Review swarp please

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MasFaqih

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I SWEAR TO GOD

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THEN WHAT IS THIS

You use AI to correct his/her problems?

P A T H E T I C

Oh my GOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO-

Y-You know what? Please list characters you've introduced in your novel to the glossary. That's useful, in case you forgot chars in your story like this one.

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Yes, I forgor that you added new chaps recently

DAS THE SAME LINK YOU GAVE ME

Well thank you.

Even if you don't say so, I witnessed the chaos with my very eyes.

Alr, updated. Check the draft again.

I plan to have a chap telling his experience throughout the days, the 5 days.

Also, if you don't know already, this is a fanfic of a psychological horror game with the same title.

Das also includes you.
Chill bro,chill,You are too brutal.
 

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Chill bro,chill,You are too brutal.
Look, I'm at least being honest with my review.

Take it with a grain of salt.
No I did not use Ai I just tried to be formal in pointing out ideas....now that you mentioned it ,it kinda looks like Ai
Maybe I will just stick with paragraphs lot less Ai-ish

Here is mine https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1096211/the-reincarnated-archmage-needs-to-learn-magic-circles/
No no, what makes me think you're using AI is the fact that the paragraphs were neat and clean but some of the lines are... Bothering me.

Like, look at this:
I don't mean to offend you,It is a great story
And this!
I am still reading
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