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  1. LoneQuack

    A Thought Experiment I Thought I'd Share

    What an interesting experiment... I have two magic systems in my book, so lets give it a try. Simplest: Gather quint -either use it as an enhancement on yourself or piew piew elements with it. Most Complex (fck me, I haven't even reach the point in the story to explain it yet...): For one to...
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    things that bother me about novels

    I'm only going to talk about point 1 because I have no experience with 2 and 3 is subjective. Is it annoying? Hell yeah. Interesting the first time you've seen it (maybe), 'ok sure' the second, and by the third time you go 'oh great another one' before you role your eyes. To me the entire idea...
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    New Book, Viking Online [LitRPG] - need feedbacks and reviews.

    Reading this makes me believe you don't have a clear image on your story. A big mistake that almost everyone does at the beginning of their career is that they haven't really thought of the story properly, and by that, I don't mean the random moment you've already envisioned the MC in or the...
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    New Book, Viking Online [LitRPG] - need feedbacks and reviews.

    Haven't read it yet, but number 2 is a major flag for me. What do you mean how much you should develop the Viking World? Might as well ask for the reader to write it for you, you get where I'm going with this? You decide that, not the reader. What do YOU want to write? How flexible do YOU want...
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    Feedback/Reviews

    https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1126293/thread-of-fate/ I can only thank you in advance, thanks for the offer!
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    Gimme Stuff to Read :3

    https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1126293/thread-of-fate/ You said 30~ so I hope you give this a read when the time comes. (First volume ends at chapter 26). Been super busy with exams these days, so I can comfortably upload only once a week, chapters are on the bigger side though (about 3k mark)
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    Cardinal Writing Sins

    Typically I don't have anything that turns me off but it's hard for something to hook me up. I haven't read a lot of stories, but the latest story I tried was Supreme Magus. Read up to chapter 10 to give it a fair chance but it became harder and harder after chapter 3, so here's what turned me...
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    Unusual Feedback Thread

    This is the best feedback I've received so far- clearly pointing out the places I could improve without hammering me down for it. The points you made were very clear and I not only have a brief image onto what I can improve but a full picture. Thanks for taking your time to read the prologue!
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    First 3 Chapter Feedback

    https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1126293/thread-of-fate/ Thank you and I hope you like it.
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    Unusual Feedback Thread

    O Grandmaster Corty, would you be willing to read this low disciple's work? I've just began cultivating, so this junior doesn't dare to claim being at the same level as Grandmaster, but he does dare to hope to reach him one day. Please enlighten this lowly! (Hope I played well into the role very...
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    Fairy Feedback v2

    https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1126293/thread-of-fate/ I bet you won't be finding the Title and the Synopsis informative at all, since its close to the end of the first volume (which is not out yet) that you get the idea of what they mean for the story itself. Regardless, I still want your...
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    The Hive 2.0(Free Feedback Thread)

    As long as your feedback helps me improve as a writer I'm all for it. Hope you like it or at least don't find it complete garbage. Also (although that might be self explanatory) If I have any question about your feedback I can dm you right? https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1126293/thread-of-fate/
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    Free First Chapter Feedback (V2)

    This- I can appreciate it very much. I have a much clearer image on what you didn't like (and why) and the inconsistencies on my part. Thank you for taking the time to write this, even though you didn't have to.
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    Free First Chapter Feedback (V2)

    As his latest victim I feel like I should respond to this. If I were to put it in one sentence: you are completely right. While his review to me was as nonsensicle as how he found my first chapter (or more like the less than 1/4 of it he read), there is definitely merit in it and I can't blame...
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    Free First Chapter Feedback (V2)

    I'll be honest I don't know what the takeaway from this is, that I missed a few tenses? The entry story is supposed to be vague leaving a message from the parent to convey to their child on their own. Why do you think I put the name of 'myths and legends', because I had nothing else to write...
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    Feedback for the Grotesque [18+] (15/3) CLOSED ! ! !

    Never expected to see a Gragas meme on this site lol. Sadly, I won't be participating because while the scene is classified as 'disturbing' it's not really gory and, a little more important than that, its not out yet and its in the finale of the volume. I would definitely want your thoughts on...
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    En-chan's Feedback Part 2 [5/5]

    https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1126293/thread-of-fate/ I would appreciate it a lot. Thank you!
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    Another Generous Feedback Thread

    I would really appreciate some feedback. It's my first time writing so I would appreciate it a lot. Please comment on the chapter when you have the time to read my story, and I hope you enjoy it! https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1126293/thread-of-fate/
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    Free First Chapter Feedback (V2)

    Hope you give this a try. Its my first work ever and I would like to improve at my writing https://www.scribblehub.com/read/1126293-thread-of-fate/chapter/1126298/
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    [Submissions Closed] Unreliable Feedback v2

    It's my first work ever and I really want to improve my writing. As of now I've only posted a few chapters so I hope you're not bored. https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1126293/thread-of-fate/
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