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I try to ground the sci-fi powers in real world physics (liberal applications of 'soft' because the setting literally says that the past tech was so advanced it is effectively magic) But quantum manipulation to twist probabilities, folded geometry as blade edges, stuff like that.

Koron: "So you made the universe." "Ya huh." "And intentionally ensured it was horrific, grimdark madness where suffering is expected, happy endings dont occur, and everyone dies painfully?" "I mean, I didn't make THAT (for legal reasons), but your personal suffering, yes." "....I'm going to...

Give them mannerisims. One smokes, another drums his fingers. One is bored and leaning on his arm, stuff like that to break up and differentiate them.

Its useful though for improving your writing.

In order? A paranoid woman with a gun. An angry magos. Necrons. A named space marine. A demonhost. A gravity well generator. And a chaos sorcerer. More to come as the story progresses.

Elissa is not meant to be a side character, but a co-protag. The early chapters are meant to help establish the characters and setting, which is why I stay out of Koron's POV for over thirteen chapters till I drop the revelations of who and what he is. And yeah, a mother with a history, a...

Thank you! And yeah, looking back I would have toned it down a bit on the end to make it more clear that it wasnt going that direction :D IDK if the audience dosnt want detailed descriptions, considering the gothic nature and high details that come out of 40k in general. And I dont use AI, its...

Fair enough, IDK if its just me, but I didnt write with the intent of trying to make it anything more than descriptions of the setting. Dress the set, you know?

https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1915090/shadows-in-the-sand-warhammer-/ Always looking for feedback to improve, so any help is welcome :D

Hey all, looking for feedback on my story. https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1915090/shadows-in-the-sand-warhammer-/ Only ten chapters in, but I got another 40 chapters on backlog, just going to be dropping those over time. I know its far from perfect, but always looking to improve.