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  1. Eldoria

    A disciplined narrator lets the reader identify and recognize the character before naming him...

    A disciplined narrator lets the reader identify and recognize the character before naming him. When a character's name is mentioned in dialogue, the reader can form a mental image of that whole person. So the reader's mind will actively say, "Oh... this bald guy in the yellow tracksuit who's...
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    The general sequence of character introduction is: identifying the character's identity...

    The general sequence of character introduction is: identifying the character's identity (appearance, physical characteristics, personality, setting, and relationships) through atmosphere, actions, and interactions with other characters -> mentioning the character's name through dialogue/monologue.
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    IRL, when the name of someone you know is mentioned, your mind tends to conjure up a whole...

    IRL, when the name of someone you know is mentioned, your mind tends to conjure up a whole person with appearance, personality, background, and relationships. But when a stranger's name is mentioned, you tend to tilt your head, without thinking of a specific person. Similarly, in a fictional...
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    Offering feedback on the first chapter of your story (No Smut)

    Sorry, a link on SH is not yet available.
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    Offering feedback on the first chapter of your story (No Smut)

    Please try mine, dude. Thanks. https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/139758/gifts-from-detective-clara/chapter/2755364/vol-1-chapter-1-prologue-a-detective-girl-with
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    I need to review

    I'm not interested in being a moderator/ admin... and I've never reported translated fiction either. I'd rather be a free member. :blob_melt:
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    New author seeking feedback and advice

    Well, I've read chapter 7. My impression... this chapter is quite solid compared to the previous chapters. The narrative uses a limited third POV following Aiko to narrate the travel scenes in the town square, library, flashbacks from the diary and church. Overall, as a reader, I didn't feel...
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    Targeted Story Feedback Thread (READ THE NOTE)

    Thanks for your honest feedback, dude. Did you feel depressed after finishing the chapter?! :blob_aww: Sorry, but I'm both happy and sympathetic to you. If you felt sad, then this chapter was a successful emotional immersion. Again, I appreciate your honesty. :blob_salute: Regards.
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    I need to review

    (Sigh) So you think I banned you?! Account or fiction? I don't know. You're really good at thinking I have the authority to do it. I'm guessing if your fiction was banned, it's because your content has a foreign language (Arabic) which violates the site's guidelines (content must be in...
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    I need to review

    Dude, I'm just a member here. How did you conclude I'm an admin?! :blob_teary:
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    I need to review

    (Sigh) You don't have to worry about how your work will be judged. In fact, readers have their own perceptions. You can't control their minds. As long as you don't cheat, why you worry? Account banned?! You can contact the administrator through contact us. Keep it simple! Don't complicate...
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    I need to review

    It's hard to prove who's right or wrong based solely on individual opinions. Well, let's say I believe you. But do you have any intention of seriously learning to write fiction? If the formatting is still a mess, how can I care anymore after you ignore the feedback you receive?! I just...
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    If you are sleepy and hungry at the same time, which do you do: (1) eat first then sleep, or (2)...

    If you are sleepy and hungry at the same time, which do you do: (1) eat first then sleep, or (2) sleep first then eat?
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    I need to review

    You need to back up your claims. At the very least, revise your previous chapters and consider the feedback you've received. Don't be lazy about editing. Writing fiction isn't a one-time endeavor. Make your work readable, even for casual readers. I won't touch your manuscript again until you...
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    I need to review

    I'll wait for his response for clarification. I've been reviewing his manuscript without prejudice, but I haven't seen any real changes regarding the text or formatting. And now... I'm surprised that OP is asking for other chapters to be reviewed. You @Dani007 should appreciate your...
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    As an art, most (not all) authors agree that fiction is a form of self-expression.

    As an art, most (not all) authors agree that fiction is a form of self-expression.
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    Vampire Vampire Hunter

    I wanted to write cultivation fiction. A week later... I wanted to write mystery fiction. Now... I want writing a vampire hunter fantasy. Dude, are you going to write all genres and tropes?
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    What do YOU like to see in a story?

    What I seek from fiction is the authenticity of the emotional experience. If I read comedy, I want to laugh. If I read fantasy, I want to feel something magical. If I read SoL, I want to relax. This is the emotional experience.
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    Feedback for my first story

    Well, in terms of storytelling, your narrative is quite solid. You apply the principle of "show it, don't tell it" quite well. This narrative is already quite good above average for a web novel, even reaching the level of a light novel ready for publication. But if you want to make your...
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    What makes a work of fiction worthy of being called art?

    In line with the question above, I'd like to hear your thoughts. There are no right or wrong answers here, just sharing your opinions.
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