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[Nahrenne]

Sorry, @Alma need to go afk for a while.
If you're still stuck when I get back, I'll try and give more suggestions but I don't know if any of them would be helpful.
>w<

o/


X

 

[Deleted member 1244]

Good morning!!!
I mean, good night!

 

[Drevart]

Or you can just do what i do and make up things along the way.

Comrade!

 

[Silver]

1. Too many dialogue. 2. word choice (I don't get the concept of character voice, honestly. I thought it was just how they speak, but my dialogue felt lacking and artificial). 3. plot structure. Exposition, rising action, climax, falling action, conclusion. I feel like, what I write don't even have that structure. It feels flat.

Sadly dialogue and word choice is always going to be a difficult thing since it always require a bunch of trail and error. The only thing I can tell you is to keep on editing until you make something that satisfies you. Some resources that may help you on the editing journey are the sites like power thesaurus and grammary.

Grammarly can help correct more basic mistakes so you worry less about grammar (You can also select words in there while writing to look at alternative word choices). And, Power thesaurus gives a bunch of synonyms for phases or words that you may want to change around. (Trust me it's alot more useful than it sounds.)

Plot structure is something you're going to either have to plan or wing it. But, winging it is a lot more fun. Just do it with a goal or theme in mind and you should be set.

Something I can recommend for flow is to have continuity between your quest. You have a lot of interesting plot point you can follow up in your next quests but never did. So following up on those points (the vampire child, the lance guardsman training, system undeath) can create flow for the next plot point or next quest.

 

[Alma]

Hmm...
*thinks*

I guess you could make a rough plan of what you intend for your character.
- Like, how far do you see them getting before dying (since I imagine that will be a plot point for your character due to not being able to fully die)
- How do you want your character to grow in terms of skills?
- How do you want your character to grow as a person?
- Do you want to introduce new NPCs that you'll keep using that other people would be able to use?
- What kind of quests do you want your character to do? Fighting ones, or non-fighting ones?
Etc...

X

Well... level 4? I planned for the vampirism to make two of him. (one alive, one undead) From that, I'll decide if it is the undead him versus the living him, or if the living is just a blood bag.
I am prioritizing noncombat skills honestly. At least for now until his mindset changed.
As a person, I want him to accept his new reality.
Maybe? I'm currently creating a vampire character, who is an ally of children on the street.

 

[Alma]

@GM, can I do that? having two almost identical character (with two character sheet of course)?

My intention with the gamer's skill is to have intuition-like correction. Like, I should adjust the swing angle a little bit. or, I should reduce the sugar by half a teaspoon. So my second character, while physically weaker, does have experience even though the skill correction doesn't work on him.

 

[Silver]

@GM, can I do that? having two character (with two character sheet of course)?

I don't think it should be a problem, there already been a someone who has two characters in one character sheet Iris and Reival (now separate I think) doing their quest together. And, there has been people with multiple characters. Heck we even have one guy who has four characters.

 

[Leegood]

Quest Report - Appraised

Rank D Promotion Exam - Part 1
Sponsor: Adventurer's Guild Location: Spire Reef Required Level: 9
Objectives: Prerequisite: A King’s Hand Agree to meet the Pirate King. Join the Pirate King’s ranks. Do not be discovered as a spy. The Guild has reviewed your reports, and there is a change in priorities. The Seven Pirate Kings of the North Sea are a dangerous enemy. We have determined that infiltrating their organization is a high-priority goal. You are hereby ordered to cancel all previous missions in Spire Reef. Focus all of your future attention on satisfying this “Pirate King”.

Rank D Promotion Exam - Part 2
Sponsor Pirate King "Black Fog" Location Spire Reef Objectives Meet the Pirate King “Black Fog”. Get laughed at for being weak. Demonstrate your loyalty to Pirate King “Black Fog”. Arrange the deaths of your 20 closest alliesin Spire Reef. Must include all personal NPCs your character has met in the region. Must include captain, second-in-command, friends, lovers, etc. Note: Faking their deaths is not permitted.
Description Arhahaharaha! You’re a funny one, did you know that? You think you’re great just because you’re the best of this tiny little pirate cove? Nobody takes the “pirates” from Spire Reef seriously! You’re all just worthless cannon-fodder of the Black Sea! The top of a mountain of trash is still trash! If you want to get anywhere the big fish swim, you’ve got to join one of the Pirate King armadas! Hahaha! And you want to join mine?! That’s a funny joke! You’re weaker than my toilet scrubbers! But sure! You amused me, and I think you’ll continue to amuse me. You can be an officer in my armada, as long as you pass my test. I want you to kill everyone that you love, and arrange the death of all your allies in Spire Reef. Let’s see… your captain? Your second-in-command? Your best mage? Your best friend? Your lover? Your chef? Your little protege? I want them all dead. Prove to me that you don’t have any lingering “attachments” to this city of trash. You can’t be my officer if there are others you still want to protect. Of course, I’ll be watching. Never think that I am not watching you. I know more about you than you might think.
Reward EXP: 300 Money: 40 G Items: Rank D Certificate Pirate King "Black Fog" Tattoo

Report - Solet' Luna
As of writing this, the Misty Puppeteer, the Poisonous Rustler, and Worm Mistress, as well as many other unnamed trashes, were no more. With this pair of bloody hands, I killed them all. It was fast, efficient, and unfeeling. All it took was one long night, and a few days to plan.

The Poisonous Rustler, they all died by themselves, trapped in illusions, and killed each other as if they were enemies. The shaman, although tried to break out, was personally ended by me.

The Misty Puppeteer, they sank into the depth of the Black Sea, and none remained to come back. I watched the process myself, as well as making sure that the ruin fell into the abyss of the sea.

Worm Mistress, died by my priced dagger, collapsed in front of me. Her blood, soaked my hands, was warm and sweet. I killed her, and made sure that she had no chance to revive. Even her soul, I did not spare. Now, the Underworld would never get her soul.

As for other trash, I straight-up killed them, some in their sleep, other with their groups. After all, Black Fog Pirate King feared no one.

When I went to the same location, the Pirate King remained there, looking down onto me. However, this time, the pressure from his body seemed smaller, and weaker. After what I encountered, the mortals, although strong, felt insignificant, compared to the force of nature.

He spoke about something, relating to glory and fame, as well as wealth and knowledge. I did not know or care about his promise. The entire quest seemed pointless, but, the plan must progress, and I must proceed. So, I faked my way, and shouted some praises. Before long, I swore allegiance to him, and he gave me his tattoo.

Of course, I told him to let me have something else, which he told me it was impossible. In the end, the tattoo of a cloudy mist engraved itself on my arm, and I left the room in trance, not feeling any excitement or happiness.

Spire Reef, although remained the same in the physical sense, felt strange and lifeless to me. Looking at the sun, I recalled the moment I spent here, as well as the moment before. Gradually, a sense of nostalgia swelled up, and a smile manifested on my face.

Adventurer Guild, Merchant Guild... It's time to come back.

Spire Reef, so long, until we meet again...

Worm Mistress, wait a bit...

OOC: For the storyline and completion process, please read the Spiralling Nightmare Part I, II, III, and IV

@.@) *sees luna is busy doing so much*
<.<) *leti doing nothing and being a home worker*
o.o) I need to make custom quests, the current quests aren't that suited to leti Ah~

Character: John E. Myoujin
Lvl: 1
Class: 1st year High School Student
Race: Human of course?

Quest name: Hello I'm just arrived and Im lost!!

Quest report:

Hello there, not sure if this is right?.. can you even read this?... My god so otherworld is true a thing eh... Somehow its amazing.

Ah! sorry I'll start the report... Or wherever is this.

My name is John E. Myoujin, male, from Modern Earth, 1st year high school & a Otherworlder if you ask.... I guess I am now?

You see, I was walking from School to home after doing a club activities baking some awesome cookie for all club members that somehow or other became a fight so I end up baking even more for all of them... It became late before I notice it. Ahaha~

I decided to walk to Starbucks to drink some coffee latte & also By my lil sis a Coffee shake as a gift.... But as you can see I never make it home & now I'm writing this report somehow now.

Before I even reach The Starbucks just in the intersection.....I think I heard a whisper asking for a 'help' then... I suddenly found Myself in a medieval looking place straight out of a fantasy movie!!! The heck!!.

I mean what the f**k those dudes have swords!!... Not those cosplayers sword~ but actually sword!!! Some guys are even covered in some kind of blood while wearing armour with a smile on their face!!! They make those asshole gangster back in my original world looks cute you know!!!

One thing in my mind is..... Where the f**k I'm I? Is this a daydream? Did I go insane? I'm a dead? did a truck hit me so hard I'm in coma right now??... I mean true I watch anime but not the mainstream I never been the otaku type before.. even so, Even I knew the Isekai(otherworld) cliche....... My god I'm lost!! Bloody hell!!

So I try asking someone for info.. I mean I can't just stand here like a dumb all day right?. Of course I did not Approach those blood covered guys who look like psychopaths, instead I ask some street kids playing around.

Conclusion?..... I did not understand a single shit.. what was that? Is that even a language? I ask them this..

" Hello good day, um I'm new here you see, what's the name of this place? " politely

Then this is what I got.

"@&$$@&$&@_@&$&&-$&-@&#&&$-#+&@?"

Umm What?

"@#$&#!! @&#$$@@? @@&#_@#$&#!!!"


Holy shit! This is hopeless!! Is this infamous otherworld language!? As far As I know usually when one get Isekai you meet a god & he/she will grant you a Language comprehension skill! Or something.

....I meet not a single a god.. & now I'm here, this is hard mode already from the start!!! Are you kidding me!!!???

What should I do!!?....can I even go back home?.... My mind is in chaos.

I spent haft a day walking aimlessly trying to ask anyone all with the same result of that "@&#$@&#" words from them... *Sigh*

I eventually found a church looking building. I decided to rest in one of the bench near that church premises... All while in depress, Worried & Nervous.

I calm Myself by clearing My thoughts... But all I can think is, that this whole isekai thing is too fck up.

Checking by school bag... Nothing is lost it seems. My pocket I found My smartphone!
Ah!... No signal damn-

Since the battery is still 100%... I decided to might as well take a picture to change mood I mean melancholy is suffocating.

Opening the camera app I take random pic anywhere while setting on the bench.

Then while looking through the camera lens, I notice below the shade of a certain tree I saw a pure white little girl with red eye she is starting at me. When I look at the her direction with my own eye...... There is no one in the tree?.... Then back to the phone camera she is there!

Goosebumps!

Good, First Isekai & now A little girl ghost!! F**king s**t give me a break!!!

Noticing she is saying something... I subconsciously move my fingers to zoom the camera.... Then when I got I clear look of her face... I heard I whisper in my brain



"W̶͕̲̼͈͓̰̗̼͚̭͚̦͕̦̻̟̽̊͆̐͌͗̂̒̓̎̿̍̾̉͋̿̃͠e̴̢̡̛̤͖̥̞͇̦̻̱̠̮̺̩̠͓̝͙̥̤͋͛͆͆́̒̉̒̑̆̀̅̓͒́̈́̈́̕̚͜͝͝͝͝ͅͅl̵̢̻̪̦͙͔͛̿̇̈͌̓̈́́̍̃͂͋͆̓̚c̸͖͓̭͓̉́ớ̵̧̻͉͇͙̘̯͎̰̱͑́̈́̍́͒̓͒̓̓͛͘͝m̴̛̼̮̙̏̌́̀́͌͂̐̂͗̽̓̕e̴̢̗̣̬͚̯͕̭͖̰̟̥̺̅̓̈́̈̀̔̆͑̄̊̋́̀̀̍̅̑̈̚̕͘͝͝͠ ̶̣̙̦͑́̎͘̕J̴̘̻͇̙́͜o̷̡̧̨̨̧̢̡̮̙̠̬̯̥̗̍͊͒̃̔͊̓̊͑̍̑̾͆̕͠h̵̡̡͉̠̪͈̆̈́̀͛͜ͅn̴̡̛͓͎̩̱̟͈̭̮͕͍͚̘̙̬̹̰̒̀̃̾̀͗̊̔̒͒̇͒̎͆́̈́̽̕͘͝ͅͅ"



Then as if something snaps in my brain I fell from the bench due to extreme head ache. & I lost consciousness.

I woke up its already... Morning I sleep almost a whole day.. I little girl name Martha wake me up. She tell me many things such as the name of this world Tonia, that Otherworlder like me is common in here & the existence of Adventurer guild who mysteriously accept Otherworlder.

And yes, when I woke up..... I somehow can understand their words & letter... But for some reason I can't remember why I collapse in the first place... It felt like a saw something with my phone camera? But when I look at the phone gallery.... There is not a single picture about this place at all. I'm sure I take some pictures before I collapse... Weird.

Martha kindly guide me towards the Adventurer guild as she tells me stories her grandmother told her... And seriously its awesome. Then we bid farewell when we reach the Adventurer guild building.

And now here I am making report.

^.^)/ *waves*

 

[Nahrenne]

Well... level 4? I planned for the vampirism to make two of him. (one alive, one undead) From that, I'll decide if it is the undead him versus the living him, or if the living is just a blood bag.
I am prioritizing noncombat skills honestly. At least for now until his mindset changed.
As a person, I want him to accept his new reality.
Maybe? I'm currently creating a vampire character, who is an ally of children on the street.

'-'

I don't fully understand what you mean by making two of him.
Do you mean there will physically be two of them? Or two mentalities?
If it's one body with two instincts/mindsets, then it would be good to use one character sheet to make that clear for other players.
If it's two bodies then...I feel the reason why there are now two bodies would need explaining.
'-'

As for level 4, you don't want to try and get him to attempt the E-rank exam?
'o'
My early condolences to him.

For the vampire character I'll shamelessly suggest you read my character's quest reports and side stories to get an idea of how I wrote a new-born vampire.

One thing I am wondering about, though...where is this vampire girl you've been talking about?
I haven't seen a mention of it in any of your reports.
@w@

X

 

[Nahrenne]

Character Sheet - Nestel D'Menargi

Gender​ Male (Ω)​ Race​ Cat Demihuman (Ω)​ Level​ 1 (0 / 200 EXP)​ Age​ 19​ Class​ Housecat(?) / Spouse​ Money​ 0 G​ Personality Practical, law-abiding, introverted, conscientious, and soft-spoken. Since a young age, he was bred at the kennels to become his current masters's spouse, pet, servant, omega, housewife, and all of the above — to a certain extent he has been conditioned and brainwashed to think that his world revolves around his Alpha. His Omega hormones have only exacerbated the situation, and he has already biologically imprinted despite the exploitative relationship. Backstory Nestel comes from an Omegaverse world where Omegas are separated at birth and raised in kennels to be a perfect spouse. He was conditioned with chemicals, magic, seals, and other methods to be extremely obedient. Upon graduating, he was married to his current master, Lucian D'Menargi, who at the time already had multiple husbands and wives (polygamy) and was incredibly wealthy. However, the D'Menargi business was caught in a war between powerful corporations, and the company was betrayed. While fleeing hired killers, Lucian D'Menargi escaped through the gate with one servant — fortunately (or unfortunately?) Nestel happened to be nearby. Inventory Skills Item Description​ Scarf​ Sometimes used to conceal his ears.​ Knitting Needles​ Ordinarily used for sewing.​ Duster​ To remove the dust off furniture.​ Skill​ Description​ Shapeshift​ Can transform into a cat form.​ Compulsion​ Forced to obey his Alpha's orders.​ Fast Reflexes​ Naturally fast reflexes and sharp senses.​

I want to pet him and stroke his ears and snuggle with him!

X

 

[ohko]

I want to pet him and stroke his ears and snuggle with him!

X

 

[Alma]

'-'

I don't fully understand what you mean by making two of him.
Do you mean there will physically be two of them? Or two mentalities?
If it's one body with two instincts/mindsets, then it would be good to use one character sheet to make that clear for other players.
If it's two bodies then...I feel the reason why there are now two bodies would need explaining.
'-'

As for level 4, you don't want to try and get him to attempt the E-rank exam?
'o'
My early condolences to him.

For the vampire character I'll shamelessly suggest you read my character's quest reports and side stories to get an idea of how I wrote a new-born vampire.

One thing I am wondering about, though...where is this vampire girl you've been talking about?
I haven't seen a mention of it in any of your reports.
@w@

X

One is undead, revived from being dead to be a vampire. Because the system is making a copy of him when he died, another him then exist.

So he died -> System made a copy of his mind into his level 1 template -> his body is revived through the vampirism. So there are two of him.

I'm planning for that Reika, actually. No obvious hint of vampirism. A daywalker vampire too. Her jurisdiction in the criminal underground is the orphaned children. She did not care for the criminal empire of scribel city. She just want to protect the children.

Since she is old, the some criminal were under her care when they were children. Because of that, many element of criminal in scribel city don't want to touch those under her protection.

 

[Alma]

Omegaverse, my worst nightmare in yaoi.

 

[Bochi]

I should technically be writing things to make it better but I want Vicious to suffer

I blame @GDLiZy

 

[Nahrenne]

One is undead, revived from being dead to be a vampire. Because the system is making a copy of him when he died, another him then exist.

So he died -> System made a copy of his mind into his level 1 template -> his body is revived through the vampirism. So there are two of him.

I'm planning for that Reika, actually. No obvious hint of vampirism. A daywalker vampire too. Her jurisdiction in the criminal underground is the orphaned children. She did not care for the criminal empire of scribel city. She just want to protect the children.

Since she is old, the some criminal were under her care when they were children. Because of that, many element of criminal in scribel city don't want to touch those under her protection.

So...does that mean that Tonia is going to end up littered with bodies of the same person?
owO
Owo

Also, it seems that the vampire race your Reika is made from is different from the one Liana's sire was from...

Oh well.
Tonia is made up of people from different worlds anyway.
*shrugs*
A child vampire doesn't sit right with me, though, but that's my personal opinion since the lore of Liana's world vampires has it as a taboo to turn children.

Hope you have fun with your character!
Might get a bit confusing with two of the same but different characters but I'm sure you'll make it interesting to read.
@w@

X

 

[GDLiZy]

I should technically be writing things to make it better but I want Vicious to suffer

I blame @GDLiZy

First, you copy me, and now you blame me?!

 

[ohko]

Omegaverse, my worst nightmare in yaoi.

Shhh pretend you didn’t see it!

One is undead, revived from being dead to be a vampire. Because the system is making a copy of him when he died, another him then exist.

So he died -> System made a copy of his mind into his level 1 template -> his body is revived through the vampirism. So there are two of him.

I'm planning for that Reika, actually. No obvious hint of vampirism. A daywalker vampire too. Her jurisdiction in the criminal underground is the orphaned children. She did not care for the criminal empire of scribel city. She just want to protect the children.

Since she is old, the some criminal were under her care when they were children. Because of that, many element of criminal in scribel city don't want to touch those under her protection.

Sounds good! ^^

 

[Bochi]

First, you copy me, and now you blame me?!

It is my way of expressing gratitude of inspiration.

Now I should set up a custom quest that involves healing Vicious. Would you be interested in it?

 

[Alma]

So...does that mean that Tonia is going to end up littered with bodies of the same person?
owO
Owo

Also, it seems that the vampire race your Reika is made from is different from the one Liana's sire was from...

Oh well.
Tonia is made up of people from different worlds anyway.
*shrugs*
A child vampire doesn't sit right with me, though, but that's my personal opinion since the lore of Liana's world vampires has it as a taboo to turn children.

Hope you have fun with your character!
Might get a bit confusing with two of the same but different characters but I'm sure you'll make it interesting to read.
@w@

X

But it is already? It is currently Seiji's fourth copy.

 

[Alma]

I want to retire my character. How do I do that?