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I gave it an earnest try. I read most of your first chapter and then looked at the Synopsis. Which is a section of that chapter. The way it read to me way very disjointed, but based on the name of the book - that's the intent? I didn't like how the character seemed to fight with himself /...

Read the synopsis and chapter 1. In going to make this short. 639 words and a healthy chunk are used to talk about dreams and the sun. Not to mention it reads like Dr. Seuss. If you mean for it to be a child's tale, then it's great. If you are trying for a real love story for a mouse, then...

When I was rewriting Vivienne, I knew by reading where the mistakes were. That's why I ended up pulling every paragraph and looking at each one individually. I didn't use any checker, unless you count my two editors. The reward was that I have written a decent book, feel accomplished and even...

@yasa Tenses aren't really all that difficult. Let's use your last reply. Typically "-ing" words are present tense and called the "present participle." The case above fits that nicely. Present tense are actions occurring now. So that up there is happening now and you have the tense right...

@yasa Good Afternoon! After a mountain of double spiced chai, with lots of ice and milk, I have in fact finished reading some of your story called : Mockery of Once Innocent Delusions I opened the page and read over the tags, and saw "Harem" and "Isekai" Which are not my strongest points...

Good morning @yasa ! That was a very flamboyant introduction. You really should have someone look at that cough. However, in the mean time, I happen to have a medicinal tea that might be right up your alley. My...mm hmm.... Pink Papaya Nectar herbal tea. It's down right salacious. While my...

- Idea - Brainstorm - Settle main plot - integrate sub-plots - Outline - Write Don't use the damned Scribble Hub Editor, use a real word processor. And my biggest pet peeve / Mountain that I will sacrifice all of you for is : "..." <---- The ellipsis. This is the worst form of writing...

An Orc that is freaking awesome. You forgot cunning and tactical.

"Blood is Everything."

I'm very explicit and graphic. I don't hold anything back and I've never had an issue. Marked the story for sexual content and that was it. I mean you could use the R-18 and smut tag if you want. You could check out Chapter 3 if my story Amber & Vasia and see how detailed and explicit I am...

I wouldn't think so. Your basic word processor gives you a grammar check now so... I personally don't think so, but others might.

The quote function at the top, then I just copy and paste the stuff I want to use

Read the synopsis and prologue. The synopsis the initial two paragraphs are basically saying the same thing. Then it sounds like a movie or video game advertisement. Consider making it different. Prologue : I'm not a fan of how you have chosen to convey the content. The line by line prose...

@oldeststoryteller I took a look at your prologue and chapter 1 part one. Editorially you need a very few fixes. A couple changes in narrative and a few run-on sentences. Nothing someone else editing for you can't find. I'll start by saying that I'm not your target audience. Marital arts...

I've never seen a 2000 word Synopsis. That aside, you need to edit this quite badly. There are tense and narrative shifts, and run-on sentences. While it's descriptive, it reads more like is part of a chapter, rather than an overview. The format of having some aspect of the novel in it isn't...

@Pearl487 While you were sitting down chatting with the others over a nice iced white chocolate mocha, I went ahead and read a couple chapters of your story - Amaryllis in Bloom. For the purposes of this feedback, I read the following: Synopsis Prologue Chapter 1 Synopsis: Quick and to the...

Good morning @Pearl487!!! So glad you stopped by for a bit of coffee and a little fireside chat. The Cafe has been slow for a week or so, thus I have lots of time in my hands. I'm very glad you at least told me about the AI reference. I'll take your word that the chapters are written...

Your request is more like an advertisement. If it's feedback you truly seek, there are a bunch of threads open where someone will take a look at your story.

That is way to creepy. I know the genie is out of the bottle, but I fear this genie isn't a good one. I mean what's the point of teaching grammar if you can just tell a computer what you want? Spelling is already not reinforced thanks to every basic word processor. Everyday speech doesn't...

It's getting harder and harder for me to spot AI so my question will eventually become a moot point. Especially when some of these sites online have a "humanize" feature that will make AI look human. I'm still not a fan of it, even for editing. I'd rather read something all human that is...