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Yush. Those, too.

No seriously, it's long-winded but sets out the hows and whys of the decisions despots and department heads make instead of doing the job they signed up for on paper, and provides ample guidance for developing obstructive systems your MC has to navigate without it seeming like it's done for...

Posting this here as a bookmark, if I don't peek my skull into your story in a week, ping me.

Are you evolving?

Sorry for dragging my feet, I move an undead snail's pace. I thoroughly enjoyed what I read. As for considerations that I don't think I put in the chapter comments: Overall, the story was very good, but it suffers from a slower start than most of your contemporaries and it feels a little...

You don't have to pay me to give you some feedback unless you hire me to edit for you, which story do you want my eye sockets on?

Will take a look, PM me if you don't hear a peep out of me in a week.

Did I already get you? If I haven't I will as soon as I get Epic of a Dragon Knight and Harbinger: Infinity.

This. It's the Naofumi problem, instead of making the character smart/strong/brave the author just nerfs everyone that isn't the protagonist when they're on screen, giving the impression that they're impressive by comparison. It's cheap, but it works for general audiences/people who already want...

TR: possible squick very cringe

*Ahem* I'm here finally. As far as the pacing goes, I have no complaints, it's good. Your previous reader did hammer the nail on the head when they mentioned that you "didn't have enough materials to describe everything in the current scene" unfortunately. The problem is particularly difficult...

"Salvation at thirty thousand Kelvin!" sounds disrespectful enough to fit in a League of Legends "press R to win" ultimate ability that instantly gets the enemy to surrender after you wipe half their team. I love it.

Heh, next time...

Psssst, your blue link is the RR link while the pic link is the SH link. Intentional?

Prepare to be read and reviewed (eventually TM) you shall not be spared.

Execution is the issue, and not many LNs have that down.