How to properly describe a beautiful character?

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Hello. new author here, writing because bored.

Currently writing a book and recently introduced a new character: basically the female MC.

I used elaborate details and various metaphors to describe everything from her physical aspects to clothing, in an attempt to show that she's beautiful, but the result doesn't feel satisfying.

After all those writings, I kinda feel like "She cute" or "She pretty" may actually be better.

How would you properly write a beautiful character? (Not the beautiful heart kind of beauty, just physical.)
 

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Depends on the genres and the audience you're trying to grab, It's better to put some details on her general features and put some reason why she's beautiful or what part of her makes her beautiful.

Look on some wiki and other people's work and copy their character descriptions.

BTW, if you're writing Xianxia/Chinese female with unbelievable white skin, please put "Jade-like skin" as a references/tribute for Xianxia's Jade beauties.
 

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Definitely follow how every cultivation harem author describes a female lead, and every time she appears in a chapter, you must write at least three paragraphs of description to remind readers that she is a virgin pure-yin kingdom-toppling cold jade beauty.
Seeing the young woman, Lin Ming felt surprised while Lin Xiaodong’s eyes became glued straight at her. What is a beauty that can topple kingdoms? This is it.

The young woman was wearing a white dress, her black hair descending down onto her waist, her skin glistening with the lustre of beautiful jade, her appearance as mesmerizing as the full moon, her eyes shining like the waters of autumn. She has a fine raised nose, pointed chin and a slender jade like neck. There were simply no flaws that one could see. In addition, she exuded an aura of wisdom and purity, causing an inevitable thought to enter the minds of those who set their eyes on her: A peerless beauty.

Escorted by her bodyguards and maids, the young woman came out of the carriage and proceeded into the fair. Wherever she went, it would seem as though numerous colours had lit up in the area and peach flowers would blossom. As for the young woman, she seemed to be dancing within this beautiful image, leading to everyone seeing her becoming lost in a reverie.

All eyes were gathered onto her. Her carriage that cost several tens of thousands of gold liangs, her spectacular beauty, the Qin Family that had endured for over eighty years; any of these factors would have been enough to make her the centre of attention.
 

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Try using language that is more vague and based on how others would react.

“her face seemed to have been sculpted by the earth simply to exhibit nothing but a breath taking beauty to all those who gazed upon her.”

Or compare it to something the majority of people know to be true.

“He was so handsome he could almost be compared to Anon2023”
 

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Congrats now you put the image of a question mark in a dress.

Also do people in CN novels seriously say PURE yin? Like, do they not understand that being Pure on either half is like Very VERY BAD?
 

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To convey beauty, you're going to want to have people in the background reinforce/support this. Telling us she's pretty is one thing, but we can't understand it until we see how the world reacts to her beauty.
 

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First rule: write something short and memorable, even if it's not as detailed as you want it to be.

Second rule: do not describe the appearance objectively, but subjectively - focus on impressions and emotions.

I always try to do both of these things, and it's important because no one is going to remember a number of details about a character that was described twenty chapters back. I could write three paragraphs about someone's body shape because I imagined how they would look like exactly, but no reader is going to apprieciate something like that unless it's a situation that calls for it (for example a detailed examination of a corpse or describing a detail, such as a mark, important to the story).

I personally do three things. Keep in mind that's my own method that might not work for everyone.

1. General impression, for example "a scrawny boy" or "an exotic beauty that caught his eye". This is the simplest part, but arguably the most important, since the impression is what people pay attention to the most. Say a blonde bimbo and everyone will remember who the blonde bimbo is next time she's mentioned. Say someone has blue eyes, and most people will forget it unless you remind them.

2. Noticeable details. This can be literally anything, but generally you have a couple of things that are most noticeable in a character. What it is exactly would depend on who it is, because you obviously won't write a man had narrow hips cause it would sound weird. Try to choose two or three things and don't describe anything else, only skim over it.

3. Feelings, impressions, and thoughts (not necessarily said directly, can be implied), which can be inserted alongside the two other, for example "hair that looked like it hadn't been washed in too long" or "her short stature highlighted the ridiculous size of her sword".

A lot of it also applies to different things apart from appearance, for example clothing.

Also as a random tip, try not to describe what can't be seen or known when you describe the appearance. When you're not doing omniscient pov, you can write "his hands, covered in callouses, made her think he did a lot of physical work" but try not to do something like "his hands, covered in callouses from physical labor, ...". Unless there's a good reason to, such as redescribing character appearance after some event.

The difference is subtle and some may say unimportant, but it helps to set a specific perspective and keep to it.

And to apply all of this to describing a beautiful character.

First, impression, what kind of beauty it is. It can be cute, hot, otherworldly. Every beauty has some kind of type, even if it's androgynous. That can be said directly, but doesn't have to.

Details, so what's most noticeable. Golden hair cascaded down her back, seemingly sparkling as she approached. Her expression turned impassive and her face tightened, only ephasizing its sharp lines and not betraying any emotions. They stared at her, at the generous bossom held tightly in a revealing light green dress and at the dark skin underneath, black like smoke and ethereal. It was the eyes, however, that stopped theirs - narrow, deep green like gemstones, and strinkingly bright in the dim lighting.

See that the third point is already there, within the second. The first is there as well, although it's only implied.
 
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My personal go-to method is not describing the character but focusing on a few key points or traits and go from there. Alternatively, you can describe how others react to that character instead of describing them.

"The first thing he noticed about her was that she did everything to look as ordinary as possible, which ironically made her stand out even more. Her choice of clothes also did a terrible job of making her as plain and unattractive as possible, sure, they hid everything but her face, but if you hide too much then people are going to notice what you try to hide... One also needn't be a detective to notice that she wasn't really here by her own will. Her eyes were continuously darting through the room, frantically looking for a way out, this, combined with her petite frame made her look like a small animal in front of a predator."
 

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Describe what makes them beautiful. Sounds simple? Well, there are different eyes that see different things as ‘beauty’.
 

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Also do people in CN novels seriously say PURE yin? Like, do they not understand that being Pure on either half is like Very VERY BAD?
You do understand that CN MCs usually are PURE yang or have very strong yang? Like, strong enough to help 'poor' girls with PURE yin? In this case, yin and yang was reduced to a trope that tries to justify MC fucking more girls.
 

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You do understand that CN MCs usually are PURE yang or have very strong yang? Like, strong enough to help 'poor' girls with PURE yin? In this case, yin and yang was reduced to a trope that tries to justify MC fucking more girls.
I think this proves my point o.o
 

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Carefully think about the character in the shower and while taking a walk in a beautiful place.
 

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"She's pretty. Go figure it out yourself. We authors can't always spoon-feed you information, can we?"
 

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It depends on how you, the author define beautiful. What one person finds attractive, others may not. Describe her features and figure in a subtle and smooth way so that the reader can decide that for themselves. Never explicitly say that they are beautiful unless the character thinks they are beautiful and make it an afterthought to the descriptions.
 
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It depends on how you, the author define beautiful. What one person finds attractive, others may not. Describe her features and figure in a subtle and smooth way so that the reader can decide that for themselves. Never explicitly say that they are beautiful unless the character thinks they are beautiful and make it an afterthought to the descriptions.
Example, please.
 

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if you do not want to use flowery prose, describe her appearance through interaction: all eyea are drawn to her, gets complimented/flirted with, receives jealousy or envy, etc. it also gives a chance for the character herself to respond. is she aware of her beauty? does it bother her? etc
 

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Example, please.
Her hazel eyes radiated in the setting sun, with red lips pursed in frustration. Against her slender jean covered hips rested her hand like a teapot handle and covering her bountiful chest was a green and red flannel. As she spoke, her blonde wavy hair blew across her face in an unkept and humorous manner. She was gorgeous!
 
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