I steadily walk toward the door as I can feel the subtle change in the room; my feet that once felt cold are now radiating the warmth never to be experienced by me. The moment of crossing feels like forever as the breath becomes heavier with each step to be taken - tell me is the given text by AI or Human
Sorry, family emergency held me up otherwise I'd have sent this an hour ago or whatever. I don't like the hospital phoning me twice this week for a family member.
First, AI don't tend to use semi colons, thats a great indicator as a baseline for 'being human' writing, but also the barely present grammatical mistakes that are very much 'there is a better way but it doesn't impact the reading at all'.
The thing starts in first person, 'I steadily' but then the next line 'as the breath' that is technically a change, it would be 'my breath' or some more focused sentence on the person. It *reads* as if a person wrote it, due to 'errors' most people will ignore because english doesn't really care about minor inconsistencies. This means they aren't really things to change, people have made entire writing styles off worse, but they are less clinical/AI.
As for all the writing tips of making something 'sound' right and all that. It really does come down to practice, especially for people who might not be english first language.
If you are looking for practicing writing and aren't really sure how, try rewording a book you like or trying keeping an extra copy of your story but simplified and make sure you check all the boxes in the more complicated version, while keeping track of the key details and information you want to get across.
There is only so much reading comprehension can help when people give advice like speaking it out loud but I can think of a few programs that will read out text you put into it, even google translate you could technically get it to read out the english version of the sentences you have written to figure out if it sounds right while struggling with speaking a language yourself.
In the end, just getting stuff down on the paper is already hard enough, you improve the more you use a skill, so go wild, write every small idea you can in notebooks or word files, upload what you feel comfortable with and just give it a go and a lot of people if they find the story interesting will help out with a few nudges here and there.
I'm sure you can't do much worse than some of the machine translation stuff I've put up with for the sake of having something to engage with in the past.