted member 146224]

Want me to dm you? I also have it on royal road just to get feedback so I can give you the link for that as well.

You can give me RR link. It will be easier for me

 

[AdOtherwise]

You can give me RR link. It will be easier for me

Chapter 1 – Natural Demon - Demonic Fate

They say all children are born innocent. Was that sentiment made up? Ever since I was little I felt the gazes around me, looking down on me, despising (...)

www.royalroad.com

I'm still deciding where to take the story so any feedback would be great. Though if possible, I want to know your thoughts on the main character the most.

 

[Deleted member 146224]

Chapter 1 – Natural Demon - Demonic Fate

They say all children are born innocent. Was that sentiment made up? Ever since I was little I felt the gazes around me, looking down on me, despising (...)

www.royalroad.com

I'm still deciding where to take the story so any feedback would be great. Though if possible, I want to know your thoughts on the main character the most.

Once I have a bit more free time I'll take a look!

 

[FShell]

I hope you can give me some good feedback

From the Void [DRAFT]

A Book I'm thinking of writing, it will be subject to change however i would like feedback of each chapter/prologue/epilogue as it's released, I really hope for some good feedback, even if it is something like how to better word things or a question on why something is...

www.scribblehub.com

granted, it is really short at the moment, but i would love to receive the roasting you apply (I like it cooked to well done!)

 

[RP8]

Hey! Would there be anyone who would be willing to volunteer to read my story and give me an honest evaluation, I need a fresh perspective to know what areas I should work to improve on to be able to effectively deliver this story... I would really appreciate this favor...the story is on scribblehub and is called BEYOND THE STORYLINE

Beyond the Storyline

In different worlds, five protagonists are living out their cliche storylines until they are collected as 'Players' by strange entities. Dragged through a mysterious door, they find themselves in an unknown realm where they are sent to evolve, unaware of what lies ahead. Join them on their...

www.scribblehub.com

I also tried rewriting the recent chp in accordance to the feedback and suggestions I had gotten so it would be very helpful if someone could point out any other problems or improvement in comparison with the prev chps

So here's a link to the recent one:

Beyond the Storyline - CHAPTER 33: INTO THE ENIGMATIC WATERS | Scribble Hub

www.scribblehub.com

 

[CharlesEBrown]

Not sure if this is how links work here but what the heck...

Diamond in the Rough | Scribble Hub