any feedback will be appreciated

[PotatoSalaad]

I am just starting out to publish writing, so tell me how you feel about the quality of this series: https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1980447/single-step-at-a-time/
again, any feedback will be appreciated

 

[AliceMoonvale]

Hmm, I'm not good at reviewing/giving feedback to other's work and such but I'll try my best.
Bear with me

The chapters feel a tad too short and abrupt, I kept asking myself what is even going on?
Maybe if there was a little more detail and description for his surroundings?
Or, touching up on pacing and scene development?

So far, I'm imagining the character is some kind of alien locked away in a room for observation like an SCP.
Other that, I personally feel confused but I like the premise of the strange isolation.

 

[PotatoSalaad]

hi, thanks for the feedback even though i am replying too late
yeah, what you are saying is true, but idea of the series is that each following chapter is longer than the previous, and now, when i compare the 10th step with the 1st step, theres a large difference between them. i dont write too much detail because theres no need to do so, the reader should imagine it for themselves. but there will be more detail in future chapters.
again, i really appreciate your honest opinion

 

[DismaiNaim]

I am just starting out to publish writing, so tell me how you feel about the quality of this series: https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1980447/single-step-at-a-time/
again, any feedback will be appreciated

By chapter 5 I started skimming and didn't read any more after that.

I kinda liked it at first, even though it didn't make any sense. Then it continued to not make any sense.

 

[PotatoSalaad]

By chapter 5 I started skimming and didn't read any more after that.

I kinda liked it at first, even though it didn't make any sense. Then it continued to not make any sense.

started to skim through it? can you tell me why so i can keep it in mind? what doesnt make sense in my chapters?

 

[Quelop]

Alright, I commented on several chapters and I completed the 11 you have here. First, get rid of chapter 0. It adds nothing and is confusing in a way the takes away from the story. The lines get added organically later which was better. Second, finish your whole first story arc then do an edit on the story. There are a lot of questions that could be answered and doing so we get to learn more about the character. Let the mystery happen but don't have him go to sleep because you're done explaining.

Please edit and turn this railroad into a hike. Still along a path but make it feel natural. This can be a good story but you need to put in the thought and work.

 

[DismaiNaim]

started to skim through it? can you tell me why so i can keep it in mind? what doesnt make sense in my chapters?

I stopped finding it interesting. Just repetitive,