Thanks for all the detailed feedback! This is exactly what I wanted in a review. Let me give some extra context on the creation of this story and then I'll address your feedback because I definitely love it, especially the constructive ones.
First off, this was a story I made 11 years ago...
Three chapters is just the right amount because my story is divided into 3-chapter story arcs. I'm in the middle of posting arc #2 and already working on #3 because I like working with a buffer. And yeah, take your time.
https://www.scribblehub.com/series/2245921/barrys-bad-luck/
Thanks for the detailed feedback! I was at work then went drinking after (I'm in Japan right now so it's almost midnight), so I only found time to reply now.
I'm glad you like my MC so far, and for reading the whole arc. As you noticed, there's a flow I'm going for: intro -> warm moment -> bad...
Hi everyone, regular NPC Villager A here, and I'm seeking feedback on my romcom novel attempt.
Link: https://www.scribblehub.com/series/2245921/barrys-bad-luck/
Feedback type: How was the pacing? Was it easy to read? And how is my main character as the narrator, since almost the entire story...
Gonna throw mine too.
Link:
https://www.scribblehub.com/series/2245921/barrys-bad-luck/
For some context:
This is a romcom that spans middle school until high school
The story is divided into arcs, which I just conveniently name after the girls featured, so the first 3 chapters I posted...
Greetings, oh esteemed reading and reviewing veteran. I happened upon your thread and thought I could perhaps gain some feedback on my humble romcom attempt.
Right now I've posted the first of multiple story arcs, with each arc being 3-4 chapters in general and features a new girl and a new...