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Popping in over here for another weekly update. Aestelle Nocte - Chapter 4 is coming along quite well. I've finished writing up the shower scene, and now just need to finish writing up the rest of the chapter leading up to it.

I think you might have misunderstood what I meant. I wasn't talking about changing the scene. Keep the scene however it is that you wrote it. I meant if you wanted to quote or paraphrase my suggested response to the comment, you would be encouraged to change what I said to suit your needs. I do...

You'll never be able to please everyone, but I'd say that's cause for celebration. That said, if you intend to reply, might I suggest simply asserting the fact that you are the story's author, and this is your narrative and creative expression. That if they want a different story, they are more...

I'll start by clarifying that my stories are primarily original narrative content and not formally inspired by any existing narrative, series, or work of fiction (to the best of my knowledge). Instead, I've simply layered easter-egg references to these works here within my stories. 1) .hack and...

Here's the simple, cold, hard, truth of it. You need to do what is best for you. Nobody online can tell you what that is. All we can do is tell you what we think is best, or what we want you to do, or what we think you should do, but since we're not YOU, we don't know what your living with, or...

The Apocalypse - Lore For this, I'll need to start with the definition of apocalypse. From the ancient Greek; "uncovering, disclosure, revelation" it has come to be accepted as "a great disaster" or "something viewed as a prophetic revelation". In the setting of The Elarian Chronicles...

:coffee:🍪 Congrats, Tina

Would it count as LitRPG? - Yes. LitRPG is defined by the inclusion of game systems, mechanics, and similar elements as part of the narrative of a story, at least as far as I am aware, so anything that features this, with one character, or everyone, qualifies. The rest comes down to...

Tobias Anderson is the only one who actually has a "backpack" but he doesn't make a habit of carrying "useless" items. Though, if I could only pick one of his possessions, it would probably be the Aegis Mk. VI he reverse-engineered. The item is standard issue personal protective gear for the...

In my experience, and from other suggestions I've heard over the few months that I've been uploading for; these are the main points to focus on. 1) Consistent chapter release schedule 2) Isekai/LitRPG genre trends towards being more popular. 3) Chapter length should be consistent and between...

Unless the academy arc is absolutely vital to the narrative... Skip it. You can always reveal the necessary elements later via flashback snippets.

Duskfall: Chapter 3 - Remnants of the Past just dropped.

You're welcome, and as long as the critique helped you with something, then it served its purpose. You've also clearly learned something very important here to better develop your writing. Word-count is not the point of any given chapter. It's fine to have a general target range (which you'll...

That's fair, though in Astolfo's case (Fate/) he actually has a "skill" that causes him to have very poor reasoning (and as a result, he doesn't behave in ways that would be expected of him) and it does turn into a gag/joke that even he is part of. But yeah, we're in agreement (if I'm...

Consistency, in narrative and character. Narrative and Character depth, to create a sense of lived moments rather than hollow plot beats. A "Living World" that dynamically responds to the characters, while also supporting the scenarios that help to inform those character's actions. All of this...

I'm not. He was an awesome character in the OG Dragonball. They just sidelined him HARD in Z. I'm pretty sure he's still the only one who lost to a Saibaman.

So basically anything that isn't what Yamucha does in Dragonball Z.

First off, as a matter of personal preferences, I'd drop this real quick, as I'm not overly fond of reading first-person stuff. This, isn't anything good, or bad, on your side from a technical standpoint, so I'm distancing this from the following critique and feedback, and focusing primarily on...

As a technical definition, @AnEmberOfSundown presented the answer clearly and accurately. To elaborate on what was already said, I'd like to add the following. A "Martial Art" is any codified, style of engaging in direct combat with an individual or group. This can be armed, or unarmed, though...

Well, basic medical science for starters. The specific branch/specialization/field would be considered Pharmacology, or the study of medicines and how they influence and interact with the body. By all means don't just take my word for it. Do a little research yourself on the topic. Here are...