A Poem for SH Forum

[Bimbanana]

I tried to stop staring into the abyss.

I succeeded
for one moon.

Fingers danced.
Words formed.
A book was born.

Then I peeked again.

Now it’s been two nights.

No words crawl from my fingers.
No books grow.

Because I am once more
staring into the abyss.
And the bell stare me back

 

[AliceMoonvale]

I like the moon part.

 

[Nolff]

I tried to stop staring into the abyss.

I succeeded
for one moon.

Fingers danced.
Words formed.
A book was born.

Then I peeked again.

Now it’s been two nights.

No words crawl from my fingers.
No books grow.

Because I am once more
staring into the abyss.
And the bell stare me back

I like to think that the Abyss here is SHF. Now that's a lovely rendition of this place.

 

[JordanIda]

Your last line is wrong. It's ungrammatical.

I don't mean that it breaks the rules of English. I mean, it breaks the rules of your poem.

In poetry anything goes, but only to a point. One can change the rules of the language in a poem, but one must change them consistently.

The poem must be internally consistent.

You can say "bell stare" instead of "bell stares," but if you do, you must also say "words crawls" and "books grows."

You can also change the rules for prepositions and say "stare me back." But if you do, you must also say "crawl my fingers from."

Or maybe you just screwed up the last line. :D

 

[Bimbanana]

Your last line is wrong. It's ungrammatical.

I don't mean that it breaks the rules of English. I mean, it breaks the rules of your poem.

In poetry anything goes, but only to a point. One can change the rules of the language in a poem, but one must change them consistently.

The poem must be internally consistent.

You can say "bell stare" instead of "bell stares," but if you do, you must also say "words crawls" and "books grows."

You can also change the rules for prepositions and say "stare me back." But if you do, you must also say "crawl my fingers from."

Or maybe you just screwed up the last line. :D

....Okay, you and english are my frenemies from now on.

 

[JordanIda]

....Okay, you and english are my frenemies from now on.

If you're attempting to write poetry in a language that is not your own, don't. And don't attempt to use a translation program on whatever you do write. Translation programs do. not. work. on poetry. And quite likely won't, for at least another hundred years.

 

[ConansWitchBaby]

Trying to get someone pregnant with that

 

[TinaMigarlo]

I tried to stop staring into the abyss.

I succeeded
for one moon.

Fingers danced.
Words formed.
A book was born.

Then I peeked again.

Now it’s been two nights.

No words crawl from my fingers.
No books grow.

Because I am once more
staring into the abyss.
And the bell stare me back

If you gaze into the abyss long enough,
the abyss stares back into you.
and you can hear it speak.
"jump... you can fly"