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It's famous and I come from NUF~ There was a year when LysUltima wrote the Invisible Panda which was a parody as well. I didn't read much of the Invisible Dragon aside from the first couple chapters but I did get the rough idea.

Impressions as I read: Synopsis: Feels like a sandbox story, so I think a lot of people might not click through since I suppose most people would assume this isn't a serious novel. Interesting tags though... I like a bunch of them Prologue Interesting premise Invisible dragon influence, yes...

Welcome to ScribbleHub! Thoughts as I read: Synopsis: A relatively unconventional synopsis but works for me Not sure if there are tags that appeal to me but let's give it a shot Information Huh, I wonder if it's necessary to have this I'm not very fond of revenge plots since I usually find...

I really did forget! I think at the time you posted it, there was only one or two chapters, and then I floated off during the holidays and forgot about it. Also, I forgot about your story so I'll have to read it again :blob_no: Also, how did you know I was translating?! Did I say that...

Hiyo! I don't think we've talked before, and welcome to ScribbleHub if you're new! Reactions as I read: Synopsis: "Costs as much as many golds" -- grammar? It would be good to fix the grammar and tenses. I do like beastkin so let's see how this goes! Chapter 1 First sentence/paragraph...

Impressions as I read: Synopsis: Really long, probably a little bit too much of a summary Has flags about what kind of story this will probably be. Pardon my language, but lines drawing attention to "no women want to be near him" (etc) makes it seem like an incel protagonist. I don't know if...

More comments on chapter 1 (ended up re-reading): I feel like you use strange word choice in several instances that makes things unnecessarily confusing. Using more precise language would help clarify what you mean and make it easier for the reader. For instance: Paragraph 2: "Strand" is used...

:blob_happy: looking forward to this. I always meant to peak at your novel but never got to it. Reactions as I read: Synopsis: Great! (hurrary for psychological tag). Also why is it rated so low? Chapter 1: Beautiful bam! Thank you for the first sentence punch. And then I realize the chapter...

Reactions as I read: Synopsis: Wonder what's up with the last sentence. Otherwise, synopsis seems fine although might not be something that I would typically read Chapter 1: I like how you set up the atmosphere with the dead radio Very angsty start to a story, may not appeal to everyone...

Reactions as I read: For some reason I expected BL XD I do like forced marriages though~ :blob_aww: Chapter 1 Technically the first sentence is a fragment, immediately after you warn about grammatical mistakes XD Ah... it would be nice if you could get an editor, I think. There are grammar...

Hmm, I feel like it's hard for me to give any specific advice! I think your technical ability as a writer is probably better than mine, so likewise I don't have a lot of helpful things to say. Either way is probably fine. I mean, personally, I have a weaker attention span and sometimes don't...

:blob_aww: BL! Reactions as I read: Historical >w< Fun tags Chapter 1 First sentence grammar! I realize it's artistic but I already had to stop and re-read it Second sentence pronouns are a little confusing; makes the "child" seem female when I think you're referring to the mule I like the...

More specific opinions are totally cool! Thoughts as I read: Solid synopsis Very strong start to the prologue, nice first sentence hook I think it's funny that Kazuki tries to flick his fingers / draw a circle... a weird way to test for whether magical powers exist xD I like your vocabulary...

So a reader called my smut novel "very beautiful" in a review and it made me happy. :blob_happy: It sounds silly that a hardcore smut novel can be beautiful, but it was kind of what I was going for (like psychologically beautiful in the twisted/broken sense). That said, I haven't updated it...

Reactions as I read I liked your first line / the way you started on an action scene. Ryan feels like a very generic name. I started skimming into the fight because I figured they would win (also I don't play games) and it seemed to be a game-style battle. Your writing style is very smooth and...

Reactions as I read: Grammar sticks out to me; I realize that it's artistic and intentional, but it's hard to ignore I feel like I struggled a bit with reading through the prologue. I forced my way through, but I'm not quite sure that I absorbed everything. First chapter is much better in terms...