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  1. Story_Marc

    Envy's Free Feedback Thread [Thread Closed]

    Hmm... I'm curious how you'll respond to the erotica vignette I wrote called "Breakfast in Bed."
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    AI assistance

    Thomas Edison disagrees. ? But yeah, I'm not into plagiarism, but otherwise, I view AI as a tool. People who try to use it in the most generic way possible get generic results. People who push it further and further can push themselves further. It's just an assistant at the end of the day.
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    Tips and Tricks for Juggling Multiple POVs

    Can do that, at the very least! There are examples where it works well and where it doesn't. Personally, I believe gradually easing into more characters and building off of things is the best way to go. I know I've experienced this when trying to read The Stormlight Archive. I've tried time and...
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    Tips and Tricks for Juggling Multiple POVs

    I know lots of people like having lots of main characters and POVs. I also know how tricky this can get with ease. So, to help people wade through that sea, I made this. As always, I hope it helps out.
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    AI assistance

    I didn't know there was a rulebook to begin with.
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    Looking for Insights? (Closed, Thank you!)

    Hmm... Alright, I'm game to give this a try. If this seems like something that would interest you. Click the cover art for the link. Genre: Mystery/Suspense Synopsis Part crime solver, part crime causer, the cunning heiress Cassidy Cain uses her privilege and wits for those without her...
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    First Chapter Analysis

    Ahh, okay on that! The fact that's where the story starts makes it a bit harder to tell, but I can see how it works there. And yeah, that's a case where it can fall into the exception. I'll expand on what I could've said before then on rogue body parts when the exception comes into play. But...
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    First Chapter Analysis

    Apologies, these can blend in a lot at times. I like your opening myself, though I do think it might lack an immediate hook into the core story because of how long everything goes with the description and worldbuilding. I can see the more gradual pace sabotaging with some, though I also...
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    Beta readers, please show yourselves.

    Nothing because they refuse to engage with anybody.
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    Beta readers, please show yourselves.

    Just for the record, I believe what you're looking for is an alpha reader -- though I could be wrong. Alpha readers help you with big-picture mistakes with structure, character, pacing, and plotting. Beta readers catch little words, like awkward phrases, grammar, typos, etc. They're more on the...
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    First Chapter Analysis

    Well, this was a unique one to do. I'd pass on this one personally, but my top reason would be that the premise doesn't interest me personally. That said, I give you props for writing with this in mind. Now, ignoring that, there was something I noticed reading the prose that impacted things as...
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    First Chapter Analysis

    I should be doing this again next week. There's something I'm thinking about doing this week to make this easier on me once again. And tackle reoccurring issues I notice in a way that's informative.
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    Looking for criminal novels exclusively on SH

    Kudos for the shoutout! Yeah, I write criminal side. I focus predominately on phantom thievery with cons, heists, and mystery solving. And staying ahead of the law while doing things, so cat & mouse type stuff too. I tend to be more cerebral-focused if that's what you want.
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    Improve Your Writing Part 1: Clarity

    That version would throw off the pace of the scene for me. I prefer sentence speed that mirrors the action itself. As for @Sebas_Guzman example, that is a good foundation for the version I might use it for, though it comes down to intent on my part. The period version makes for a more measured...
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    Improve Your Writing Part 1: Clarity

    Oh yeah, you don't have to worry about hard feelings at all with me. This was fun! :ROFLMAO: People seriously underestimate how much I genuinely enjoy going into stuff like this. I mean, you don't end up studying as much as I do if you don't enjoy the process. At most I hate going into the...
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    Improve Your Writing Part 1: Clarity

    Yeah, seeing this now and factoring everything else in, this is probably you just not working well with complex sentences. Quick aside, run-on sentences and complex sentences are two different things. Regardless, this falls into an "oh well" type of deal for me now that I've investigated. That...
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    Improve Your Writing Part 1: Clarity

    I've just always wondered why you do that when you always go on to add more. I'm admittedly a "cut to the chase" type of person. You do you though. Can you write an exact example showing how you'd portray quick action, so I can see it in concrete terms instead of the abstract? Since I find it...
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    Improve Your Writing Part 1: Clarity

    Each action getting its own paragraph actually isn't optimal here. The part on parallelism is 100% intentional as I plan to expand on that in a future one, but I'll add in this lesson on pacing real quick that comes from Action: Writing Better Action Using Cinematic Techniques. I can also grab...
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    Improve Your Writing Part 1: Clarity

    I'd likely lead into that or show if I was actually doing full-on writing for it instead of just writing a quick sentence that provides an example for something unrelated. Were you able to read the sentence with ease? Yes. That's what's important. If you're curious about the rest, that's more...
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    Improve Your Writing Part 1: Clarity

    You should just say things instead of posting one-word responses. :s_tongue: But eh, might as well, if only to save myself a headache.
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