C0NSTELLATIONBEANS
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Good evening Everyone!
I’m working on a story and would love some honest feedback, especially from quiet readers!
Here’s a taste from my prologue:
Dane never imagined his new job would pull him into a world of shadows. Hired by Kaelen the man the town whispers about as “The Hollow Heart” he steps into the grand, gloomy manor and immediately senses that something isn’t right. One by one, tragedies unfold, each thread leading toward the same chilling source: a piece of paper, just out of sight.
Read the full chapter here if you want! : https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1821898/the-piece-of-paper/
Just a heads-up: the story is intentionally don't make complete sense right away part of the fun is piecing it together yourself!
I’d especially love thoughts on:
Pacing and detail is it too much, too little, or just right?
Do the characters’ actions and dialogue feel natural, or do they sometimes seem forced?
Do the shifts in perspective make sense?
Does the story feel like a puzzle you want to solve, or is it confusing in a frustrating way?
Thank you so much for reading and sharing your honest thoughts!
I’m working on a story and would love some honest feedback, especially from quiet readers!
Here’s a taste from my prologue:
Dane never imagined his new job would pull him into a world of shadows. Hired by Kaelen the man the town whispers about as “The Hollow Heart” he steps into the grand, gloomy manor and immediately senses that something isn’t right. One by one, tragedies unfold, each thread leading toward the same chilling source: a piece of paper, just out of sight.
Read the full chapter here if you want! : https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1821898/the-piece-of-paper/
Just a heads-up: the story is intentionally don't make complete sense right away part of the fun is piecing it together yourself!
I’d especially love thoughts on:
Pacing and detail is it too much, too little, or just right?
Do the characters’ actions and dialogue feel natural, or do they sometimes seem forced?
Do the shifts in perspective make sense?
Does the story feel like a puzzle you want to solve, or is it confusing in a frustrating way?
Thank you so much for reading and sharing your honest thoughts!
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