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*shiver Now there's two of them. Great.

Why am I feeling @TheMonotonePuppet 's presence?

I took out a paper of exchange, one held by a hundred or maybe a thousand sweaty hands, and offered it to the cashier. In turn, she handed me two nickels, makes me wonder if they ever fell on a drainage and were picked up by a snotty brat. With her monotone, practiced speech, she offered a...

For our bad writer and reader, I offer thee this https://www.scribblehub.com/series/751491/in-his-will/

It's fine to me, a tad generic but you did provide the necessary knowledge I needed to know before reading your story. Or were you asking for a different approach?

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If I read it right, I believe that marc won't be doing anymore feedback on this thread. Though there are other feedback threads you can ask for help.

Not all heroes wear capes, but they all sure do love their masks.

4 months, I guess? There were days when I couldn't do anything to pass the time, couldn't write, couldn't play, couldn't watch, or worse, couldn't lie on a bed. I just couldn't do anything with my life when I was out of it.

Kathy stared at her reflection. No more were the makeups, the jewelries, the beautiful dresses nor the vibrancy of her hair. All that was left was the long red hair of his father, a reminder of her once proud lineage. For Catherine had long since fallen. She gripped her skirt and took a deep...

Hi @TheTrinary, I would like to hear some of your feedback. Hopefully, I improved with my dialogue this time since you pointed it as my weakness last time. https://www.scribblehub.com/series/864352/the-dungeon-beyond-the-barren-hill/

@Prince_Azmiran_Myrian Thank you for the read, feedback and suggestions! I'll be sure to rewrite some of those left handy thingies. Marc said the same thing as well. As for the world building, I honestly don't know how to tell it without making it sound info dumpy. So I just made it a little by...

Just wait patiently. We all have lives outside the internet :)

80% of the time I see a komodo :sweat_smile: