Word Density, am I writing too many words?

[Freesia.Cutepearl]

I agree. Similar to the show 24, ... I just figured @Freesia.Cutepearl is going for a longer period.

I get what you mean, and I am going for a very long time, years in-story in fact, with current plans.

Sorry, I didn’t see the spoiler earlier. This is more a stylistic approach, but if you are worried about word count being too long, you can try to remove some parts that may be redundant.

ex: The first paragraph

I follow the man in the long, dark coat. Behind me, in a dirty tan cloak, the other man waits, holding the woman in green by the door of iron bars. She doesn’t struggle anymore.

I turn and catch up to the man in the long coat. We walk down a hall of iron-barred cells, mostly empty, except the few used for storage. Near the end, doors turn to solid wood.

This may not seem like a huge difference, but it’s approximately 30% less words. So a chapter of 5,000 words might become 3,500. 50,000 could become 35,000.

Again, that’s stylistic. Your style is your style, I’m just saying if you’re worried about word count being too high (which is probably the opposite of most writers).

On this change, I like it but I also, wanted to comment on the woman over time to show her tiring out and losing the ability to struggle as she was previously, I'm not entirely sure how important it really is, but it felt important to me.

She is meant to be a really strong character and struggled valiantly against two large men for quite a while before arriving at this building, if not for being caught off guard and having a magic impeding collar placed on her neck she could easily take the two men, up until recently even with the collar, one alone would have struggled to keep hold of her.

Her being out of strength is a plot point as her inability to struggle is amplified when she is given an accidental overdose of a "Serenity Potion" by one of the men, shortly after this in order to keep her from trying anything once she is brought before the 'boss man' so to speak.

I actually don't know that show but that sounds like an intriguing concept. Guess I'll go check that out ~

Not watched much of it but it did seem really interesting, there was a movie I recall watching some time ago that was a similar premise, the entire movie was real-time. So the two-ish hour movie was two-ish hours of story-time.

-Just googled for it, It was called Phone Booth and was made in 2002, from what I recall it was pretty good.

Phone Booth (2002) ⭐ 7.1 | Crime, Thriller

1h 21m | R

www.imdb.com

 

[yansusustories]

Not watched much of it but it did seem really interesting, there was a movie I recall watching some time ago that was a similar premise, the entire movie was real-time. So the two-ish hour movie was two-ish hours of story-time.

-Just googled for it, It was called Phone Booth and was made in 2002, from what I recall it was pretty good.

I somehow came for writing-related stuff and now I get series and movie recommendations. Gosh, I love SH

 

[Freesia.Cutepearl]

I somehow came for writing-related stuff and now I get series and movie recommendations. Gosh, I love SH

Just you wait, @Nahrenne has cornered me into writing a short story about Trending-Tab-chan. It's currently in another tab. Yes, Tab-chan is in her own Tab. It's Tab-ception.

 

[RepresentingCaution]

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