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I know nothing about either of these things, so probably won't be in the best place to give feedback on that.

Perhaps I have a different reading style idk. If I was approaching the chapter as an editor I'd go over it more than once and collate my thoughts and impressions into a proper manuscript report. But I only have my reader hat on, not my editorial hat, so you're getting my approach as a reader...

I prefer writing my comments as I go as it gives an author an idea of my impressions as a reader progressing through the story. But feel free to mention you'd prefer a specific style of feedback if you ask here again.

Time to watch another hours-long deep dive on a show I will never watch.

My queer ass loves this I'm confused about the transition between flashback/exposition and what's happening now Is this wispy spirit our protagonist? There should be a comma between "responding" and the beginning of the dialogue. Our small group? We haven't been introduced to a small group...

If your work is AI, I'm not wasting my time on it. This doesn't read like low fantasy to me at all. It also has that feel of being written to be cool, rather than because it's accurate. Stretched long doesn't make sense. "Solitary moon" implies there could be more than one moon. What is the...

Dammit, I hope it's the latter. AI is a fucking scourge on the earth. I've never used it to write anything so I'm not aware of its tells.

How can you tell it's AI?

Thanks for taking the feedback in good spirit - as I read it back I realised I picked out a lot of things, but I want to be helpful. Something I found useful with writing this era was trying to read fiction from that era because that gives you a feel for sentence structure and vocabulary. If you...

I tend to listen to just one song over and over again for hours (spot the autistic hah). At the moment my song of choice is Chains of Love from the Wuthering Heights soundtrack.

Done! This is quite a sentence. If you read it out loud, it should be clear that it's not very easy to read. I feel like the whole prologue could do with being read out loud, as there are many sentences I had to read over a few times before I understood what they meant. This doesn't sound...

Hey! Here as requested: -pea

My bad, I thought you meant cannibalism like darning socks.

I'll still have a look, if you like? My like of cannibalism may outweigh my indifference toward isekai.

Hey folks. I'm trying to find good stuff to read on here while also Engaging With The Community. I like horror, low fantasy, mystery, gothic, and historical stuff (my main era is Victorian England). Here for anything close to Stephen King, Shirley Jackson, or T. Kingfisher. Not here for isekai...

You said you weren't looking for grammar corrections, but I feel obliged to point out that you need to fix your dialogue formatting as it's not always clear who's speaking, and this will affect things like tone and theme. Is this a bad thing? Why would he need to let her go? Why didn't she...

Thank you for taking my feedback with good grace! I have to say: don't outsource the work of becoming a writer to AI. It won't teach you well, it's a computer that learned through stealing the work of real writers. Learn through studying books you love, or by reading books on the craft of...

I skimmed your prologue, but it wasn't the kind of thing I like to read so I won't be reading further, but I do have some feedback. First off, you switched tenses a lot between past and present. Here are a few examples: You use a lot of ellipses, so much that they become quite...

Oh man, that sucks so hard. GenAI is such a grim business. Thanks for explaining! I'll report the users.