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Anonymity? For fairness.

Strange. I can't see it. :blob_dizzy:

What happened to @SailusGebel image? it disappeared.

I'm sleeping. Enough internet for the day. :blob_dizzy::blob_shock::blob_sleep:

Are we even allowed to vote?

We lost XD

I'll just take the W for uniqueness.

Oh, so that's NTR. I never bothered to Google search it and just assumed its meaning is cheating.

If people are arguing about whether your character is bad or good, you did a great job as an author.

Character: Leah - one of the main cast A short blonde girl with a cold, narcissistic, and manipulative personality. Leah knows this and hated her sperm and egg donor for her shitty behavior. Because of it, her boyfriend broke up with her and date her best friend(enabler). She begged, willing to...

It's better I guess. Don't spend too much time on it. A lot of readers skip the prologue anyway but it's also a good introduction to his past life if it will never be tackled again.

It's in the first-person point of view. Make us believe his words even if they aren't logical, or just an MC that can't own up to his mistake so he lies even in narration. In his mind, the manager is just a bossy person that gets angry for the sake of getting angry kind of stuff. Or you can...

Shallow reasons are fine as they make him more human so you don't need to improve it that much. But, if you want more depth, give it more details. Why does the Fortnite so important to him? Because it makes him actually good at something, praised by the community in Fortnite. His skills were...

The tsundere tropes are one of my favorites, but I also hated them, especially the violent ones. This one would have a very bad temper, easily triggered. She never owned her mistakes and never wanted to lose, a touch of narcissism. This is due to the fact that she is the only daughter in a rich...

Hooks are like promises you laid out for readers which set their expectations. They can be in many forms like your character introduction for Mike so we expect him as a kid who is clumsy, has social anxiety, is isolated, rebellious, and probably a bit narcissistic. I'm not saying that your...

A siren. I heard the blare of sirens. It was so annoyingly loud that I couldn’t sleep. Groggy and dizzy, I pushed myself up. I walked to open the curtain and looked down at the street. My face was so wet that I used my sleeve to wipe them off. Broken glass and parts of vehicles were...

"I see, it saddens me to hear your story, but you did your master a great service even though he did not know it. Wherever you went, I pray you find happiness. You deserve it."

For a prologue, it doesn't hook me. Even though you are trying to make me sympathize with the MC, I don't feel pity for him as he kind of deserved it. This is the only part where you gave a reason why I should sympathize with him but it was treated like a detail I can simply glance at. His...

I gave it a read and it was hard to follow. Too many scene transitions, long sentences, misspellings, uncapitalized first letters, and other stuff. My biggest problem was some sentences don't make sense. This line for example. I am confused. So her mom smiled at him. She took the sword...