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Did they actually do that? We should collectively do something about those guys tbh. I hate it when I dislike a novel and other people don't dislike it as well (Dungeon Defense is such garbage.)

The arc of USA was literally the dumbest part of the story. SMH Author ran out of ideas and had to introduce a whole new continent. And then he did nothing with it!

https://www.scribblehub.com/series/84948/project-mirage-online/ is Trapped in a Game (maybe Death Game for the MC) Actually, I just realized that we have a "Survival Game" tag, so maybe Death Game is extraneous?

"Death Game" should be self explanatory. Any game that if you die in game, you die in real life, or a game where the penalty is death. "Trapped in a Game World" is different from the "Summoned/Transported" one where you're not actually there, but your mind is. Encompasses your normal edgy...

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If the story is too fast. If the MC lets characters drag them around. Non-yuri harem. Treacherous MCs Asshole characters not getting their due. Stories that meander and get absolutely nowhere, not even sideways.

That you're not a well known writer is a big reason. Another reason is that its simply boring to have a blank canvas. Drawing on an already colorful canvas is much more fun. There's a reason readers like fanfiction, you know.

Accurate. I'm just an angry old man. I do mean what I said though.

I'm sorry for not realizing that what I said made you feel this way. It wasn't my intention.

Basically it's just saying that the core of tension is the reader's knowledge. Knowledge of something a character doesn't know (the bomb, Hitchcock), knowledge of what a character finds precious (the book, Azrie). As long as you have revealed to the reader something beforehand, then that...

There has to be a way to condense this down to two paragraphs and put it at the top as a summary. The goodreads page that Ace put in the chat was quite succinct and illustrates the concept of suspense and tension well, on top of giving an example of what it is not...

You could have color coded titles, but no one is going to use them. They're too lazy to even edit their post to mark the post-eval.

The Reception is so confusing. You can barely tell which ones are turning in the quests and which one are evaluations. In fact, I can't tell. Just put "Report" and "Evaluation" in bold at the top of your post? And no one is marking their quests evaluated after the fact too.

Name: Orzo https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/d/e/2PACX-1vQsnCi-LoS30_B-p97Y1rkIo4xxj6cWhVgksWb30OrLWALilivZJ2Rfrh79mDZMx2DJvYDJanAWCWnn/pubhtml?gid=0&single=true

You make good points. I'll do my best to address them.

Is it uninteresting or blander than the other novels on the sight, or.. what do you mean by bland, more specifically?

A VRMMO focused on "a realistic and diverse experience" will probably have way more misc skills than just set "fighting moves" you use in keyboard and mouse games.

Teaser Please read it and tell me what you think!