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A spoiler, you ask? Fat chance!

{Chapter 58 - Elder of Elders; Opening sequence. Context: MC was stationed at a strategic outpost when his unit was ambushed. He narrowly escaped and made his way back to the city only to learn that all his friends were killed and the outpost was captured by the enemy.} Version A: I laid down...

This seems like it's useful feedback from someone who knows what they're talking about. The only problem is that I don't know what you're talking about. You use words like "undertone" and "color-corrected" which sound like tradespeak.

Here you go https://www.scribblehub.com/series/967246/a-place-to-bloom/ Though TBH for useless, unreliable fees I could just have Claude read it.

Fwiw if someone fanficted my shit, I would be flattered. I think. If they used punctuation

This puzzle has too many words for me.

That's... that's actually it. That's what I was going for.

*italics* Beneath a cloudy sky, cradled by forest-covered mountains, gently hugging the bay, was the city. Mud houses and stone apartments, shops, storehouses, smithies belching smoke into the air, bakeries, jewelers, shipwrights, all crowded around narrow streets like spokes in a wheel...

To the cover?

opnions/suggestions? A Place To Bloom | Scribble Hub

Cut the first part of the sentence and begin with Alexander This description feels dry. It reads like "I'm supposed to describe this" This is generally understood from the use of "he" Don't tell me his clothes are expensive, show them Redundant What does the wine smell like? Hint witches...

Let me give you some advice. Or... nevermind

I dunno what you should do, but it takes me 1-2 days to write a new chapter, and 2-3 weeks to edit it. I go through multiple revisions before and after feeding it to scribophile. Whenever I feel discouraged, I feed it to AI so it can tell me how amazing it is.

As a fellow ADHDer, I approve this message! Enjoy https://www.scribblehub.com/series/967246/a-place-to-bloom/