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Recently joined user, and they've posted variations of this comment on a bunch of other works including the dreaded "lets continue this elsewhere".

Jesus Christ, this makes me want to reach for a rape whistle.

Hi Leslie, welcome. Nice to meet a fellow English on here - I'm on the southeast coast, though, so nowhere near Yorkshire. It's very refreshing to see your kind of story on here, and one that clearly has a lot of heart behind it.

Comedy has to make sense, otherwise you're just recycling the "omg so random xD" trend from the Before Time. I want to know why these people have been chosen, what beautiful tensions will arise through a clash of personalities, what is the emotional heart of the story that comes from disparate...

How they'll cope with it, idk.

Just in case he started to get comfortable.

AI cover, you're not an artist.

Sertraline.

Personally speaking, it sounds uninteresting. There's no tension or reason to read the story if it's just about some guy effortlessly beating people up over and over again.

It's not my kind of thing. Super strength and overpowered protagonists aren't interesting to me. Do you want like some things to think about in terms of plot, or story structure, or character arcs? As in, what things you could include to make your story compelling or give your characters depth?

Is this what you want feedback on?

what to do when a young autistic person earnestly tells you, a much older and world-wearier autistic person, that just because their brain works a different way it doesn't mean they're lazy or make them less than other people

Hell yeah, trans icon. Dumbass assassins? Four of them and not one thinks to just run the prince through right there and then? If assassination is the goal, why bother tying him up? Just cut his throat there and then. I'm pretty sure if you suffer head trauma so severe you lose consciousness...

Who's saying this? A lot going on here. Why are the names bolded? What's an ever-changing sky? What are the green flames? Where are they - first off they're running through the palace and then all of a sudden they're in the skies. This is a very surface-level way of setting the scene. Comma...

Not my vibe at all, sorry.

Also I guess I'm not looking for King in terms of quality (though obvs that would be fantastic) but more in terms of content. The way he blends supernatural with the mundane is 100% my jam.